Keith Wilby Posted Thursday at 01:15 PM Share Posted Thursday at 01:15 PM (edited) That's not the title, it's what I think I might be doing with this one. It's "All Work No Play" and it's a kinda comment on corporate working and some of the BS that goes with it, something I used to do before I retired. Corporate work that is, not BS. Well perhaps a bit of both 🤭 Any comments appreciated, even if it's "give up, it's rubbish" 😃 https://www.bandlab.com/revisions/b8bf7518-9081-ef11-bdfd-000d3a980db3?sharedKey=SHNoeQIpfUSizE3Hgh1PZQ Edited Thursday at 02:04 PM by Keith Wilby Link replaced. 5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeeringAmps Posted Thursday at 03:19 PM Share Posted Thursday at 03:19 PM Surely not “rubbish” Keith. Did have to listen on my iPhone, so not prepared to offer any suggestions. I’ll have a proper listen later and get back… t 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wookiee Posted Friday at 11:12 AM Share Posted Friday at 11:12 AM The mix sounds fine here Keith, as to the horse no need to flog it, the commentary in the lyrics is valid especially in these troubled times. I do wonder if you might consider an instrument lead in the gaps between verses, just a furry thought. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeeringAmps Posted Friday at 12:18 PM Share Posted Friday at 12:18 PM Is the piano just a little loud in the verse? That or push the vocal up? I'd definitely push the guitar up in the solo; just me... 1 hour ago, Wookiee said: commentary in the lyrics is valid 👍 t 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AndyB01 Posted Friday at 06:16 PM Share Posted Friday at 06:16 PM Oh boy don't give up on this one Keith, it's a keeper. I've swallowed enough of that corporate BS to last me a lifetime of lifetimes (one reason why I went contracting towards the end of my career, before finally jacking it all in six months ago to try and retain what little sanity I have left). Great guitar work, drums sound good to me. A little spit and polish perhaps but not much else. Did I detect a smidge of Hammond - some more of that might be nice if so. Enjoyed it. Andy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Busker Pete Posted Friday at 08:14 PM Share Posted Friday at 08:14 PM Good song Keith, enjoyed it! If I had to make a comment, I would say reduce the delay on the vocal a bit Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Supa Reels Posted 15 hours ago Share Posted 15 hours ago To my ears this sounds like a good start to an idea that seems to work with good meter. Your vocal is too low in the mix for this attempt and TBH you need to practice your breathing technique to reach those higher notes ... you have a great voice and that is an instrument in itself. I would work on this a little more as I feel it has great potential ... I have writers block bad time at the moment and if I was writing this I wouldn't think it was rubbish ..Good luck with it 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mark skinner Posted 12 hours ago Share Posted 12 hours ago Keith , I think you are being a little too hard on yourself about this one. You've for sure been raising your own bar lately. I like your thick lower vocals on this and for sure your guitar work. I'm sure you'll make some minor changes and be happy with it soon. I Like it .. mark Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Wilby Posted 3 hours ago Author Share Posted 3 hours ago Wow I'm totally blown away by all of your comments, thank you so much. Please allow me some time to digest 🙂 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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