Keith Wilby 239 Posted March 20 Hi all, here's my first stab at this song. Comments invited as always, particularly since there's no chorus or middle 8. https://www.bandlab.com/post/d5db4876-04c7-ed11-a8e0-000d3a3f8f45 5 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Johnbee58 465 Posted March 20 I don't think it needs a chorus or middle 8. It's very powerful as it is. Very intense. Reminds me of Steve Perry & Journey (Separate Ways (Worlds Apart). 😀John B 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Keith Wilby 239 Posted March 20 38 minutes ago, Johnbee58 said: I don't think it needs a chorus or middle 8. I agree but it's nice to have a little reassurance. I'm at the "can't see the wood for the trees" stage with this one. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KSband 462 Posted March 20 Nice work, catchy groove. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lynn Wilson 812 Posted March 20 My first impression of this song is that you must have had a blast creating this. Your vocal is very convincing and interestingly produced. The driving drum beat really moves the guitar track along, and everything sounds like it's in its right place in the mix. I just knew I was gonna like this song before I even played it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
DeeringAmps 2,188 Posted March 20 Nice use of delay on the vocal. Sweet guitar work. 10 hours ago, Keith Wilby said: particularly since there's no chorus or middle 8 If something jumps up and bites you add it. If not, the tune stands on its own just as it is. I hold the "thumbs" and "applause" for the final iteration... t 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Keith Wilby 239 Posted March 21 15 hours ago, Lynn Wilson said: I just knew I was gonna like this song before I even played it. That's praise indeed, many thanks @Lynn Wilson Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bajan Blue 1,500 Posted March 21 Hi Keith Great track, really enjoyed it - I wouldn't change anything Cool stuff Nigel 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Keith Wilby 239 Posted March 21 25 minutes ago, Bajan Blue said: I wouldn't change anything Really? I thought some of the higher vocal notes were a bit strained 😬 Thanks for listening though 👍 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
mark skinner 904 Posted March 21 Keith , off to a Great start on this one. I don't think there's much to add to it. I think I would be tempted to sing on top of some of the guitar licks , like at 0:57-1:03. Might work , might not , and I'd just stick a marker somewhere and "call it a chorus". Very nice guitar work! Enjoyed the energy .. mark 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
freddy j 751 Posted March 21 Good work and sounds good as it is. Love the guitar work -- especially those "growling" rhythm guitars! 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Keith Wilby 239 Posted March 22 14 hours ago, mark skinner said: I would be tempted to sing on top of some of the guitar licks That's a good thought, thanks Mark 👍 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
AndyB01 584 Posted March 22 Loved the opening - guitar has a great tone and drums sit nicely in the mix - I don't detect any vocal strain. Don't think the non-standard structure matters a hoot. Great work Andy 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
RexRed 215 Posted March 27 (edited) Great rock tune, I thoroughly enjoyed this! 👍 The guitar leads reminded me of Styx and the vocal Steve Winwood! Edited March 27 by RexRed 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
FreeEarCandy 125 Posted March 27 First, Its a very nice tune-middle 8 or not. Instrumentally the guitar is the featured attraction, but it sounds like it could stand some width, as it sounded a bit boxed & down the middle. Regardless of the guitar being the featured attraction the vocals are always the headliner IMO, so I tend to question when other instruments invade their territory, and there seems to be a lot of stuff coming down the middle in a very narrow way. Nevertheless, in a way I like it. Perhaps because each has its own space in time and things are rarely overlapping at the same time. But the boxy-ness does give it a certain thinness that seems to trouble me. With all that subjective BS said, I do like this tune and enjoyed it. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Keith Wilby 239 Posted March 28 Thanks for those constructive comments @FreeEarCandy, I do struggle to get a decent guitar sound with the relatively meagre assets at my disposal, but I do agree that there's room for improvement now that you come to mention it. I'll see what I can do 👍 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Paul Bush 357 Posted March 28 Sounds fine to me, great vocals...love the drum fills . 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Old Joad 2,525 Posted March 28 On 3/20/2023 at 1:46 PM, DeeringAmps said: Nice use of delay on the vocal. Sweet guitar work. If something jumps up and bites you add it. If not, the tune stands on its own just as it is. I hold the "thumbs" and "applause" for the final iteration... t agreed, if it ain't broken don't fix it👍🏼 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
