garybrun Posted August 16, 2020 Share Posted August 16, 2020 (edited) Wasted Years I wrote when I was around 19 years old. (57 now) Some basic tuning issues with the vocal but I've uploaded as a record for later, too come back too and fix. Value your opinions so far. Thanks Gary 4/4 60BPM Chords C,F,G,D. Not so long ago I came to you With doubts troubles and fears. That’s when you opened up my eyes. I soon realized all those wasted years When I could have know you more. I remember on that day When I met you in a personal way All the new things I could see. Oh how my outlook changed My life you rearranged Such a purpose you gave to me. But I say help me Lord Please help me Lord The days seem short and the nights so long I say help me Lord Please help me Lord You know I don’t wanna do wrong That beautiful seed you’ve sown Lord I know its grown But it needs water every day from you. And that bible by my bed Not now so often read Just gathers dust on the chair. SO now I must confess My feelings of unholiness I feel I’m drifting away Seems so natural to do Too drift and hut you Such a great battle within. But I say help me Lord Please help me Lord The days seem short and the nights so long I say help me Lord Please help me Lord You know I don’t wanna do wrong When lying in my bed one day I heard a quite but still voice say My child you are so precious to me And as those tears flowed When deep inside my heat glowed. Knowing you would never turn your back on me. I want to learn to love you more Worship and adore Soak up your Spirit more each day. Thank you for making me thine Grafting me back onto the vine What more can I say? But thank you Lord I thank you Lord For all the gifts you’ve given to me Yes I thank you Lord Thank you Lord There’s a place waiting for me In eternity.. Edited August 16, 2020 by garybrun 4 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PhonoBrainer Posted August 16, 2020 Share Posted August 16, 2020 Nice one! I like the vocal and how it sits with the arrangement. Very calming. I think the mixing of the vocal could be looked at in context - the elec piano (excellent) is pretty dry, there's just a touch of reverb on the drums, there's a bit more on the guitar panned left - so overall, pretty dry and cleanly mixed. But the vocal by contrast seems very effected, and very retro with maybe some old dynamic mic? I dunno. I'd vote for less vocal reverb (or delay?) so it can match the mix. It's almost like you are one vocal processor removal away from having a clean, nicely matching vocal. If that makes sense. But please consider a de-esser on the vocal, although if you back off on a compressor, you might not need a de-esser. I have always really liked your mixes and I'm sure you know what you are doing . . . I think if I remember correctly you are from Norway? Apologies if I misremember. But you have a really excellent take here and a great feel for the "1970's Americana country western" vibe. Plus it kind of sounds like Elvis! Pretty cool pulling this off! cheers, -Tom 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted August 16, 2020 Author Share Posted August 16, 2020 6 hours ago, emeraldsoul said: Nice one! I like the vocal and how it sits with the arrangement. Very calming. I think the mixing of the vocal could be looked at in context - the elec piano (excellent) is pretty dry, there's just a touch of reverb on the drums, there's a bit more on the guitar panned left - so overall, pretty dry and cleanly mixed. But the vocal by contrast seems very effected, and very retro with maybe some old dynamic mic? I dunno. I'd vote for less vocal reverb (or delay?) so it can match the mix. It's almost like you are one vocal processor removal away from having a clean, nicely matching vocal. If that makes sense. But please consider a de-esser on the vocal, although if you back off on a compressor, you might not need a de-esser. I have always really liked your mixes and I'm sure you know what you are doing . . . I think if I remember correctly you are from Norway? Apologies if I misremember. But you have a really excellent take here and a great feel for the "1970's Americana country western" vibe. Plus it kind of sounds like Elvis! Pretty cool pulling this off! cheers, -Tom Thanks so much for taking the time to listen Tom I was working on this to 4am this morning... so I will upload a new version soon. It was to get the ideas down and get other feedback. Thanks for the EXCELLENT feedback ... really appreciated, Version 2 soon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Douglas Kirby Posted August 16, 2020 Share Posted August 16, 2020 I liked the song Gary - I would have added vocal harmonies on the "Help Me Lords" and "Thank You Lords" if it were my song - just my two cents. Impressive lyrics - nice job there. 1 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted August 16, 2020 Author Share Posted August 16, 2020 (edited) 6 minutes ago, Douglas Kirby said: I liked the song Gary - I would have added vocal harmonies on the "Help Me Lords" and "Thank You Lords" if it were my song - just my two cents. Impressive lyrics - nice job there. Thanks for listening Douglas. Back ground vocals is the plan ? I formed a new band "Gary & The Norwegians" a few days ago... so wanted to get the track together so they can hear it. Ive got four weeks... 