daryl1968 Posted October 15, 2019 Share Posted October 15, 2019 (edited) Hi folks Here's a new one that a woman called Patty Lakamp wrote the lyrics, I wrote and recorded the music for and the current Mrs Daryl1968 and I sang. nits and crits welcome Lyrics are below the link Online Lyrics by Patty Lakamp © Music written and performed by Staypress with Elizabeth Greenway V1 He: I go online to meet my Valentine and we hit it out of the park She: We feel the heat, so why don't we meet and see if there’s really a spark Prechorus Your simple text about what to do next Has my stomach tied up in knots I thought I was ready, but I feel unsteady and I’m having second thoughts Chorus: Online He: I’m a little bit taller Online She: My waist is smaller Online He: My abs are flatter Online She: My thighs don’t matter Online Both: You think I’m ideal But will you still love me when we meet for real? V2 He: If you want to try it, I’ll go on a diet so you won’t see me at my worst She: Can we postpone? I’ll apply for a loan so I can get a facelift first PrechorusChorus Bridge: He: I might have exaggerated minor details She: It’s possible I stretched the truth He: Perhaps I understated where I tip the scales She: I may have misstated my youth He: I’m sure you and I could be the perfect couple She: I bet we’d make a helluva team He: If we meet in real life it could burst our bubble Both: But online, we’re living the dream Chorus Edited October 15, 2019 by daryl1968 5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hidden Symmetry Posted October 15, 2019 Share Posted October 15, 2019 Good tune & mix. Interesting take on today's dating scene & culture. -great job 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bjornpdx Posted October 16, 2019 Share Posted October 16, 2019 Daryl Absolutely love the lyrics. Wonderful word play and rhythm and great story. "Will you still love me when we meet for real." ? Mrs Daryl's voice could be raised a bit in volume but that's about all I can nitpick. Great stuff. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
amiller Posted October 16, 2019 Share Posted October 16, 2019 ‘Good one...great job! ?? 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Johnbee58 Posted October 17, 2019 Share Posted October 17, 2019 The words and music make for a really cute tune. The Mrs has a great voice and really compliments your style. You should use her more often. That's kind of the reality of relationships that begin online. BTW-Love that puppy!❤️ ?JB 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bajan Blue Posted October 17, 2019 Share Posted October 17, 2019 Daryl Great track - well written, performed and sung Nigel 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeeringAmps Posted October 18, 2019 Share Posted October 18, 2019 You and Patty are making quite a formidable songwriting team. Adding MrsDaryl is icing on the cake! I ‘m all in with a big ??. Really, really good. Tom 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ramscapri Posted October 18, 2019 Share Posted October 18, 2019 Cool Catchy song Daryl with a nice rhythm. Well sung by you and the Mrs. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Douglas Kirby Posted October 18, 2019 Share Posted October 18, 2019 Clever lyrics - I really enjoyed them. The mix is top-notch - sounds a bit 80's to me, which is cool - a bit of a Human League vibe to it, because you have the female singer. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daryl1968 Posted October 20, 2019 Author Share Posted October 20, 2019 On 10/15/2019 at 7:01 PM, Hidden Symmetry said: Good tune & mix. Interesting take on today's dating scene & culture. -great job Thank you very much On 10/16/2019 at 5:06 AM, bjornpdx said: Daryl Absolutely love the lyrics. Wonderful word play and rhythm and great story. "Will you still love me when we meet for real." ? Mrs Daryl's voice could be raised a bit in volume but that's about all I can nitpick. Great stuff. Thanks Bjorn. I think I agree with you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
freddy j Posted October 20, 2019 Share Posted October 20, 2019 Great lyrics and really a great music/arrangement complement the lyrics wonderfully. The performances by the Mrs. and you are absoflippinlutely an aural treat in listening. This song has your signature and it is always a pleasure to hear your song. Keep 'em coming. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PhonoBrainer Posted October 20, 2019 Share Posted October 20, 2019 Yep that's a total winner. Lyrics are a home run and very well served by the wonderful arrangement. Both vocals are a treat to listen to! I think more people should hear this one. cheers, -Tom 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AndyB01 Posted October 20, 2019 Share Posted October 20, 2019 @daryl1968 you did it again with this one - the vocals are great and my compliments to the lyricist - very clever and contemporary stuff. Andy 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daryl1968 Posted October 21, 2019 Author Share Posted October 21, 2019 On 10/16/2019 at 2:05 PM, amiller said: ‘Good one...great job! ?? Thank you very kindly On 10/17/2019 at 1:33 PM, Johnbee58 said: The words and music make for a really cute tune. The Mrs has a great voice and really compliments your style. You should use her more often. That's kind of the reality of relationships that begin online. BTW-Love that puppy!❤️ ?JB Thanks John - yes, he is cute isn't he? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David Sprouse Posted October 21, 2019 Share Posted October 21, 2019 sounds good. Jocose. You two must make the church choir fun..... 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daryl1968 Posted October 22, 2019 Author Share Posted October 22, 2019 On 10/17/2019 at 3:28 PM, Bajan Blue said: Daryl Great track - well written, performed and sung Nigel Thanks a lot Nigel On 10/18/2019 at 2:58 AM, DeeringAmps said: You and Patty are making quite a formidable songwriting team. Adding MrsDaryl is icing on the cake! I ‘m all in with a big ??. Really, really good. Tom Very kind of you Tom. Thanks a lot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kennywtelejazz Posted October 22, 2019 Share Posted October 22, 2019 Wow that song was fantastic on so many levels . Super clever lyrics that mock today's online dating practices due to the social media influence . I Loved the synths , they sound so grounded and Retro Modular ... You and your wife's singing and vocals drew me in closer as the song went on because I wanted to hear more about the shedding of the multi layers of lies and half truths people use all the time online to capture and ensnare ... Daryl , you and your wife are indeed a rare talent . I'm glad I have gotten the opportunity to have listened to some of your music . Kenny 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Starise Posted October 22, 2019 Share Posted October 22, 2019 Great subject matter. If only we could be our online selves.....As I have come to expect from you this is yet another pristine mix. Tell me if I'm wrong about your mixes ( I probably am) It sounds as if you are making some deep cuts in EQ to get such clarity in the mix. I feel as if I'm in a huge room with only a few items in it when I listen to a mix you've made. I have often almost envied you for that . I like this approach and it works very well with you and the missus here. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SPAK Posted October 23, 2019 Share Posted October 23, 2019 I know I commented on SC but I just wanted to say after a lot of listens to this I think overall it's a brilliant bit of wordsmithing and mixing ... send it to the BBC they might have a sitcom that needs this for a intro roll ... 10 out'a 10 from me though ( for wot it's worth )? ? Steve 2 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PhonoBrainer Posted October 23, 2019 Share Posted October 23, 2019 19 hours ago, Starise said: Great subject matter. If only we could be our online selves.....As I have come to expect from you this is yet another pristine mix. Tell me if I'm wrong about your mixes ( I probably am) It sounds as if you are making some deep cuts in EQ to get such clarity in the mix. I feel as if I'm in a huge room with only a few items in it when I listen to a mix you've made. I have often almost envied you for that . I like this approach and it works very well with you and the missus here. Yes, if you just focus on the vocals, a lot of low cut is going on I think. Daryl really knows his eq and routing. Always a masterclass to listen to! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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