Anyone Care to Waltz? - updated

[Keith Wilby]

I don't often stray from 4/4 time but I've had a go with this one:

https://www.bandlab.com/post/4b5776c9-b901-ed11-b47a-281878315d59

Some lyrics adapted from the 1972 film "Sleuth" (well it was good enough for Morrisey) and also from "A Few Good Men". Comments welcome as always.

EDIT: link corrected - this is the version that I meant to post and has a lead guitar solo.

EDIT 2: 

Here's the remix.

I've taken some bottom end off the organ to give the bass a chance, also I've swapped the order of the 2nd and 3rd verses. I'd be interested to hear what you all think of that and whether or not the story still flows. The idea is that I now have "pregnant silences" followed by the stop - I considered moving the stop instead, but I think that might be too early in the song to have one. Any thoughts?

https://www.bandlab.com/post/17b3b057-9102-ed11-b47a-281878315d59

EDIT 3: 

@jwnicholson78 I've added a leslie organ to the middle 8 and coda as suggested.

https://www.bandlab.com/post/e8fc39df-d205-ed11-b47a-281878315d59

Edited July 17, 2022 by Keith Wilby
Remix

[mark skinner]

Another Great vocal job! I loved the note choice at 1:46. You've for sure done some Fantastic stuff this year. Powerful drum track , didn't sound like a typical waltz. I'd like to hear you belt out some blues sometime ..    Enjoyed it ..  mark

[Keith Wilby]

11 minutes ago, mark skinner said:

Another Great vocal job! I loved the note choice at 1:46. You've for sure done some Fantastic stuff this year. Powerful drum track , didn't sound like a typical waltz. I'd like to hear you belt out some blues sometime ..    Enjoyed it ..  mark

Thank you so much Mark, you have much more confidence in my vocals than I do ?

[mark skinner]

I think you are now singing With confidence , and that makes a Big difference..      

[Guest]

Agree with Mark - this is a strong vocal - you can feel the emotional connection; I felt there was something of a Paul Weller vibe at times (his solo stuff).

Great job all round. 

Andy

Edited July 11, 2022 by AndyB01

[DeeringAmps]

We’ll done!

t

[DeeringAmps]

Note: @mark skinner & @AndyB01 it’s worth a second trip thru for the guitar solo. 

t

[KSband]

Another good one, very nice.

[Guest]

5 hours ago, DeeringAmps said:

Note: @mark skinner & @AndyB01 it’s worth a second trip thru for the guitar solo. 

t

It most certainly was - an excellent addition. ?

Andy

[jwnicholson78]

Nice work with some really cool cord changes.

There was some low organ in the left channel that seemed to me to muddy up the bass line,  which is a shame because i rather like the bass.

Well done.

Jeff

[Keith Wilby]

6 hours ago, jwnicholson78 said:

some low organ in the left channel that seemed to me to muddy up the bass line

Thanks Jeff. I agree and I've added some EQ to the organ now that should take care of it for a remix ?

[Keith Wilby]

Here's the remix.

I've taken some bottom end off the organ to give the bass a chance, also I've swapped the order of the 2nd and 3rd verses. I'd be interested to hear what you all think of that and whether or not the story still flows. The idea is that I now have "pregnant silences" followed by the stop - I considered moving the stop instead, but I think that might be too early in the song to have one. Any thoughts?

https://www.bandlab.com/post/17b3b057-9102-ed11-b47a-281878315d59

[mark skinner]

Keith, Really nice changes in this version. Enjoyed the lead guitar as well.        mark

[jwnicholson78]

Bass and organ are much more separated and distinct. Nice job.

I'd love to hear the organ go up an octave at some point and play some fills to add punch in some of the bigger moments.  But that's just me, I'm a sucker for a Leslie.

[Keith Wilby]

11 hours ago, jwnicholson78 said:

I'm a sucker for a Leslie.

I might just give that a whirl ?

Edited July 17, 2022 by Keith Wilby

[Bajan Blue]

A good track and I like the alterations you have made as you have gone along

Cool

Nigel