15hrs practice to put a concert on!!!! Edited August 16, 2020 by garybrun 3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grem Posted August 16, 2020 Share Posted August 16, 2020 Great song Gary. I agree with Douglas, bg vox would add some dimension to the song. Excellent playing on it. Loved the drums. Electric Piano was played very well also. Good mix as always. I didn't hear any parts that I would do over or correct. You got a good voice that I enjoy listening too. And it sounds like you're from Texas or Tennessee!! : ) 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hidden Symmetry Posted August 17, 2020 Share Posted August 17, 2020 Good tune Gary. Hope you work it up with your new band. I imagine it would go over very well performed live. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted August 17, 2020 Author Share Posted August 17, 2020 15 hours ago, Grem said: Great song Gary. I agree with Douglas, bg vox would add some dimension to the song. Excellent playing on it. Loved the drums. Electric Piano was played very well also. Good mix as always. I didn't hear any parts that I would do over or correct. You got a good voice that I enjoy listening too. And it sounds like you're from Texas or Tennessee!! : ) Thanks mate as always. Ive been to Tennessee about 4 times.. so maybe picked up and accent LOL. I think its just influences over the years... cant explain it. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted August 17, 2020 Author Share Posted August 17, 2020 9 hours ago, Hidden Symmetry said: Good tune Gary. Hope you work it up with your new band. I imagine it would go over very well performed live. Thanks for the comments and taking time to listen. Another practice this Thursday, A great thing about today is that you can record the songs on the mixer and use them for virtual sound checks so if one person cant make it.. you can still carry on the band practise. I have 4 weeks to pull this thing off!! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bajan Blue Posted August 17, 2020 Share Posted August 17, 2020 Hi Gary - good track - agree about backing vocals - could really make a difference Otherwise great Nigel Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted August 17, 2020 Author Share Posted August 17, 2020 2 hours ago, Bajan Blue said: Hi Gary - good track - agree about backing vocals - could really make a difference Otherwise great Nigel Thanks for commenting and taking the time listen Nigel. Gary Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mark skinner Posted August 17, 2020 Share Posted August 17, 2020 Gary . Great song my friend. Your vocal quality always shines thru. I'll be looking forward to hearing a final version. Best of luck to you with the new band I'm sure you will do well despite the added hardships right now. Enjoyed it .. mark (post something in Norwegian sometime) 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted August 17, 2020 Author Share Posted August 17, 2020 32 minutes ago, mark skinner said: Gary . Great song my friend. Your vocal quality always shines thru. I'll be looking forward to hearing a final version. Best of luck to you with the new band I'm sure you will do well despite the added hardships right now. Enjoyed it .. mark (post something in Norwegian sometime) Cheers Mark. Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment. Will post something in Norwegian soon ? 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daryl1968 Posted August 17, 2020 Share Posted August 17, 2020 On 8/16/2020 at 11:08 AM, Douglas Kirby said: I liked the song Gary - I would have added vocal harmonies on the "Help Me Lords" and "Thank You Lords" if it were my song - just my two cents. Impressive lyrics - nice job there. ^^^^^ this - maybe even a three part harmony on those sections would elevate the song. Good stuff Gary 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeeringAmps Posted August 18, 2020 Share Posted August 18, 2020 On 8/15/2020 at 8:07 PM, emeraldsoul said: I'd vote for less vocal reverb (or delay?) Or bring it up on the piano and kit? Beautiful tune Gary ? I'll hold the "like" for the final mix... t 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted August 18, 2020 Author Share Posted August 18, 2020 6 hours ago, DeeringAmps said: Or bring it up on the piano and kit? Beautiful tune Gary ? I'll hold the "like" for the final mix... t Cheers Pal 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lynn Wilson Posted August 18, 2020 Share Posted August 18, 2020 Gary, your vocal on this lovely tune is terrific! In fact, I think it carries the song. You've received some good advice, so I'll not add any more. You are truly a polished singer, and I always enjoy your professionalism. Kudos! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wookiee Posted August 18, 2020 Share Posted August 18, 2020 Not my thing to be honest, @garybrun but you have done a good job on this. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted August 18, 2020 Author Share Posted August 18, 2020 3 hours ago, Wookiee said: Not my thing to be honest, @garybrun but you have done a good job on this. Thanks for taking the time to listen Oh Fury One. I understand you point... no problem. ? 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted August 18, 2020 Author Share Posted August 18, 2020 3 hours ago, Lynn said: Gary, your vocal on this lovely tune is terrific! In fact, I think it carries the song. You've received some good advice, so I'll not add any more. You are truly a polished singer, and I always enjoy your professionalism. Kudos! WOW! Thanks Lynn... great encouragement. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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