I want to start by saying I like your song it has a Gary Numan vibe which is very cool?
The thing is you have heavy distortion / saturation on your kick, keys, and your vocal, so it cancels out your vocal and no one can hear the words.
( BTW. love the way this songs ends) Just off hand at the start of the song you have that cool drum bit, you could let that happen for the first few bars while bringing it up on the fader and a clean bass until you get to the chorus.. but at the end of the day it's your song and by gum I like it...
it's kind of a cliché, but a good example of dynamics would be the song Heart Shaped Box by Nirvana.