Breaking Parole

[noynekker]

Here's a new one where I had some lyrical fun with a poem my friend Deanna wrote. Dusted off my old Ovation 12 string for the rhythm track, new set of strings, man that's a lot to tune up, more work than I remember. (No that's not me in the rocker chair, it's the unfortunate guy in the Lazy Boy advert )

Let me know how it translates, I remixed today after I heard too much low end, now I'm thinking it's not enough low end. The saga continues  . . .

Bruce

 

[Bajan Blue]

Hi Bruce

I like this - really like the structure - however I am struggling to hear that 12 string - could be what I'm listening on - the mix does sound a tiny fraction light, if you know what I mean.

But this is a really good track

cool

Nigel

 

[Wookiee]

Mix sounds quite nice here, they are nice chairs.

[KSband]

Good stuff! Fun song with some cool changes and arranging. Mix is  pretty good, I like bass so I would bump up slightly, but it's fine as is.

[bmarlowe]

Catchy song, all instruments well played. Sometimes your vocal seems to be fighting to be heard. I think there is a horn (sax?) panned to the same place as your vocal, They share similar frequency ranges. Instead of making your vocal louder, maybe you can place the horn more left or right. And yes 1 or 2 dB more bass.

[mark skinner]

Nice one Bruce ! I love the energy in it. Sax sounds great in the break. Maybe some panning automation on it would help with frequency clashes.   Loved it ..  mark

[PhonoBrainer]

OK very cool lyrics and an unconventional song structure which was very catchy once I caught on to it! Very original all the way around, like maybe Nik Kershaw wrote a Steely Dan tune. 

If you don't like the Dan or Nik Kershaw, or see no potential for overlap, then please disregard that last comment 😄

the lyrics meet the music, and there are spots where the words are just a bit masked enough to make you guess. 

Very good tune! Time not wasted!

cheers, -Tom

Edited 11 hours ago by PhonoBrainer

[noynekker]

Thanks for all the replies and comments everyone:

@Bajan Blue, @Wookiee, @KSband, @bmarlowe, @mark skinner, @PhonoBrainer

The mix has gone through more than a few iterations since I first posted this, and I very much appreciate your helpful tips, which steered me to improve it some more.

I think ?

(4 piece band shouldn't be so hard to mix, but somehow it was)

[bmarlowe]

Sounds great to me. That background sax is easy to hear now. Really good song.