Lynn Wilson

Well, this ought to impress your son!  Everything sounds right and tight, and this made me a fan of a genre that I don't listen to very much.  Take a bow!

I like the style of this song and the fact that you're stretching those creative muscles!  It's like comfort food for the soul.  On the technical side, the vocals seem to be narrowly panned, though not the guitar.  I wonder if it might be useful to EQ your lead vocal slightly different, say a mild boost around 3k, or maybe roll-off some low end?  Otherwise, this is a fine addition to your extensive collection of songs.

1 hour ago, KSband said:

Cool song, I like the groove.

KS, thank you for your time and comment!  Give this credit to Daryl.

p.s.- I raised the volume of the guitars that Bjorn mentioned.

18 hours ago, daryl1968 said:

you did a great job on this Lynn

And, it started with you, mate!  That awesome guitar riff was a good starting point!

16 hours ago, bjornpdx said:

This is really good. Great collaboration by two of my faves on the song forum.
Wonderful opening guitar. Production is top notch as is Lynn's vocal.
One thing I noticed is the gtr at 2:30. Seems like it should move up a bit, at least to my ears.
Good job!
-Bjorn

Thanks, Bjorn!  Your words always mean a lot to me.  You're right about the guitar - next pass.

Two weeks ago, Dary sent me some instrument tracks to develop into a song, and here is the result:  https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14668987

I received from him tracks with drums, the opening guitar riff, synth bass, a sampled funk guitar, and a synth rhythm track.  These became the intro, verses, and pre-choruses.  I wrote the chorus and provided the words, melody, bass, additional drums, and more guitar.  Daryl sang backup on the choruses to supplement my vocals.  Considering how fast this came together, we come here looking for your ideas and suggestions.  As always, thanks so much for your time and effort!

Turn ripple edit on>hit delete>turn ripple edit off and the parts will line up.

1 hour ago, hsmusic said:

Enjoyed the track Lynn, good tune & cool production techniques.

Thank you, I'm glad you like it!  I've actually remixed this just minutes ago, using suggestions from above regarding the ping-pong delay.  I hope you still like it.

Well written, well played, and well mixed!  This makes a great template for the rest of us.  Keep it going, Ross!  A+

On 9/23/2023 at 9:23 AM, Ross Smithe said:

Hey Lynn, extremely cool track!! Very unique and interesting composition, in a good way! As always, musicianship is top notch, especially the guitar work. Bass collab is spot on as well. Only critique I have is same as has been said, vocal mixing may benefit from tweaking. IMO, delay effect is cool, I know the effect you are going for, but maybe a bit more selective and not on for the entire song. Don't know though, your call, it does add to the effect of "connecting dots". Great work my friend!!

2 hours ago, paulo said:

Mix sounds great on my lappy speakers Lynn and I really like the way the song builds and the overall sonic palette and structure. Three listens in I do think that the delay effect would be more impactful if just used here and there rather than being all over it. Being picky (whilst keeping in mind that we're talking lappy speakers) the vox level could maybe be taken down a smidgen to sit more in than on but make of that what you will given the listening equipment. Great work overall though. It feels shorter than it actually is, so that has to be a good thing.

Gentlemen, thanks for your responses and time!  I'll be taking your ideas into consideration when I get back to the studio.  You're not alone in your take on the vox, so I will benefit from trying a new approach!  Stay tuned

I was shocked when this song ended. It was the fastest five minutes of the day, week, month...  Stunning!  You really shine at this!

Nice tribute, Jack!  Sorry for your loss.

This sounds like a top ten hit!  

On 9/15/2023 at 6:59 AM, Larry T. said:

Overall, great stuff as usual, I'd much rather hear your stuff on the radio than most of the over produced and soulless material that's so popular 🎶🎶🎶🎶

I have to agree.

Terrific, Keith!  I really like the way you didn't overprocess your vocal, leaving it dry against the lovely and spacey guitar.  Nice touch!  Beautiful retro vibe makes this very nostalgic.  A+

This is dripping with soul!  This really hits me on a visceral level in a good way.   Congrats!

