Flowing Going On

[kakku]

Hi. This time my tune is a bit strange because the chorus sounds a bit like it should be a bit different to suit the verse. It might be that you think otherwise so please listen and comment if you want. 

Here is the later version

ttps://soundcloud.com/madrigal7/flowing-going-on

Edited December 1, 2019 by kakku

[Makke]

Yes, The parts with tempo and arrangement (drums and  bass) changes makes this sounds a bit like  two different songs in my opinion. . 

Otherwise the melodylines and sounds are pleasant.

[kakku]

34 minutes ago, Makke said:

Yes, The parts with tempo and arrangement (drums and  bass) changes makes this sounds a bit like  two different songs in my opinion. . 

Otherwise the melodylines and sounds are pleasant.

Thanks for the comment. I tried to fix this earlier but  was not sure which version is better. In case you or other listeners have time I post my fix attempt here:

 

 

Edited December 1, 2019 by kakku

[Makke]

On this  later version  tempo changes works . The parts are more uniform and sounds like one song.

Nice dynamic & arrangement/orchestration changes between the parts.

[kakku]

30 minutes ago, Makke said:

On this  later version  tempo changes works . The parts are more uniform and sounds like one song.

Nice dynamic & arrangement/orchestration changes between the parts.

Thanks a lot for your analysis and comments. I agree that the later version sounds less buggy

[David Sprouse]

unique assemblage of sounds at the beginning...the tempo changes do sound disconcerting at some points, but if this were at a club...the dancers would like the breaks. Nice one!

[kakku]

12 minutes ago, David Sprouse said:

unique assemblage of sounds at the beginning...the tempo changes do sound disconcerting at some points, but if this were at a club...the dancers would like the breaks. Nice one!

Thanks for the analysis and comment. The tempo changes are maybe too big

[bjornpdx]

Kakku
Nice dance tune but it still sounds like two different songs to me. Maybe that's the effect you want?

[kakku]

7 hours ago, bjornpdx said:

Kakku
Nice dance tune but it still sounds like two different songs to me. Maybe that's the effect you want?

I tried to make it one package. Thanks

[G Randy Brown]

I really like the A section...nice textures, sounds cinematic.

I agree with others regarding the tempo change...have you tried slowing it down to the same as the A section.

It might not sound like Dance music anymore but it might be interesting and lead you in a different direction (ie soundtrack music)

[kakku]

I have not tried with different tempos. It might work. Perhaps I will try it later when I have found all the computer parts. Thanks for the comment and tips

[amiller]

Yep, almost sounds like two songs, however, I really like that.  We all have moments of switching from topic to another...like - “I want to do this but wait, I also want to do this.”??

[kakku]

55 minutes ago, amiller said:

Yep, almost sounds like two songs, however, I really like that.  We all have moments of switching from topic to another...like - “I want to do this but wait, I also want to do this.”??

Thanks

[DeeringAmps]

I think some work on the segue to make the transition less abrupt. No concrete suggestions unfortunately, but I do think that’s how I would approach it. Not my genre, but you held my interest to the end. 

Tom

[kakku]

59 minutes ago, DeeringAmps said:

I think some work on the segue to make the transition less abrupt. No concrete suggestions unfortunately, but I do think that’s how I would approach it. Not my genre, but you held my interest to the end. 

Tom

Thanks. Maybe I will return to this when I get my daw back in order

[Lynn Wilson]

Kakku, I think this is a very fine work!  I've heard EDM juxtapositions that are way crazy, and this song isn't crazy at all.  I do like the second version better, but I could dance to either version (if I could dance).  The only thing I will suggest is to clip that hum at the very end of this song, otherwise, I think this is on the way.

[kakku]

53 minutes ago, Lynn said:

Kakku, I think this is a very fine work!  I've heard EDM juxtapositions that are way crazy, and this song isn't crazy at all.  I do like the second version better, but I could dance to either version (if I could dance).  The only thing I will suggest is to clip that hum at the very end of this song, otherwise, I think this is on the way.

Nice to hear this. Thank you also for the improvement suggestion

[chuckebaby]

Man that chorus that kicks in at 0:45 is rockin !

The tempo changes are a bit drastic but they fit/musically together very nicely.

[chuckebaby]

took a second listen, man this song is just waiting for vocals. Not really my style (im more into hard rock and metal) but wow, the lyric vocal arrangement potential is threw the roof.

Great work.

[Wookiee]

Listening to the first post version jumps a re a little to dramatic for me.