Sorry about losing this post. I'm uploading a new mix to Bandlab, as Soundclick free doesn't allow me to replace a file easily. I'll be back in a few minutes with a new version.
OK, here is the newest mix using all your suggestions: https://www.bandlab.com/lynn_wilson/build-a-wall-80486
I turned the vocals, drums, and harmonica up. Bjorn, the backup vocal is just the lead vocal doubled and panned 20R.
Dan, thank you for your kind words and time.
Kevin, I took your suggestion. Thanks!
Larry, more drums!
Will, thanks for taking the time. I looked up your references because I'd heard of them but wasn't that familiar with their ideas. They are all vastly more talented thinkers than the moron that inspired my song (my uncle Albert). Anyway, though the lyrics may not appeal to you, I applaud you for wanting to hear them better. I hope this latest mix helps.