a kiss

[jack c.]

 

[Kevin Walsh]

I was only able to listen to the first few minutes but enjoyed what I heard, especially the vocals. Nicely done! I will give the rest a listen tomorrow. 

[Larry T.]

this one is probably the best sounding mix you've ever done....great, great intro....the various sonic excursions that follow are impressive....i like it....but do feel it could be tightened up a bit to change it to a more accessible overall level....very, very well done jack ????

[jack c.]

10 hours ago, Larry T. said:

could be tightened up a bit to change it to a more accessible overall level

thanks so much larry.what do ya mean by above?jack c.

[Wookiee]

I agree this is one of the better tracks the ARP pattern in opening minutes seems a bit out of time.

[Larry T.]

6 hours ago, jack c. said:

thanks so much larry.what do ya mean by above?jack c.

 

hi jack, what I meant by "could be tightened up a bit to change it to a more accessible overall level" was my own personal taste would have done a different arrangement....I would shorten the verses, add the harp which comes in at 3:20 to more of the song and put an instrument solo section in....this is all my subjective taste ????

 

[jack c.]

On 5/4/2022 at 9:27 AM, Wookiee said:

I agree this is one of the better tracks the ARP pattern in opening minutes seems a bit out of time.

thanks for listen.it is out of time.jack c.

[David Sprouse]

Oh ya, the intro is sweet.    This evolves and grows nicely.   You'v e definitely finessed your style.

[whoisp]

Mix and mastering getting lot better Jack. On  the music side, take your time with your transitions where you go from one section to the next section , like going from a verse to a chorus, sometimes its good to do a clever transition or a pre-chorus which you nail at about 3:20 with a great run down but when you come back in to sing could have been more slick. I put that ride/crash repeat cymbal back more, out front to much when you start singing at the start which as the affect of swallowing  your vocal in the verb at times, i probably would have done a subtle rim tap or cow bell instead of that cymbal.  Only my opinion from a music POV is some changes could flow more, from where you go from one section to then a sudden change of sound to another section, sometimes it works sometimes it doesn't. Maybe needed a key change or more of a progression with chords at times to get more range from your vocal. Sometimes its good to step back for couple of days and then go back with fresh ears,  we can become entrenched with so much going on and not hear certain things because we sort of desensitise. Good work

[jack c.]

8 hours ago, whoisp said:

Mix and mastering getting lot better Jack.

thank you.jack c.

[jack c.]

18 hours ago, David Sprouse said:

Oh ya, the intro is sweet.    This evolves and grows nicely.   You'v e definitely finessed your style.

thanks mate.jack c.

[Douglas Kirby]

Nice work Jack - this is a unique song.  It sounded like a lot of work on the keys for this one.  Your vocal made me think a bit of Ian Anderson.

Overall - nicely done -  sounded like a good mix to my ears.

[Bajan Blue]

Nice stuff Jack - really like the start - echo what Wookie said re the timing - just jars a bit

Mix is excellent

Cool

Nigel

 

[DeeringAmps]

?’s here jack!

t

would I trim some “fat”?

not my song, not my production…

[jack c.]

On 5/7/2022 at 3:08 PM, Douglas Kirby said:

Overall - nicely done -  sounded like a good mix to my ears.

thanks douglas.jack c.

[jack c.]

On 5/9/2022 at 11:55 AM, Bajan Blue said:

Nice stuff Jack - really like the start - echo what Wookie said re the timing - just jars a bit

almost all i do is in time.i wanted some time off.jack c.

[jack c.]

On 5/9/2022 at 12:05 PM, DeeringAmps said:

?’s here jack!

so tom i be doing all kinds of different ways to master,so how does it fit into your marvelous ears as-14?jack c.