Keith Wilby Posted March 20, 2023 Share Posted March 20, 2023 Hi all, here's my first stab at this song. Comments invited as always, particularly since there's no chorus or middle 8. https://www.bandlab.com/post/d5db4876-04c7-ed11-a8e0-000d3a3f8f45 5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Johnbee58 Posted March 20, 2023 Share Posted March 20, 2023 I don't think it needs a chorus or middle 8. It's very powerful as it is. Very intense. Reminds me of Steve Perry & Journey (Separate Ways (Worlds Apart). ?John B 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Wilby Posted March 20, 2023 Author Share Posted March 20, 2023 38 minutes ago, Johnbee58 said: I don't think it needs a chorus or middle 8. I agree but it's nice to have a little reassurance. I'm at the "can't see the wood for the trees" stage with this one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KSband Posted March 20, 2023 Share Posted March 20, 2023 Nice work, catchy groove. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lynn Wilson Posted March 20, 2023 Share Posted March 20, 2023 My first impression of this song is that you must have had a blast creating this. Your vocal is very convincing and interestingly produced. The driving drum beat really moves the guitar track along, and everything sounds like it's in its right place in the mix. I just knew I was gonna like this song before I even played it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeeringAmps Posted March 20, 2023 Share Posted March 20, 2023 Nice use of delay on the vocal. Sweet guitar work. 10 hours ago, Keith Wilby said: particularly since there's no chorus or middle 8 If something jumps up and bites you add it. If not, the tune stands on its own just as it is. I hold the "thumbs" and "applause" for the final iteration... t 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Wilby Posted March 21, 2023 Author Share Posted March 21, 2023 15 hours ago, Lynn Wilson said: I just knew I was gonna like this song before I even played it. That's praise indeed, many thanks @Lynn Wilson Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bajan Blue Posted March 21, 2023 Share Posted March 21, 2023 Hi Keith Great track, really enjoyed it - I wouldn't change anything Cool stuff Nigel 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Wilby Posted March 21, 2023 Author Share Posted March 21, 2023 25 minutes ago, Bajan Blue said: I wouldn't change anything Really? I thought some of the higher vocal notes were a bit strained ? Thanks for listening though ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mark skinner Posted March 21, 2023 Share Posted March 21, 2023 Keith , off to a Great start on this one. I don't think there's much to add to it. I think I would be tempted to sing on top of some of the guitar licks , like at 0:57-1:03. Might work , might not , and I'd just stick a marker somewhere and "call it a chorus". Very nice guitar work! Enjoyed the energy .. mark 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
freddy j Posted March 21, 2023 Share Posted March 21, 2023 Good work and sounds good as it is. Love the guitar work -- especially those "growling" rhythm guitars! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Wilby Posted March 22, 2023 Author Share Posted March 22, 2023 14 hours ago, mark skinner said: I would be tempted to sing on top of some of the guitar licks That's a good thought, thanks Mark ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AndyB01 Posted March 22, 2023 Share Posted March 22, 2023 Loved the opening - guitar has a great tone and drums sit nicely in the mix - I don't detect any vocal strain. Don't think the non-standard structure matters a hoot. Great work Andy 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RexRed Posted March 27, 2023 Share Posted March 27, 2023 (edited) Great rock tune, I thoroughly enjoyed this! ? The guitar leads reminded me of Styx and the vocal Steve Winwood! Edited March 27, 2023 by RexRed 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FreeEarCandy Posted March 27, 2023 Share Posted March 27, 2023 First, Its a very nice tune-middle 8 or not. Instrumentally the guitar is the featured attraction, but it sounds like it could stand some width, as it sounded a bit boxed & down the middle. Regardless of the guitar being the featured attraction the vocals are always the headliner IMO, so I tend to question when other instruments invade their territory, and there seems to be a lot of stuff coming down the middle in a very narrow way. Nevertheless, in a way I like it. Perhaps because each has its own space in time and things are rarely overlapping at the same time. But the boxy-ness does give it a certain thinness that seems to trouble me. With all that subjective BS said, I do like this tune and enjoyed it. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Wilby Posted March 28, 2023 Author Share Posted March 28, 2023 Thanks for those constructive comments @FreeEarCandy, I do struggle to get a decent guitar sound with the relatively meagre assets at my disposal, but I do agree that there's room for improvement now that you come to mention it. I'll see what I can do ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paul Bush Posted March 28, 2023 Share Posted March 28, 2023 Sounds fine to me, great vocals...love the drum fills . 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Old Joad Posted March 28, 2023 Share Posted March 28, 2023 On 3/20/2023 at 1:46 PM, DeeringAmps said: Nice use of delay on the vocal. Sweet guitar work. If something jumps up and bites you add it. If not, the tune stands on its own just as it is. I hold the "thumbs" and "applause" for the final iteration... t agreed, if it ain't broken don't fix it?? 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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