Stunning!  Songs like this raise the bar higher.  I hope you guys do more work together.

This is an excellent example of what I call a cerebral song.  It's very clever on several levels, and your vocal delivers the goods.  I wish I could say as much for the horns.  The arrangement is good, but the performance doesn't quite get past the awkward stage in that one section.  Otherwise, thumbs up.

Lovely guitar work!  I love that lush reverb and your nuanced performance.

Very good, Nigel!  I'm putting you on my Christmas list.

I like the way you created a new version of this old classic.  The ending is a little long for my taste, but everything else is dope.  I really enjoy your covers!

On 9/13/2023 at 11:55 PM, bjornpdx said:

Love the production Lynn. It's a fun listen, so much going on in there.
IMO delay on a voc track can be very effective if used sparingly and not quite as much as you have here.
Other than that, a really catchy song, one of your best I think.
-Bjorn

Bjorn, thanks for giving this a spin.  I have made a few adjustments to the mix in regard to you and Barry.  Good ears!

On 9/15/2023 at 8:05 AM, mark skinner said:

Very Cool production Lynn.  I Really liked all of the unexpected twists and turns in this one . Very Creative !  

Enjoyed it ..   mark

Thanks, Mark, it's very encouraging to hear your words!

On 9/16/2023 at 8:50 AM, Bajan Blue said:

Hi Lynn

Really like this - I think the production is great - I like things such as when that slightly off kilter synth comes in around 2 minutes - and great Guitar of course!

Cool stuff

 

Nigel

 

Nigel, your words mean a lot to me!  Thanks for your time and ears.  Keep up  your good work.

On 9/13/2023 at 10:43 PM, Barry Seymour said:

Hey Lynn!

I love the production here. The music is very slick, very polished, impeccably produced, it sounds like a cross between Toto and Pink Floyd. The swell before one of the verses was stunning, the guitar work is impeccable. And the overall sound is amazing. The song is well written, with clever and insightful lyrics.

But the vocal doesn't quite blend in, to my ear; it sounds like it's sitting on top of everything else. The esthetic feels different. Whereas the music is sophisticated and well produced, the voice sounds a little raucous and casual.

Maybe adjust the EQ, make the voice sound richer?  Cleaner? Bring it down just a tiny touch so it rides in the mix, instead of on it?

Great song, BTW.

 

Great write-up, Gary!  So good that it sent me back to the lab   I worked on the vocal using a mid/side technique to make the delays more legible, while slightly EQing them.   It may need more attention in the long run, but I think it's closer to the finish line.  My thanks to Markno 999 for a helpful hint.

On 9/12/2023 at 12:36 AM, noynekker said:

Very fascinating to listen to Lynn . . . I'm hearing the bongo type sound as the "dots", and the offbeat beat snare in the chorus works very well ! The recording of this is simply magnificent, panning and delays, riffs are flying left and right, a very cool headphone experience to be sure. Love the vocals, and the way it ends, coda perfect.

My favourite part is of course that guitar solo that introduces the chorus section, and that swell before it, very well conceived . . .

Bruce

Thank you, Bruce,  I'm happy to hear from you!  I did make extensive use of my headphones and earbuds for this.  As stated above, Markno 999 suggested the break before the choruses, and I came up the the swell.  Sometimes it's better to be lucky than good

11 hours ago, daryl1968 said:

love this Lynn - the mix and production is top notch mate

Daryl, thanks so much.  I've learned a lot from your own productions, my friend!

This song makes me hungry, it's that good!

On 9/9/2023 at 4:49 AM, Paul Bush said:

It was an absolute pleasure Gary, one of the best Ive ever heard on the forum , I love the genre and brilliantly executed

What he said!  You just keep getting better.

No nits, no crits!  Terrific song, guys.  It made for a very pleasant ending to a difficult day.  Carry on...