Pain,pain,pain

[jack c.]

 

[equality]

Wow! That is something original and different. Somewhat I get vibes from Lennon's Cold Turkey. I like the transition to the calmer last part. Some bass tones are a bit off I guess but otherwise nice piece of work. 

[bjornpdx]

Very creative vocal/guitar interplay. I understand maybe half the lyrics but I get the gist. I think you need more transition into the calm guitar part at the end.
-Bjorn

[jack c.]

12 hours ago, equality said:

Some bass tones are a bit off

thanks for listen/comments.explain more about bass notes.thanks,jack c

[jack c.]

10 hours ago, bjornpdx said:

Very creative vocal/guitar interplay. I understand maybe half the lyrics but I get the gist. I think you need more transition into the calm guitar part at the end.
-Bjorn

thanks for listen/comments.thanks,jack c

[equality]

4 hours ago, jack c. said:

thanks for listen/comments.explain more about bass notes.thanks,jack c

In the beginning of the calm part it seems that the bass leaves out marking beat one in some bars. But listening to that again, I realize it's done on purpose and I think it's quite effective and contributes to the mood of the second part of your tune. Sorry for nitpicking. I should have listened better.  

[jack c.]

On 1/16/2024 at 11:57 AM, equality said:

Sorry for nitpicking. I should have listened better.  

hey mate:we grow by nitpicking this forum has helped me endlessly.jack c