Lynn Wilson Posted July 15, 2019 Posted July 15, 2019 (edited) I'm very concerned about what's happening on our Mexican border so I wrote this song. I'm trying to stay neutral on this, so I'm not calling anybody out, just drawing attention to the situation. The song can be found here: https://www.soundclick.com/html5/v4/player.cfm?songID=13899237 Edit (7/16): I redid the bass drum throughout this per suggestions from several of you. Lyrics: Raise your banners high Show them off with pride Let your spirits fly Swim against the tide There’s no way to ignore the crisis on the border The danger’s less or more to slip into disorder The cost of living in a land of liberty That’s the price we pay so we can all be free CHORUS: I remember when our children were the future Throughout history we took the time to nurture Now the day has come we just don’t hear them crying We took their hopes away and stole their silver lining Independence Day used to mean so much But, lately something’s changed It feels we’re out of touch CHORUS We keep on finding ways to break a mother’s heart Her baby’s in a cage, her family’s torn apart CHORUS Edited July 17, 2019 by Lynn 2 1
Hidden Symmetry Posted July 15, 2019 Posted July 15, 2019 Difficult times these days & the urgency comes through in your song. 1
SPAK Posted July 15, 2019 Posted July 15, 2019 Hi m8 Love the message and the song, the mix needs a little tidying but nothing you can't handle ( sound a little rushed ? .. dunno I'll have another listen) Powerful stuff though ...really is .. Great work, Great lyrics Stay loose All the best Steve 1
daryl1968 Posted July 15, 2019 Posted July 15, 2019 Great song and performances Lynn. Drums/Percussion could use some work imho - I think there's a couple of kick drums that needn't be there and they're muddying the water 1
PhonoBrainer Posted July 15, 2019 Posted July 15, 2019 100% full speed ahead on this. The kick drum has a pattern that does not quite fit the groove. The groove is exemplified by congas, hi hats, and bass - make the kick sit with those and you are golden in the groove department. Vocals are processed nicely, and a good performance to boot. Your mud factor I think is in the kick drum. Even when the "breakdown" happens towards the end, if you drop the kick out, does it help your mix clarity? I will keep my slightly less furry ears out for the remix cheers, -Tom 1
amiller Posted July 15, 2019 Posted July 15, 2019 Cool lyrics. They really speak to our current times. 1
Lynn Wilson Posted July 16, 2019 Author Posted July 16, 2019 On 7/15/2019 at 8:22 AM, Hidden Symmetry said: Difficult times these days & the urgency comes through in your song. Thank you so much for taking the time to listen. On 7/15/2019 at 8:25 AM, SPAK said: Hi m8 Love the message and the song, the mix needs a little tidying but nothing you can't handle ( sound a little rushed ? .. dunno I'll have another listen) Powerful stuff though ...really is .. Great work, Great lyrics Stay loose All the best Steve Thanks, Steve for your time and comments. I'll work on the mix. On 7/15/2019 at 9:14 AM, daryl1968 said: Great song and performances Lynn. Drums/Percussion could use some work imho - I think there's a couple of kick drums that needn't be there and they're muddying the water Daryl, thanks mate! You're not the only one to point out the percussion issue. I'm working on that.
freddy j Posted July 16, 2019 Posted July 16, 2019 Absoflippinlutely, terrific number Lynn. The music and instrumentation complement and accentuate some really poignant lyrics. Sincere complements on your vocals. They are urgent, express great emotion and are even somewhat demanding but they are not over selling the song (over selling the song - a pet peeve of mine). Maybe a train drumming might be an alternative for the drums; however, I don't have a great concern with what you used. An excellent song with a message that needs to be heard. Well done my friend!!! 1
Lynn Wilson Posted July 17, 2019 Author Posted July 17, 2019 On 7/15/2019 at 12:25 PM, emeraldsoul said: 100% full speed ahead on this. The kick drum has a pattern that does not quite fit the groove. The groove is exemplified by congas, hi hats, and bass - make the kick sit with those and you are golden in the groove department. Vocals are processed nicely, and a good performance to boot. Your mud factor I think is in the kick drum. Even when the "breakdown" happens towards the end, if you drop the kick out, does it help your mix clarity? I will keep my slightly less furry ears out for the remix cheers, -Tom Tom, I completely redid the bass drum throughout the song. I had started out with preset grooves from SD3, but they had too much swing factor, so I hand programmed them with more of a straight feel. Thanks for your thoughtful input! It helps
Lynn Wilson Posted July 17, 2019 Author Posted July 17, 2019 On 7/15/2019 at 1:49 PM, amiller said: Cool lyrics. They really speak to our current times. 7 hours ago, Joad said: Love the lyrics, great song. Thank you so much for your kind words! Sometimes you get so full that it comes pouring out like tears.
bjornpdx Posted July 17, 2019 Posted July 17, 2019 Lynn The light reverb on the voc is just right. Guitar accompaniment is excellent. The horns ~2:20 didn't work for me. Really liked the section ~ 3:20 with just the bass, voc and minimal percussion. Great job esp on the lyrics! 1
Lynn Wilson Posted July 17, 2019 Author Posted July 17, 2019 Thanks Bjorn for you thoughtful input and taking the time to listen. Sorry you don't like the horn section, but I'm glad you like the other parts of the song. Btw, your new song is fabulous! Can't wait to hear it again.
kennywtelejazz Posted July 18, 2019 Posted July 18, 2019 Hi Lynn, I salute you for taking on this highly charged subject matter and making a song about it ...Your song has a lot of good things going for it ... I Dug your lyrics, vox , arrangement , guitar parts and the way you kept me guessing as to where the next change in the arrangement was gonna happen . Since this song seems to be a work in progress I will stay tuned to hear your next Mix / Song revision / installment . Good Job all the best, Kenny 1
Lynn Wilson Posted July 18, 2019 Author Posted July 18, 2019 4 hours ago, kakku said: Very good. Lyrics worth reading kakku, thanks for your time and kind words. You've always been very supportive!
Lynn Wilson Posted July 19, 2019 Author Posted July 19, 2019 15 hours ago, Kenny Wilson said: Hi Lynn, I salute you for taking on this highly charged subject matter and making a song about it ...Your song has a lot of good things going for it ... I Dug your lyrics, vox , arrangement , guitar parts and the way you kept me guessing as to where the next change in the arrangement was gonna happen . Since this song seems to be a work in progress I will stay tuned to hear your next Mix / Song revision / installment . Good Job all the best, Kenny Kenny, thanks for your ears and time. After reprogramming the bass drum, I'm going to stick with this version for the time being. I could polish this up a bit, but I want it somewhat raw, kinda like Neil Young's "Ohio", if you know what I mean. Thanks again! 1
DeeringAmps Posted July 21, 2019 Posted July 21, 2019 Very poignant! Your reference to “Ohio” is spot on! Many thanks for sharing. T 1
Lynn Wilson Posted July 21, 2019 Author Posted July 21, 2019 12 hours ago, DeeringAmps said: Very poignant! Your reference to “Ohio” is spot on! Many thanks for sharing. T Tom, thank you for sharing your thoughts. I'm very grateful.
thegaltieribrothers Posted July 27, 2019 Posted July 27, 2019 Hi Lynn, Great song + strong message, love the lyrics of the chorus especially. Great vocal performance + guitar solo as well. Thanks for sharing. Good Job! regards paul 1
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