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Kenny
Yes I did enjoy the playing. Professional caliber as usual.
Do you ever hit a wrong note? ?

Sailor55
The blues is one of my favorite genres and you did this one really well. Love the lyrics too.

amiller, gary, steve, lynn

Thanks.   I wasn't sure if I should post the song or not so I appreciate the positive comments.

Very cool airy synth at beginning. Really good melodic changeup at 0:52 and 2:05
Impressive drum track.
Kind of abrupt change 1:36 but I like how you added in the synths as it went along.
I think I can recognize a kakku song anywhere now.  ?

Nice job.

Beautiful song. There's singing and then there's singing with emotion. You expressed the sentiment of the lyrics incredibly well with your compassionate  delivery.

I listened on headphones bluetoothed to my laptop at  Starbucks. I couldn't make out some of  the words esp those sung at a lower volume. I think the voc could be clearer if you EQ'd out the muddiness around 80Hz or so. Of course, this opinion is from  an older guy whose hearing ain't what it used to be so take that into consideration. 

Love the photo. ?

Kenny
I'm always blown away and inspired by your guitar playing. Would be cool to see a video performance some time.

I love your music Freddy.  It always puts a smile on my face.

Lynn
The light reverb on the voc is just right. Guitar accompaniment is excellent. The horns ~2:20 didn't work for me. Really liked the section ~ 3:20 with just the bass, voc and minimal percussion.
Great job esp on the lyrics!

Very moving tribute to your father. I agree with Tom about the piano volume.
Really like the theme starting ~2:40.

I saw a bumper sticker that said
It's Not That I'm Old. Your Music Really Does Suck.

Always wanted to write a song with those words so here it is. Maybe the lyrics are a little snarky?

I had a lot of trouble with the vocal track. When it sounded ok on my studio monitors it was too muted and muddy in the headphones on my mp3 player.  Tweaking the EQ made the ss's and ch's stand out too much. De-ess'ing made me lisp. I went in and brought down the volume of individual ss's and over enunciated t's and b's and that introduced some clicks to deal with.
Anyway, this is what I got.

Thanks for listening.

Maybe not exactly what you're looking for but you could try the Prelinger archives
https://archive.org/details/prelinger

You can find all kinds of free public domain stuff.  There are links at the upper left corner to videos, audio, texts  etc.

Good job on syncing the video with the music. Are those your legs dangling off the building?
Really good gtr track. seemed like the resurrection of an old song worked out really well.

Thanks everyone for the comments. Always encouraging.
Tom, yeah that strum wasn't supposed to be there as soon as you hit the Play button. Sorry for the GI issues or any ensuing cardiac arrests.

daryl
I like the song a lot - the guy singing is incredible. I'm impressed with the vocal track which I assume you did some work on?  If so, would you work on mine next? Just kidding, but it does convince me to learn more about mixing vocals.

bob o
As  mentioned above you write perfect lyrics for the genre. And it's easy to make out the words because you have that great voice and the mixing ability to make it stand out. You really have that wanna-hit-the-open-road feeling here

pcode
Terrific song. Good mix and very clear vocal. Effective reverb.
Not so sure about the vibrato effect near the end though.
I don't know anything about Urdu music but did you use a particular scale in this song?

Couple of notes I wrote while listening
1:13 auto tune effect?
1:31 bass glitch?

Jeff, I checked out a couple of Professor Longhair YT videos since I wasn't familiar with him. Gave me a better idea of what you were going for so I listened to your song again. Have to say the drums are a pretty cool accompaniment and the horns seem to fit in perfectly. I'm impressed with your piano composition - really melodic and fun.

Beautiful song, Steve.
The background voices are very effective and complement your vocal well.
I like the Irish pipe.

I always take notice of lyrics.  Really like the variations on 'falling from this world' and the repeating phrase in the last line of each verse, a technique that I'm going to steal. I'm probably not interpreting the words as you intended but that's okay.
'Peers' not 'piers'

I can always find something useful in U-He Zebra so it's become one of my go-to synths.  Diva is very good too.
You can download the demo and check it out.  I agree U-He is maybe more expensive than some others but worth it IMO.

Wookie

Very nice on the sweeping synths that bring to mind crashing waves. You posted something kinda similar a while ago that sounded like breathing.
Someone else mentioned twinkling stars which is what I'd thought of too. I think this is one of your best songs that I've heard so far.

Joad, freddy, Paul, Tom, Gary and Douglas
Thank you!  
Douglas, I haven't heard of Elliott Smitt. Will check him out. Thanks.
Gary, I tend to keep the volume down on my voc because maybe it will sound better.

I like this one a lot! Definitely has that Santana sound.  Great job.

Excellent! Right up there with Scott Joplin. I don't think you need a drum track or anything else for this genre, but if you're getting back into DAWs and you have all these VSTs to play around with then can't blame you for adding something in. ?

Entertaining for sure. So is that your voice with some weird vocoder thingy?

Michael

The vocal is outstanding and the guitars are too.  I listened to the song three times via headphones and speakers and I'm still having trouble making out some of the words. Maybe the guitars are too loud in places? But also likely that it's just me and I'm failing a hearing test.  Probably didn't help you with this critique but there's my 2 cents.