ant_in_wales Posted February 13, 2022 Share Posted February 13, 2022 Happy Valentine's Day my lovelies You all gave me some great feedback on a song - "Decent lyrics, poor arrangement" - so I've spent some time working out a different style and key and I'm now much happier. I managed to find some Boogie Woogie piano and bass MIDI parts which meant I could change key and tempo in seconds. Well, it took the rhythm section seconds, I took longer. I'd be very curious to know what everyone thinks. Is the vocal too quiet and is there too much reverb? I want to get someone to cover it (and have it on the radio every Twixmas) but it to be clear to a listener how it should sound. The irony of looking to write a commercial song in a style which peaked in 1953 isn't lost on me 🙂 Best wishes 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bjornpdx Posted February 14, 2022 Share Posted February 14, 2022 Never heard of Twixmas before. Good description. My first impressions as a casual listener using headphones: Seemed like the lyrics were trying to catch up to the music at times so maybe the tempo is too fast? Or there are too many words to fit the measure? Something like that. Also, the voc doesn't have enough presence, so bring it up a bit. The lyrics are very good and so is your delivery so it's promising for sure. -Bjorn 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ant_in_wales Posted February 14, 2022 Author Share Posted February 14, 2022 Thanks Bjorn I have been backwards and forwards on the vocals - if I make them higher then the music seems to go too quiet. I'll try 1db boost perhaps. I think the song does race ahead of my abilities as a singer, the dream is for a real singer to take it forward. Thank you for your feedback. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jack c. Posted February 14, 2022 Share Posted February 14, 2022 Is the vocal too quiet and is there too much reverb? did insert send to buss for verb?yes a tad to much verb.nice.jack c. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bajan Blue Posted February 14, 2022 Share Posted February 14, 2022 19 hours ago, bjornpdx said: Never heard of Twixmas before. Good description. My first impressions as a casual listener using headphones: Seemed like the lyrics were trying to catch up to the music at times so maybe the tempo is too fast? Or there are too many words to fit the measure? Something like that. Also, the voc doesn't have enough presence, so bring it up a bit. The lyrics are very good and so is your delivery so it's promising for sure. -Bjorn what Bjorn said!! too many words, not enough music.... This is a very lyrically/vocally driven track, so the vocals come first and the music comes second - if I was mixing this, that's the way I would approach it - saying that this could be really good once the timing is sorted Cheers Nigel 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makke Posted February 14, 2022 Share Posted February 14, 2022 Nice boogie song. Sounds good for me. Like recorded at small club. A live performance ambience, only audience voices missed. Good job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ant_in_wales Posted February 14, 2022 Author Share Posted February 14, 2022 18 minutes ago, Makke said: Nice boogie song. Sounds good for me. Like recorded at small club. A live performance ambience, only audience voices missed. Good job! Thanks @Makke - I wondered about dubbing a bit of fake crowd on. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David Sprouse Posted February 15, 2022 Share Posted February 15, 2022 This is great. I missed crowd noise as well, and maybe a sing along would work well. It reminds me of something RINGO might write. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
noynekker Posted February 15, 2022 Share Posted February 15, 2022 I like the sense of fun you've put into this one . . . yes, an older genre of music, was I born yet ? . . . but it kept me listening, and my brain cracked a smile. Now, If we could just play this for Putin and Biden, well . . . boogie woogie is an international language by now, so everything will work out fine. 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wookiee Posted February 16, 2022 Share Posted February 16, 2022 My first impression is that this has just a tad to much reverb on everything. I am aware there is a genre that calls for this but I am not sure that this falls in genre. As for Twixmas sounds like something a Hobbit woudl suffer from between meals. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin Walsh Posted February 16, 2022 Share Posted February 16, 2022 I'm with Wookie, too much reverb on the pianos, but the vocal tracks seems okay, just needs a bit more presence. You have a good voice, and your personality comes through with it. Just keep singing and you won't need to hand your songs over to others to sing. As you keep writing and singing, you may find yourself naturally evolving styles and structures that favor the way your unique voice works. Of course, then you'll be stuck with songs that don't really work for anyone else ha! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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