bjornpdx

This is very good. It just sounds like a traveling kind of song.
Nice chord changes. Fit well with the song but they got a  bit repetitive maybe?
Voc started strong but seemed to get buried about 1/2 way thru.
Just my opinion that's all.
Great song. I enjoyed it.
-Bjorn

Good song. I like it.
I agree with John B above about EQ. Also I think you could drop the section 2:10 - 3:00.
Just my 2 cents.
-Bjorn

Makke, the title of the song and tune sounds maybe Japanese theme? But then you have the cool surf sound in there too. Well done.
-Bjorn

I checked out Acustica a while ago but didn't get into it that far because it seemed kind of complicated to me.  Have to say your mix sounds really good so no doubt it's worth the effort.  Really like the song.
-Bjorn  

Wookie, very creative use of all those Arturia instruments and Cherry audio. And sounds like you had a lot of fun too. The beginning part really drew me in. Really liked how things developed after that. Good one.

-Bjorn

This one goes in my Doug Kirby top 5 hits.
Besides the solo guitar playing, I'm always impressed with how you do your accompanying tracks too. Just great.

I saw a news report on NPR a while ago where they mentioned Westerly and I thought hey that sounds familiar. It had something to do with giving vaccines in Rhode Island and it featured your town.
-Bjorn

Tom, very nice. Relaxing as all get out. Wasn't sure if that repetitive note was working for me but it fit right in there after a while. Kind of hypnotic actually.
-Bjorn

Elephant in the Room

I posted this song a few years ago in the old forum. I was never happy with it so I did it over and it's better now. I like the lyrics anyway.

Thanks for listening/commenting.

We all know
no one's immune
from the elephant
in the room
 
It's a fact of life but
we don't think about it
It's just  sort of there
At the edge a bit

Once upon a time  
There was lots of time ahead
I'll write that song
This year you said

You never got to it
Other things  to do
The time is gone
With nothing to show

Does it really matter
to write that song
something to remember me
After I'm gone

Three am
I'm staring at the ceiling
There's a whisper in my ear
The elephant is stirring

I think about my life  
Lying there awake
all that I remember
are all of my mistakes

I made a lot of choices
I dwell on them again
Playing back scenarios
Of things I cannot change

I've let some people down
Need to make amends  
But I've burned all my bridges
Never see them again

What's it all about
Something to ponder
Is there any purpose
Or nothing there I wonder

existential musings
in the daylight
sobering  reality in
blackness of night

Three am
I'm staring at the ceiling  
I catch a glimpse of something
The elephant is stirring

Gray light of morning
streams thru the blinds
the elephant retreats into
the shadows of my mind

Made some notes while listening
Very good production - reverbs and delays sound great. Sounded a bit country in places.
Love the chorus. Bass line - A+.
Clear voc and blends well with instruments.
Sounds pretty darn good to me.
-Bjorn

Jack
You have a lot going on in there and I like the overall sound. I just couldn't understand most of the lyrics and I wish I could.
I'm thinking "Green Book" refers to the African-American travel guide from the 40s and 50's but I don't really know.
-Bjorn

Thanks all!  I appreciate the listens and comments

-Bjorn

What's on the top shelf?  I'll never know.   😄

Most fun song I've heard in a long time.  Really well done and I hope you a lot of success.

-Bjorn

David, a very pleasant stroll in the countryside. Thanks for posting.
-Bjorn

Rockin' out! Great collab. Love the guitar and all the stuff going on in the background and of course the patented Freddy J lyrics. Great job.
-Bjorn

I know what you're talking about. Those 3am staring at the ceiling thoughts can be sobering.
Not sure if the sudden stops in the song work. Maybe after the stop have a quick fade in to the vocal as the "thoughts" start up again.
To me the vocal sounds like it was recorded during a live performance in a club or bar which I actually like.
-Bjorn

Another auditory and visual treat from Bajan Blue.   I like how the sound snaps you to attention right from the start.
-Bjorn

Hey Steve, very nice love song and your voice is just perfect for the genre. I thought the voc track needs to stand out bit more. Also I thought I was hearing something like static throughout the song and especially at the fade out, like aliasing noise or something. But I should mention I have some hearing issues so that might just be me. That's the reason I don't comment so much on audio engineering stuff 'cause I just don't trust my ears.

-Bjorn

Love it.  Reminds me of The Pearl by Budd and Eno so you did a good job dedicating the song to Harold Budd.
-Bjorn

Thanks all for listening. Appreciate it.
Kurt - Yeah, I love the Embertone Joshua Bell violin. Really easy to make it sound near authentic.
David - I really hope melody makes a come back. Seems to be missing lately.

Love the beginning blast off bit! Same as David, I got a moving thru space kind of feeling. Love the transitions as the journey continues.  
6:00 change up is kind of abrupt, almost like a different song starting in.

Gonna put this one in my top 5 Wookie hits.

-Bjorn

John, I'm used to lyrics like you see in traditional poems - fairly strict rhythm, accents in the right places and words have to rhyme. Your lyrics don't follow the "rules" but the song sounds great anyway. Seems like there would be a lot of different ways to sing it.  Do you do it the same way every time or can it come out way different once in a while?

In my limited non-pro experience I've found that double tracking or a short delay like Lynn mentioned above is an effective way to thicken the voc.

-Bjorn

I like the repeating refrain at the beginning and the bass line leading the way.
I just picked up Cherry Audio 8 Voice synth but haven't checked it out yet. Will definitely do that after listening to this.
-Bjorn

I like it! Jesse, you surprise me once in a while going off in other directions like that.
 

I'm still trying to decode the name of the song.  . I just know it's gotta  mean something.

Just a pretty melody I wrote a long time ago but re-done now with updated instruments.
Inspired by Walt Whitman's poem Gliding O'er All
Do not drive or operate heavy machinery while listening.
At one time the melody fit the words.

Thanks for listening or commenting.

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Gliding o'er all, through all
Thru Nature Time and Space
As a ship on the waters advancing
The voyage of the soul -  not life alone
Death, many deaths I'll sing
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OTS Steel Strings
AmpleSound Martin guitar
Embertone Joshua Bell violin
u-He Diva

Barry
Beautiful song, beautiful story.
Since you asked for scrutiny I'll point out a couple of spots that stood out to me.

0:42 "hot"  sounded glitchy

Your lyrics came across nice and clear most of the time except at
1:19, 2:36, 3:47  where the words got a bit buried.
I liked the part about the house your father built but I didn't catch the rest of the story.

Putting that aside, you got the emotion through loud and clear. Love the imagery of snow drifts on a cold and silent winter night. Very effective string accompaniment too.

-Bjorn