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Catchy. I hear some low end in this one, only now and then some pops in. Just my taste but I would put it throughout and rhythmically along with the drum stuff. Good riffs.

Hi Dean, You would put it online somewhere like youtube or bandcamp or soundcloud etc, then you start a new topic as you have here and then put the link to the song wherever you posted it online into the body of the post. There may be other ways but thats what I know.

Nice. I wasnt sure if the coyotes were in the song or in my vicinity ha. 1. I think the main vox are clear and good level. 2 The upright bass sounds a lot like the electric bass to me, with the upright being a little bit more smushy but very similar. So either way works I think, 3 the guitar in the intro is prominent but it is the star at that moment so I like it. Enjoyed it from the desert coyote land....

Nice, I like the revision, sounds great. I was especially listening for the drums being out of sync with your playing and honestly I couldn't tell. At times the guitar strum has a part of it thats low compared to the rest of the strum pattern so maybe that gap in the strum so to speak gives a little offness. Anyways a great song, love your voice.

Yeah the revision does have slightly more dynamics changes so I like this version better. If you want to play with it some more, like Nigel said, add some different synths for variety here and there. But, it has a simplicity to it that works with your voice and lyrics and the style of the song so I think this is what you are going for. Its a good song.

Yes you made synth pop and it sounds right on. I enjoy all your songs, all good quality.

I like it. Nice development. Good instrumentation. Maybe make the chorus a little bigger somehow. Some higher pitched synth there or strings in the background, a little louder? It has a similar dynamic throughout which is not a bad thing to me, but I think it could be more interesting with some dynamic changes. Enjoyed it

Hi Steve, thanks for listening and your feedback. I appreciate this forum so much and the advice I get here, several comments to make the lead vocal fit better. I had more trouble mixing this song than any other I have done for some reason, just a lot of stuff in the same frequencies and trying to get each part heard ok. Thanks for listening a few times too. I definitely will remix this and work at making the lead vocal more clear and with a stronger presence. I appreciate that your listens found the song and arrangement great and the vocals and lyrics work well, and the part that I have talent ha. Thank you, a pleasure to share it here.

Sounds good, steady. Nice vocals. I was expecting a bit more going on in the low end?

Hi Nigel. thank you for listening and your comment. Cool and working well is appreciated!

Intro sets the song up well. Good arrangement, interesting changes. Love the guitars. Has a nice classic rock feel to it. Well done.

Floaty. It does have a sense of freedom. I do love the pedal steel playing. It all works together nicely. Pleasing.

Enjoyed it. Sentimental. Like traditional story telling song with fuller instrumentation. I like that your pleasing voice is so prominent and easy to understand as the words are meaningful and the theme universal. Nice choices, works well. Since the drums are plain I'm guessing this version isn’t with revised drums.

Sounds really great. From the desert where the sky is big and the coyotes are regularly singing around here. . No campfires anymore, too dangerous, sadly. And on very rare occasion a rattle snake. Just a little more highs on your voice might add some more clarity. Love the mood and the story.

Mellow. Very dramatic and emotion-full. Nice chords and choice of instruments. I like your voice and the fx on it. I like the repetitive piano riff. Interesting how something basic like that riff can be repeated over and over in some songs and feel like it belongs there as things behind it change. I think it sounds cohesively expressive and very well done.

Hi Jesse, thank you for listening and your feedback. I will mess with making the lead vocal more clear and more prominent when I get back to this one. Glad to be hearing this feedback so I can improve it, especially the legibility. All me is all I have to work with ha. Oh the last line, I appreciate your mentioning it and how you feel about it. All the lines are important to me, but that's the nail in the coffin so to speak. I was told once although my speaking voice has lost my brooklyn accent, but my singing still has some ny accent in it. Like duh-feated, vs de-feated. Funny.

Hi Martin, thanks for listening and for your comment. Yes, the lyrics are important to me as this started as a poem, so I appreciate the feedback that it's hard to understand. jack suggested I made the vocals louder and I will revisit this, so your suggestion to work on lyrics clarity with some uneffected vocal added in is a good idea too. Thanks!

Did you play the fast note parts or use an arp? The guitar melody almost speaks. Nice unexpected changes and incoming instrumentation. It has a bit of a broadway feel here and there. The mix sounds well done. Good song.

Hi Larry T., thanks for listening and your interesting comment. Gives me a lot to think about, your overview perspective of my songs. In a good way. I appreciate your comment very much and glad you think its nice work and cool, especially since it came from a difficult place. I value feedback on the song forum very much. Thanks again!

Sounds really good. It is pretty full sounding and a bit complicated rhythmically and doesn’t sound bare bones at all. Easy to get lost in this one. Nice.

Sounds lovely, relaxing, summery. Sometimes what we try for is not what we wind up with ha. I don’t think the backup singers are over the top. Nice one.

Very lovely intro. The piano sounds great. Nice movements into the different sections. Sounds emotional and passionate. I was getting a bit of overtones/resonances in the very highest notes (not sure what the right description would be), maybe just my system or my ears ha. Well done.

I like it. I know what you mean about listening to a song in progress and hearing stuff to improve. Intriguing title. Good instruments playing. Good dynamics and changes. Keep at it till you are happy with it.

Hi freddy j, thanks for listening and your feedback. Glad you liked the way I did the vocal parts and the effect, It is pretty different for me to make a song in this style but it had to be this way. I'm thoroughly enjoying your positive comment !

Sounds really great. Definitely not gonna doze off. Lots of great guitar stuff I love. Well assembled. Rockin.