PhonoBrainer

Now Bayou Bill was a Cajun, he lived by hisself in the swamp He hunted alligator fo livin! He just knock'em in the head with a stump.

The video helps move the song along nicely, I'd say it works. It would be interesting to hear the first mix, and compare it to this - I'm sure it's much clearer the second go around . . . I especially like the added measure and the vocal processing in the chorus! The vocals throughout are a strength. A great effort, Lynn! Which is not to say it wasn't also kind of depressing as hell. cheers, -Tom

Yep, count me in. Fun tune, and these lyrics really mesh with your voice and vocal style. Mix-wise, there might be a lot of midrange elements at any given time. I can hear you low-harmonied yourself - that sounds good! But could you maybe take a notch out of that low harmony part? Maybe it might clear up something a little in the middle? Just a thought. <gets off of Freddy's lawn> cheers, -Tom

The British dancehall stomp groove, one of my favorites. Well played all around, and the mix was a particular pleasure as well! cheers, -Tom

Very original. I dig the vocal treatments! cheers, -Tom

Pro chops. A great listen - thank you!

Prime Minister of Iraq?

Can they nail it in one take, or do you have to play it for them?

I invented bread in a loaf. It was the best thing since just before sliced bread.

Nobody really "needs" any of this krapp. The maag 4 has the "air" band up top, which adds life. I find the lower bands are just destroyed by this eq, but I love that top air band. Other than that, the maag 4 must be twice as good as maag 2.

Sorry I'm dumb, soundclick has a super tiny arrow at the very bottom. A nano-aarow.

Just great. I really get the cadence, the groove, and I think that dangerously conventional melody line works and works. You are a good songwriter at the core. Plus! If this were my mix, 1. Tame the too-boomy kick that washes through the vocal, 2. Vocals up a tad, maybe 1db or less, and 3. Probably get it off of soundclick, where a mobile phone listener has to click through four moves to get it to play - at least on my phone, soundclick pages are non-responsive. Anyway, thanks, that one is a keeper, Jesse! -Tom

Hell of a song. The dead lives. I listened on headphones, but I think you could add back a little 400hz or so to the bass, not for mud, but to have more bass definition on headphones. Again, this is a really really cool tune! To be totally picky, in your two wide-panned guitars, (great feel and pickin') you might have a very slight tuning issue. I'm not sure, and maybe it doesn't matter. My takeaway- your songs would kill live, and I wish I was in your band. Cheers, -Tom

Just great. I really get the cadence, the groove, and I think that dangerously conventional melody line works and works. You are a good songwriter at the core. Plus! If this were my mix, 1. Tame the too-boomy kick that washes through the vocal, 2. Vocals up a tad, maybe 1db or less, and 3. Probably get it off of soundclick, where a mobile phone listener has to click through four moves to get it to play - at least on my phone, soundclick pages are non-responsive. Anyway, thanks, that one is a keeper, Jesse! -Tom

Too late, I called the police for you, they should be arriving shortly.?

No self-respecting Buffaloian would go to TGI Friday's for wings. They would go to the airport.

That's a great vocal, and I like the prog-ness. Mixwise maybe everything is drowning out the drums? The drums are definitely in the back of the bus. I like the playing around with time signatures. Was this a project where everybody is adding something remotely? As in, not in the same room? Or was it recorded more or less live? I think all the instruments are well played, but I think in this tune you'd want the vocals up front maybe more, they stand out. cheers, -Tom

Oh hell yeah! Maybe double your lead vocal, as you kind of did in the choruses? Absolutely great riff, great kick-***** ACDC , great guitars, great vocals, and great song concept. Sorry for your loss. Mine passed away 2 years ago. If I'd have written him a song, it would never be as cool as yours!!! And for my Dad it would have been more like Lawrence Welk. cheers, -Tom

I listened to the first version a bit, then compared to the second mix. The 2nd mix is headed in the right direction. Cool tune, cool origins! From the heart, obviously. Congrats on that! Mixwise, I agree with Lynn, a better piano (something with more dynamic range) might help, particularly in the naked intro. I think you could easily go to the chorus, reach for the piano fader, and drop it one or 2 db. The piano is kicking the crap out of your vocal. I can tell you lowered it a bit for the second mix? You are on the right track. The guitars sound great!!! cheers, have you played it for her yet? -Tom

Nice and fun. Nice to know you are retro rawk, plus a bit of Scandanavian 80's synthpop to boot. Its a cool tune. One crit to track down is maybe that open hi-hat on the left side that pops up JUST AFTER the "2 and" in many measures. That open hi hat is a ton louder than it needs to be IMHO. As in, "1 and 2 and 3 and 4 and" Certainly is a breeze to listen to! cheers, -Tom

"Tell her to go back where she belongs" They think you are talking about a woman, But your song is really about the river. Welcome back and good luck!

Personal preference - this is my favorite of all you have shared thus far! Great choices of colors , all creating a manthric sense of calm. Even with the space mosquitoes! I listened on a car stereo, of all things. Great mix as far as that goes. Danke, Herr Wookenstein!

Was her name Wanda? That is, the fish?

That eye thing is pretty killer.