Glenn Stanton Posted October 23, 2023 Share Posted October 23, 2023 (edited) maybe it needs some cowbell and/or congas in the [disco] bridge 🙂  during one of my Amsterdam trips, i was playing some guitar in my hotel room with the TV on silent. and of course one of Europe's most beloved series "Baywatch" came on, and it was an episode where the main character was holding a drowning victim and feeling despair / anger but no back story. so i created one... sort of. comments welcome. 106BPM E Major ----------------------------------------------------------------- barefoot on a rocky shore along an ocean of scars tears wash the soles of our feet beneath the light of a million stars it's these experiences that we share that bind us in love caught in the undertow it won't let me go finding it hard to breathe but that's alright by me 'cause she's like a beacon high shining down on me and me like a lonely sailor drydocked lost at sea and this irresistible drive keeping you and me alive feeling love love love caught in the undertow it won't let me go finding it hard to breathe but that's alright by me 'cause she's like an angel high watching over me and me like a broken sinner bent down on my knees and this irresistible drive keeping you and me alive feeling love love love [solo] ahm-------- yeah we're floating oh yeah we're floating {kiss} your lips scorches me like a thousand degrees yeah we're burning oh yeah we're burning {hearts} our hearts beat as one in a slow dance embrace yeah we're yearning oh yeah we're yearning {call} you call out my name with one final breath you say ahhhhh caught in the undertow it won't let me go finding it hard to breathe but that's alright by me 'cause she's like the shining crown reigning over me and me like the healing faithful bowing on the streets and this irresistible drive keeping you and me alive feeling love love love caught in the undertow it won't let me go finding it hard to breathe but that's alright by me barefoot on a rocky shore along an ocean of scars tears wash the soles of our feet beneath the light of a million stars it's these experiences that we share that bind us in love  Edited October 23, 2023 by Glenn Stanton lyrics 3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Teegarden Posted October 24, 2023 Share Posted October 24, 2023 Nice, interesting song!😉 Few comments: Vocals (mainly during the intro) seem not entirely in tempo and sometimes before the beat which was a bit distracting. After that the vocals mostly sound in tempo The drums are a bit clean/static could be more lively Love the change with the sax solo, except it sounds dissonant with the chords at moments making it messy. Maybe it is introduced on purpose to emphasize what the subjects experience. I don't think the song needs that, the unexpected change (sounds a bit hallucinating) is great by itself. If it's a sample, I would change the underlying chords to match it, or use Melodyne to change a few sax notes Love the changes to the different sections and you have a nice voice! We need more original songs like this... 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mark skinner Posted October 24, 2023 Share Posted October 24, 2023 Very interesting and Creative song. I don't think I've heard one like it. This could almost be in the experimental genre. I like the way you returned to the intro before ending it. Don't think it needs a cowbell in the bridge , maybe a fairly strong 4/4 ride.         Enjoyed it .. mark Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jack c. Posted October 25, 2023 Share Posted October 25, 2023 nice leave as is.jack c Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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