my anger

[jack c.]

 

[Douglas Kirby]

That was interesting - the mood of the song definitely sounds like anger. When your vocal comes in - that was wild.

[Lynn Wilson]

Wow, what an interesting song!  It's edgy, with a little Nine Inch Nails vibe thrown in for flavor.  Panning the vocal from center to side is cool and helps to change the mood of the song.  I'm kind of hoping that you have more planned for this because the intro lasts nearly a minute and a half, and just repeats the riff over and over.  An instrumental or guitar solo would help there.  Also, I'm missing a bass guitar or synth to put something in the lower register, which is pretty light, unless that's your intent.  All in all, this is quite a concept song, and I hope you don't mind my 2 cents worth.

[jack c.]

everyone that will give me feedback is totally desired as this is how we can grow and improve!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[bjornpdx]

The intro is too long. Kinda lose interest after a while.
I like the robotic voice. Lyrics are a bit heavy handed, tho the "anger in control of me" is effective.
I'd suggest adding another synth track or two for interest.  

[Wookiee]

@jack c. 1:25 of the same riff is enough to make many peeps either turn off or just get mad.

Not my thing so I will leave it there.

[garybrun]

I wanted to leave as the intro was too long and repetitive...  but stayed in!
interesting use of vocal panning..  too much vocal tune for me though.

I don't want to take away from your composition...  but its not my genre or sound to listen too.
All the best with your music though.

 

Gary

[Bajan Blue]

The intro is way too long but the song is interesting after that

Cool

Nigel

 

[DeeringAmps]

You've got the riff and the groove, but as many (most?) have mentioned the intro begins to drag on.
I feel the angst, you're getting that across.
Needs some work, but there's a "foundation" here to work from.

I do hope this is more exaggerated storytelling than purly autobiographical...

tom