I don't often stray from 4/4 time but I've had a go with this one:
https://www.bandlab.com/post/4b5776c9-b901-ed11-b47a-281878315d59
Some lyrics adapted from the 1972 film "Sleuth" (well it was good enough for Morrisey) and also from "A Few Good Men". Comments welcome as always.
EDIT: link corrected - this is the version that I meant to post and has a lead guitar solo.
EDIT 2:
Here's the remix.
I've taken some bottom end off the organ to give the bass a chance, also I've swapped the order of the 2nd and 3rd verses. I'd be interested to hear what you all think of that and whether or not the story still flows. The idea is that I now have "pregnant silences" followed by the stop - I considered moving the stop instead, but I think that might be too early in the song to have one. Any thoughts?
https://www.bandlab.com/post/17b3b057-9102-ed11-b47a-281878315d59
EDIT 3:
@jwnicholson78 I've added a leslie organ to the middle 8 and coda as suggested.
https://www.bandlab.com/post/e8fc39df-d205-ed11-b47a-281878315d59