daryl1968 Posted April 18, 2023 Share Posted April 18, 2023 Hi nice forum folk I hope you are all well. Here's a new song that Ed Kocol (Bapu) and I wrote and the fab James Griffiths (JamesG1213) played on. Baps also plays bass and the current Mrs Daryl1968 sings backing vocals. Nits and crits welcome - lyrics below link You Shaped Hole in My Heart Written by Ed Kocol and Daryl Greenway Guitar James Griffiths Bass Ed Kocol Vocals, keyboards etc by Staypress V1 Starting from nothing was what we had We never saw it as good or bad For better or worse, we gave it our all Just how could we fall? V2 Same old story we wouldn't last But all the glory is in the past It's you and me in heaven on earth We'll show them what we're worth Prechorus But I need to speak my mind I don't mean to be unkind Chorus i told you right from the start, there's a you shaped hole in my heart V3 We kept calm and carried on Creating the words to our song Verse after verse continued to flow As we put on our show Prechorus Chorus Bloody lovely solo here Chorus to end 7 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
markno999 Posted April 18, 2023 Share Posted April 18, 2023 Daryl, Good song, very upbeat and enjoyable listen. Performances are all very well done. No crits other than the toms seems a bit boomy/ringy in the mix. If using SD3 try the envelope settings in the kit piece properties for taming. Otherwise good. Regards 1 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lynn Wilson Posted April 18, 2023 Share Posted April 18, 2023 Daryl, you and Ed have cooked up a terrific song! The words and music are a perfect pair, and all the performances are polished. You have raised the bar, yet again, for the rest of us 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mark skinner Posted April 18, 2023 Share Posted April 18, 2023 Such a Nice Clean mix. I thought this was Great writing and a Steller performance by all.. mark 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daryl1968 Posted April 21, 2023 Author Share Posted April 21, 2023 On 4/18/2023 at 8:39 PM, markno999 said: Daryl, Good song, very upbeat and enjoyable listen. Performances are all very well done. No crits other than the toms seems a bit boomy/ringy in the mix. If using SD3 try the envelope settings in the kit piece properties for taming. Otherwise good. Regards Thanks so much Mark. Did Bapu pay you to mention the ringing tom thing lol? We had a 'disagreement' on it - he (and you) were probably right Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wookiee Posted April 21, 2023 Share Posted April 21, 2023 Classic Greenaway and Bapu work, nice guitar from James. Production sound nice here, lyrics nicely written good vocal presentation. Worthy of a I think. 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
markno999 Posted April 21, 2023 Share Posted April 21, 2023 8 hours ago, daryl1968 said: Thanks so much Mark. Did Bapu pay you to mention the ringing tom thing lol? We had a 'disagreement' on it - he (and you) were probably right Daryl, no bribery was involved?. I am a fan of 70's tom sounds so like them dry and no ring. It just stood out because the rest of the track is so clean. If you are going for a vibe with the toms holding out longer you could probably pull back the envelope if using SD3 and then use a nice reverb with HPF to have them ring a little longer without the whole drum head ringing. Just a thought. Regards 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daryl1968 Posted April 21, 2023 Author Share Posted April 21, 2023 16 minutes ago, markno999 said: Daryl, no bribery was involved?. I am a fan of 70's tom sounds so like them dry and no ring. It just stood out because the rest of the track is so clean. If you are going for a vibe with the toms holding out longer you could probably pull back the envelope if using SD3 and then use a nice reverb with HPF to have them ring a little longer without the whole drum head ringing. Just a thought. Regards yeah this tom was from a weird drum sound set from Battery (Native Instruments) - I'm not sure what I was thinking. This song started very differently to how it ended up and that tom was a hanger on from the previous incarnation Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bapu Posted April 21, 2023 Share Posted April 21, 2023 6 minutes ago, daryl1968 said: This song started very differently to how it ended up and that tom was a hanger on from the previous incarnation Time for an "unscheduled disassembly"? 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
treesha Posted April 21, 2023 Share Posted April 21, 2023 Great song ! all the ppl/elements are very good and together very very good! Enjoyed it all. Personally I would like the bass up a tiny bit louder, just me. 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larry T. Posted April 21, 2023 Share Posted April 21, 2023 Well put together all around. Arrangement, playing, mix???? 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Johnbee58 Posted April 22, 2023 Share Posted April 22, 2023 You sure know how to write a pop song. Lots of greats twists & turns. Lyrics are clever. Nice and tight performances by all. ?John B 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bajan Blue Posted April 22, 2023 Share Posted April 22, 2023 Hi Guys Great Track? - my only comment would be on the toms - definitely a bit on the boomy side! Apart from that, this really is good and I enjoyed it a lot Cool stuff Nigel 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daryl1968 Posted April 22, 2023 Author Share Posted April 22, 2023 On 4/18/2023 at 10:24 PM, Lynn Wilson said: Daryl, you and Ed have cooked up a terrific song! The words and music are a perfect pair, and all the performances are polished. You have raised the bar, yet again, for the rest of us Thanks so much Lynn. We must be overdue a colab mate..... 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ross Smithe Posted April 22, 2023 Share Posted April 22, 2023 Very nice tune! Catchy hooky melody, good clean mix. Great job!! ??? 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daryl1968 Posted April 23, 2023 Author Share Posted April 23, 2023 On 4/19/2023 at 12:32 AM, mark skinner said: Such a Nice Clean mix. I thought this was Great writing and a Steller performance by all.. mark Thanks so much Mark Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SUPAREELS Posted April 23, 2023 Share Posted April 23, 2023 Clean and catchy performance, great to hear James is still playing ... I don't have a prob with the toms ...fits the song just fine (you can pm me with the cheque Bapu) ATB Steve 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FreeEarCandy Posted April 23, 2023 Share Posted April 23, 2023 Snappy catchy tempo. You have a good singing voice for this kind of tune. Everything else sound good too. 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
steve@baselines.com Posted April 23, 2023 Share Posted April 23, 2023 Cool tune - thanks for posting lyrics. 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makke Posted April 24, 2023 Share Posted April 24, 2023 An enjoyable melodic song. Good recording and sounds. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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