Keith Wilby Posted July 30, 2022 Share Posted July 30, 2022 (edited) With apologies in advance, this is the second "downer" in a row that I've posted. Well, life can't always be about happy toe-tappers I guess. This one explores the delicate topic of the hospice, an institution I hope I never end up in 😬 I'm not so sure about the use of the word "baby" in the chorus. It's a bit cheap and throwaway for the weight of the subject matter. Any suggestions on that one would be appreciated. Thanks. Edited August 1, 2022 by Keith Wilby Updated backing vox. Hosted on Soundcloud, I can't figure out how to apply a fade out on Bandlab Unlimited. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bajan Blue Posted July 30, 2022 Share Posted July 30, 2022 Well written and recorded, and the mix sounds excellent - with the structure you have, not quite sure what else you could use for the word Baby - it seems very intrinsic to the track! Those drums sound very good - what did you use? Totally a personal point of view, but i do think it is a bit long - if it were me I would reduce or remove the bridge at 2.42 for instance, but as I said a purely personal observation. Cheers Nigel 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larry T. Posted July 30, 2022 Share Posted July 30, 2022 great job on what i was able to listen to....i've had too many experiences with family members in hospices or "retirement homes" so i really couldn't take listening to much more than the first minute but imho you've nailed the feeling of them 🎶🎶🎶🎶 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Wilby Posted July 31, 2022 Author Share Posted July 31, 2022 18 hours ago, Larry T. said: i really couldn't take listening to much more than the first minute Many thanks Larry. This is a sensitive subject I know, but if it made you feel that way, firstly I'm sorry, but then I must have set some sort of mood so, in that respect, mission accomplished. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Wilby Posted July 31, 2022 Author Share Posted July 31, 2022 19 hours ago, Bajan Blue said: Those drums sound very good - what did you use? Totally a personal point of view, but i do think it is a bit long - if it were me I would reduce or remove the bridge at 2.42 for instance, but as I said a purely personal observation. Thank you Nigel. The drums are Addictive Drums 2 with each channel separated out "post fader" and with plenty of "room" ambience. There are some "extra" snare and tom sounds too sampled from my trusty 90s vintage Yamaha PSR-SQ16. Yes it is long but I like that solo (believe it or not, there used to be another chorus after it and before the final verse, so I sacrificed that) but what I intend to do is a fade out from about 4:20 to 4:50, thus trimming off another 20 seconds. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
freddy j Posted July 31, 2022 Share Posted July 31, 2022 This is indeed a difficult subject but I think your lyrics and music have done a good job in presenting it. Love the bass line and you have done a good job on the lead and background vocals. Well done!!! As far as the length --- I have been exploring South American style Afrobeat music and compared to that this is just a snippet, 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeeringAmps Posted August 6, 2022 Share Posted August 6, 2022 Something none of us "geezers" like to think or talk about... so I'll give it a "quiet" applause 👏 t 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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