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Overpromised - a new original song

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Hi folks

Here's a song that has been sitting dormant for some time and I recently 'finished' (are they ever?)

Nits and crits welcome (lyrics below link).

Overpromised
Written and performed by Staypress
V1
I didn't mean to disappoint you
But it's not easy being perfect no, no
It's hard to keep promises you didn't mean to make
Guess my armour ain't shining no more
Ch
You said that this is my very last chance
I am trying to be the king of romance
You whispered those words in my ear and I shivered
I over promised and under delivered
V2
I didn't want to be your hero
Didn't want that on my shoulders no, no
It's hard to be faultless for you for heaven's sake
Guess I'm not who you imagined me to be
Ch
Outro
I didn't mean to disappoint you but it's not easy being perfect no, no

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You are just going to have readjust your overly perfect self @daryl1968.  Cute, beautifully delivered vocal, (no sarcasm detected at all) production very cool.

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Daryl,  I find it hard to believe your songs are from experience :D:D  Do you and mrs.  greenway really go through all this?  another expertly crafted song.  I esp like the minimal pop-synthy feel.

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2 hours ago, David Sprouse said:

find it hard to believe your songs are not from experience

If autobiographical, I feel for ya mate.

Oh, I did enjoy...

t

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I always enjoy listening to your songs and this one is no exception.  Clever lyrics and excellent vocals!!!

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Love the vocal recording, so nice and up front, and the rest of the mix instruments are wonderfully crisp and clear. Just another great mix, promised and delivered!

I appreciated the understated approach you brought to this, it works a treat.

cheers,

-Tom

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Fantastic , I really liked the contrast between the lyrics and the satire(ish) way they were sung. Emeraldsoul expressed the exact same feeling I got from this.   Top Notch ..  mark

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Excellent Daryl! Your music always puts a smile on my face! Loved the the lyrics, and the vocals. Also liked the sounds you used in this. Great job!

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Daryl
Cool song. Really like the chord changes especially in the chorus. Reminds me of pop songs from the 60s

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Top Drawer as usual mate.

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It's not easy to be consistently good, but you make it look easy.  Congratulations on another excellent song, my friend!

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On 8/1/2020 at 1:25 PM, Wookiee said:

You are just going to have readjust your overly perfect self @daryl1968.  Cute, beautifully delivered vocal, (no sarcasm detected at all) production very cool.

Thanks Wookster me old mate - maybe a touch of sarcasm.

On 8/1/2020 at 1:42 PM, David Sprouse said:

Daryl,  I find it hard to believe your songs are from experience :D:D  Do you and mrs.  greenway really go through all this?  another expertly crafted song.  I esp like the minimal pop-synthy feel.

Thanks David - this one is written from experience 

 

On 8/1/2020 at 4:29 PM, DeeringAmps said:

If autobiographical, I feel for ya mate.

Oh, I did enjoy...

t

Definitely from experience - thanks mate

On 8/1/2020 at 7:34 PM, freddy j said:

I always enjoy listening to your songs and this one is no exception.  Clever lyrics and excellent vocals!!!

thanks so much Freddy my mate

 

On 8/1/2020 at 8:59 PM, emeraldsoul said:

Love the vocal recording, so nice and up front, and the rest of the mix instruments are wonderfully crisp and clear. Just another great mix, promised and delivered!

I appreciated the understated approach you brought to this, it works a treat.

cheers,

-Tom

Thanks a ton Tom - I did feel a little 'naked' on this one :)

On 8/1/2020 at 9:32 PM, Old Joad said:

Nice tune..

thanks OJ - very kind of you

On 8/1/2020 at 11:27 PM, mark skinner said:

Fantastic , I really liked the contrast between the lyrics and the satire(ish) way they were sung. Emeraldsoul expressed the exact same feeling I got from this.   Top Notch ..  mark

thanks so much Mark - I really appreciate it

On 8/2/2020 at 3:30 PM, Leadfoot said:

Excellent Daryl! Your music always puts a smile on my face! Loved the the lyrics, and the vocals. Also liked the sounds you used in this. Great job!

thanks Leadfoot - job done with the smile :)  - you're a good 'un

On 8/3/2020 at 8:23 AM, bjornpdx said:

Daryl
Cool song. Really like the chord changes especially in the chorus. Reminds me of pop songs from the 60s

Thanks Bjorn - I like a bit of the 60's

15 hours ago, Bapu said:

Top Drawer as usual mate.

thanks mate - you da man

14 hours ago, Lynn said:

It's not easy to be consistently good, but you make it look easy.  Congratulations on another excellent song, my friend!

awwwww thanks Lynn - very kind mate

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At first I thought corny old   50's rhythm...AND THEN!!!!  How Fun this song is!!!

Great voice and writing!

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Hey Daryk me ol mucker!  this is great!  had me smiling and tapping to the beat the whole way through!  so glad you're being true to your perfect self! :D

 

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On 8/5/2020 at 2:11 AM, Adam Compeau said:

At first I thought corny old   50's rhythm...AND THEN!!!!  How Fun this song is!!!

Great voice and writing!

Thanks so much Adam

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Hi Daryl

Like this, reminds me a bit of something    Bonzo Dog  would have recorded in their prime - very clever lyrics, i particularly enjoyed them.

Nigel

 

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On 8/6/2020 at 12:49 AM, Beagle said:

Hey Daryk me ol mucker!  this is great!  had me smiling and tapping to the beat the whole way through!  so glad you're being true to your perfect self! :D

 

Thanks so much Beags my mateypants. :D

 

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