jack c. Posted December 23, 2020 Share Posted December 23, 2020 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Douglas Kirby Posted December 24, 2020 Share Posted December 24, 2020 That was interesting - the mood of the song definitely sounds like anger. When your vocal comes in - that was wild. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lynn Wilson Posted December 24, 2020 Share Posted December 24, 2020 Wow, what an interesting song! It's edgy, with a little Nine Inch Nails vibe thrown in for flavor. Panning the vocal from center to side is cool and helps to change the mood of the song. I'm kind of hoping that you have more planned for this because the intro lasts nearly a minute and a half, and just repeats the riff over and over. An instrumental or guitar solo would help there. Also, I'm missing a bass guitar or synth to put something in the lower register, which is pretty light, unless that's your intent. All in all, this is quite a concept song, and I hope you don't mind my 2 cents worth. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jack c. Posted December 26, 2020 Author Share Posted December 26, 2020 everyone that will give me feedback is totally desired as this is how we can grow and improve!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bjornpdx Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 The intro is too long. Kinda lose interest after a while. I like the robotic voice. Lyrics are a bit heavy handed, tho the "anger in control of me" is effective. I'd suggest adding another synth track or two for interest. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wookiee Posted December 27, 2020 Share Posted December 27, 2020 @jack c. 1:25 of the same riff is enough to make many peeps either turn off or just get mad. Not my thing so I will leave it there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted December 27, 2020 Share Posted December 27, 2020 I wanted to leave as the intro was too long and repetitive... but stayed in! interesting use of vocal panning.. too much vocal tune for me though. I don't want to take away from your composition... but its not my genre or sound to listen too. All the best with your music though. Gary Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bajan Blue Posted December 28, 2020 Share Posted December 28, 2020 The intro is way too long but the song is interesting after that Cool Nigel Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeeringAmps Posted December 31, 2020 Share Posted December 31, 2020 You've got the riff and the groove, but as many (most?) have mentioned the intro begins to drag on. I feel the angst, you're getting that across. Needs some work, but there's a "foundation" here to work from. I do hope this is more exaggerated storytelling than purly autobiographical... tom Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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