garybrun 668 Posted June 11, 2019 (edited) Well I have now completed my first ever song that is written by myself. I couldn't have done it without all your advice and help. Feeling stoked!! Checkout the Simon's Song title in this forum and you can see the journey of improvement you all helped with. Edited June 24, 2019 by garybrun 2 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Grem 2,930 Posted June 11, 2019 I think it sounds good. But there are some parts where I couldn't quite make out what the vocals were saying. Squeeze box sounds good. And drums have more definition. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
garybrun 668 Posted June 12, 2019 (edited) thanks for that too. i know the song so hear everything in my head... so I dont see the wood for the trees. does the vocal need compression? Edited June 13, 2019 by garybrun Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
kloon 81 Posted June 12, 2019 Nice song Gary, congrats on finishing your first own written song! And remember, everything doesnt have to be perfect at once. You will surely see progression over each new song you do. What im trying to say is... Dont be afraid to call a song finnished, even if you know that it could sound better. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Grem 2,930 Posted June 12, 2019 Yeah. Agreed. If we waited till they were perfect... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
garybrun 668 Posted June 13, 2019 (edited) Thank you all for your comments. I have remixed the above. Yesterday after talking to me son that my music has quite a bit of plate reverb on it. Then it was quite an eye opener as I am influenced by 80s-90s music.. which in those days had loads of reverb and bells in it 🙂 When I mix other peoples music I dont do it... how strange is that!!!! So I tried to mix this one with less reverb. Also the acoustic guitar is panned central n the first few bars then I move it out to right when all the instruments kick in. Does this give it more space? Thanks again for all the feedback appreciated. Edited June 13, 2019 by garybrun Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Wookiee 1,307 Posted June 23, 2019 Sounds OK here @garybrun though those clunks at the start and end are a little disconcerting. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
garybrun 668 Posted June 23, 2019 24 minutes ago, Wookiee said: Sounds OK here @garybrun though those clunks at the start and end are a little disconcerting. I didn't notice it when I exported the song.. Not sure if its Bandlab or Sonarworks that has done it!!! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Wookiee 1,307 Posted June 23, 2019 23 minutes ago, garybrun said: I didn't notice it when I exported the song.. Not sure if its Bandlab or Sonarworks that has done it!!! It is just like someone has switch on a Mic and then off at the end. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
garybrun 668 Posted June 23, 2019 13 minutes ago, Wookiee said: It is just like someone has switch on a Mic and then off at the end. Yes I hear it now. But there are no switches... I think I have had this problem before when exporting... I think its the Sonarworks Plugin. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Douglas Kirby 636 Posted June 23, 2019 I enjoyed the song - your lead vocal works well with the song. The mix sounds good to me. I didn't hear the clunks - did you remove them? Thanks for posting. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
garybrun 668 Posted June 23, 2019 37 minutes ago, Douglas Kirby said: I enjoyed the song - your lead vocal works well with the song. The mix sounds good to me. I didn't hear the clunks - did you remove them? Thanks for posting. Thanks for listening. I have just exported the song again and removed the first glitch. I will be adding a new mastered version soon... I've tried a professional guy and will let you all now when its done. Very exciting to see what a professional can do. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
garybrun 668 Posted June 24, 2019 Done and dusted. 🙂 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lynn Wilson 585 Posted June 25, 2019 Gary, this is a pleasant song, and you've managed to fix some of the glitches that I heard earlier. I can hear the joy in your voice which is a very good quality for a song of faith. I have only two minor suggestions: one, I would boost the bass guitar a bit, and two, I would make the vocal just a bit drier so that it's more in your face and intimate. Other than that, this is good to go, and congratulations on your first! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
garybrun 668 Posted June 25, 2019 5 hours ago, Lynn said: Gary, this is a pleasant song, and you've managed to fix some of the glitches that I heard earlier. I can hear the joy in your voice which is a very good quality for a song of faith. I have only two minor suggestions: one, I would boost the bass guitar a bit, and two, I would make the vocal just a bit drier so that it's more in your face and intimate. Other than that, this is good to go, and congratulations on your first! @Lynn thank you for the suggestion. I have removed the reverb. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
AndyB01 180 Posted June 25, 2019 Nice work Gary, your vocal has a great tone - really rich - the song ticks along really well. Very uplifting - I liked it. Well done Andy 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
amiller 186 Posted June 25, 2019 I enjoyed the song...good job. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Old Joad 1,062 Posted June 27, 2019 Cool song, it reminds of a modern folkish Pete Seeger or The Kingston Trio tune. I like the art work too. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
