PhonoBrainer

Sorry I'm dumb, soundclick has a super tiny arrow at the very bottom. A nano-aarow.

Just great. I really get the cadence, the groove, and I think that dangerously conventional melody line works and works. You are a good songwriter at the core. Plus! If this were my mix, 1. Tame the too-boomy kick that washes through the vocal, 2. Vocals up a tad, maybe 1db or less, and 3. Probably get it off of soundclick, where a mobile phone listener has to click through four moves to get it to play - at least on my phone, soundclick pages are non-responsive. Anyway, thanks, that one is a keeper, Jesse! -Tom

Hell of a song. The dead lives. I listened on headphones, but I think you could add back a little 400hz or so to the bass, not for mud, but to have more bass definition on headphones. Again, this is a really really cool tune! To be totally picky, in your two wide-panned guitars, (great feel and pickin') you might have a very slight tuning issue. I'm not sure, and maybe it doesn't matter. My takeaway- your songs would kill live, and I wish I was in your band. Cheers, -Tom

Just great. I really get the cadence, the groove, and I think that dangerously conventional melody line works and works. You are a good songwriter at the core. Plus! If this were my mix, 1. Tame the too-boomy kick that washes through the vocal, 2. Vocals up a tad, maybe 1db or less, and 3. Probably get it off of soundclick, where a mobile phone listener has to click through four moves to get it to play - at least on my phone, soundclick pages are non-responsive. Anyway, thanks, that one is a keeper, Jesse! -Tom

Too late, I called the police for you, they should be arriving shortly.?

No self-respecting Buffaloian would go to TGI Friday's for wings. They would go to the airport.

That's a great vocal, and I like the prog-ness. Mixwise maybe everything is drowning out the drums? The drums are definitely in the back of the bus. I like the playing around with time signatures. Was this a project where everybody is adding something remotely? As in, not in the same room? Or was it recorded more or less live? I think all the instruments are well played, but I think in this tune you'd want the vocals up front maybe more, they stand out. cheers, -Tom

Oh hell yeah! Maybe double your lead vocal, as you kind of did in the choruses? Absolutely great riff, great kick-***** ACDC , great guitars, great vocals, and great song concept. Sorry for your loss. Mine passed away 2 years ago. If I'd have written him a song, it would never be as cool as yours!!! And for my Dad it would have been more like Lawrence Welk. cheers, -Tom

I listened to the first version a bit, then compared to the second mix. The 2nd mix is headed in the right direction. Cool tune, cool origins! From the heart, obviously. Congrats on that! Mixwise, I agree with Lynn, a better piano (something with more dynamic range) might help, particularly in the naked intro. I think you could easily go to the chorus, reach for the piano fader, and drop it one or 2 db. The piano is kicking the crap out of your vocal. I can tell you lowered it a bit for the second mix? You are on the right track. The guitars sound great!!! cheers, have you played it for her yet? -Tom

Nice and fun. Nice to know you are retro rawk, plus a bit of Scandanavian 80's synthpop to boot. Its a cool tune. One crit to track down is maybe that open hi-hat on the left side that pops up JUST AFTER the "2 and" in many measures. That open hi hat is a ton louder than it needs to be IMHO. As in, "1 and 2 and 3 and 4 and" Certainly is a breeze to listen to! cheers, -Tom

"Tell her to go back where she belongs" They think you are talking about a woman, But your song is really about the river. Welcome back and good luck!

Personal preference - this is my favorite of all you have shared thus far! Great choices of colors , all creating a manthric sense of calm. Even with the space mosquitoes! I listened on a car stereo, of all things. Great mix as far as that goes. Danke, Herr Wookenstein!

Was her name Wanda? That is, the fish?

That eye thing is pretty killer.

Now that you've said it - what are you saying? ? do you mean entry level studio one won't let you play vst softsynths? If true, that would suck.

You might be right, but still, I'm happy you posted in the coffee house! Kudos for coming out of your . . . self-imposed solitude.

I think "Kakku" would also make an excellent band name. Now I'll just sit back and wait for the snail jokes. . . . still waiting . . .

I'm on the fence. Is it Smaug, or Sauron? nice sounding for sure, but do I imagine there is just a little lower res quality to the upper part of the eq spectrum in their patches? This library has an awesome palette of options, and many patches sound great. Plus you can effect them up, like Tantra. But the sound quality reminds me of Xpand - it's good, very usable, but maybe not killer in the resolution department? Am I making any sense? I'll probably buy it anyway, just throwing my .02 into the wind. cheers, -Tom

Fear of broccoli? Sorry to hear about your Floret' s Syndrome

If it ain't Russ White! Nice to see and hear you back! What a quirky deal you have here! I'm not familiar with the library. For me that lady's voice could use more reverb, I think she wants to be epic. I'd also get to the drums sooner, they have a fun almost psycho-billy beat that juxtaposes nicely. The Euro crowd will like that, I'm guessing. cool deal, Russ, I might just get on Facebook so I can vote you up! cheers, -Tom

Bjorn was around. Ah, from the start, whatever you do for this, musically, is automatically MUCH better than the movie. And what you have done is filled the speakers with swirly evolving goodness. Spoken word has great effects. Just a touch of ssssibilance around 1:50. I think this is wonderful. cheers, -Tom

SOulful. Little Wing in a waltz. You play great, bro.

You should write for Steely Dan, plain and simple! Of course they are defunct. And you have your own thing going on that's great. That bridge or what you might call it, that's really complex and wonderful. I think your vocals here are some of your best vocal work. It's noticeable that you've thought out some reverb/delay and it works. The sax-horn harmonizing towards the end also has this treatment. The organ has nice effects, too. For me, I'm finding the piano a little dry, maybe just a hair of some treatment on it might blend the piano in to the rest. That's a proper fade-out ending! nice choice. cheers, -Tom

You are getting all emotional on us. Like a Norwegian would.

Rerail: I sincerely hope young Bill weathers this with life, limb, property, and DAW intact, not necessarily in that order.