Jeff I’d have to listen again, but I’d break it up into verse/chorus, meaning push the chorus segments (bass and rhythm if I were doing it) then lay back again in the verses.
Just a thought, your tune, your production.
I really think that was what Keith meant by “doesn’t go anywhere”. Early on I would get a midi backing track working enough to play over and then kind of “forget” about it.
HTH,
t