Paul Bush Posted October 1, 2021 Share Posted October 1, 2021 (edited) Hi chaps , well i posted this one a week ago only to find out it just wasnt up to par so here´s a new mixdown ,any comments appreiciated cheers P Edited October 1, 2021 by Paul Bush 3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jack c. Posted October 1, 2021 Share Posted October 1, 2021 some of your voices notes are a tad off.tighten music and drums.bring up bass guitar.you are on the correct road.keep of the fine work.jack c. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
whoisp Posted October 1, 2021 Share Posted October 1, 2021 I feel there is some parts a tad rushed and it becomes to loose due to the drums arrangement i would say im my humble opinion. The rhythm guitar and bass go.... da darrr.. da da dar.. da.. and the drum kick and snare should be hitting those strums on the rhythm and bass hits on kick. Great song but i would say It sounds like you are struggling with the drum programming on this one, sorry to be critical, i could be just me with my ear and my drum style 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paul Bush Posted October 2, 2021 Author Share Posted October 2, 2021 Thanks whoisp, it`s always the drums with me , I really struggle they start off well and for some reason after Ive added some fills they- I go astray cheers 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
whoisp Posted October 2, 2021 Share Posted October 2, 2021 3 hours ago, Paul Bush said: Thanks whoisp, it`s always the drums with me , I really struggle they start off well and for some reason after Ive added some fills they- I go astray cheers Drum's are not my strong point but i sort of know how i want them to sound, takes me ages and ages to program. Sometimes i slow things down, put a standard beat all way through, then split it into sections, to add more arrangement or remove with fills etc into each key apart or bring into a new section. i.e. pre-verse or verse or break and chorus etc good work though, clean recording 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jwnicholson78 Posted October 4, 2021 Share Posted October 4, 2021 Cool song, and the vocals sound good. For me the overall timing is a little rocky. I'm not sure if it's the drums that are off (do you 'play' them or program them) or if it's a more general issue. Some of the guitar licks don't seem to line up with the vocals. It's a good start. Tighten things up and I thnk you'll be on the right track! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David Sprouse Posted October 4, 2021 Share Posted October 4, 2021 (edited) I really love your voice. It sounds vaguely familiar...like I heard it on the radio in the 80's<?> Your song writing is first rate. Reminds me of twp groups: the knack and the romantics. Edited October 4, 2021 by David Sprouse 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PhonoBrainer Posted October 4, 2021 Share Posted October 4, 2021 If you soloed the drums, and put a metronome on them, I bet they would sound fine. I think you just need to slice and slide the guitar strums around to match the drum timing. Very cool 80s vocal throwback fun! Catchy too. cheers, -Tom 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bajan Blue Posted October 4, 2021 Share Posted October 4, 2021 Hi Paul I really like this track and I think this could be stellar - reminds me a lot of a Nick Lowe song However, I do agree with the comments re the timing issues - once you get them sorted this will be great Nigel 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paul Bush Posted October 6, 2021 Author Share Posted October 6, 2021 On 10/4/2021 at 5:27 AM, David Sprouse said: I really love your voice. It sounds vaguely familiar...like I heard it on the radio in the 80's<?> Your song writing is first rate. Reminds me of twp groups: the knack and the romantics. Hi David , and thanks for the encouraging comments , I dont like to pat myself on the back (never do) but I `m rather pleased with the vocals I think these are the best Ive recorded since being on this forum , once again its all down to practice, trial and error, and dumm luck cheers Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CSW Posted October 7, 2021 Share Posted October 7, 2021 This is a really good song! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeeringAmps Posted October 9, 2021 Share Posted October 9, 2021 Agree with all above. The tune is there. The “band” just needs to tighten up. t strip it down to the drum buss and vocals. See where you’re at. Bring everything else in one at a time. we’ve all been there ( well I have anyway) building these things one track at a time, no “interaction” between players; not as easy as it sounds. worth the extra work on this one Paul. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paul Bush Posted October 9, 2021 Author Share Posted October 9, 2021 Hi Tom, I just listened to it on my phone and it was awfull at some points it sounded as if a drunk octupus had invaded the studio and had a bash at the drums with some cooking utensils , Its all about putting enough time into the recording, I love the writing and the playing bit , but I lack the patience to polish it off (and this sounded as if Id drunk litre of polish ) stripping it back and addding the tracks one by one to get some perspective is a good idea so I,ll definately give that a go ,the winter is slowly rearing its head here in Austria so i´ll have lots of time , thanks once again for taking the time to respond and giving some sound advice cheers P 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
freddy j Posted October 13, 2021 Share Posted October 13, 2021 This song has a great commercial sound to it. There are some valid points above. However, as one who struggles with drums and timing, I can appreciate the difficulty of trying to get everything timed. I think that you have a good thing going here! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antler Posted October 13, 2021 Share Posted October 13, 2021 Love the song Paul - it's got a good classic rock feel to it, and kinda reminds me of John Mellencamp in places. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makke Posted October 28, 2021 Share Posted October 28, 2021 Nice poprock song. Good vocals and sounds ? 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thegaltieribrothers Posted November 3, 2021 Share Posted November 3, 2021 Hi Paul, I liked the song and the lyrics especially the hook, definitely very 80's. I'm not too bothered by timing issues as the song seemed to get stronger the more it went on. Thanks for sharing. Good Job! regards paul 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Douglas Kirby Posted November 3, 2021 Share Posted November 3, 2021 Cool tune Paul, and I thought you did a fine job on the vocals - nicely done. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lynn Wilson Posted November 3, 2021 Share Posted November 3, 2021 Paul, I love this song and your vocals! I agree with all the comments regarding the timing issues. Once you get those issues settled, this will be a GEM! I don't know what drums you're working with, but a rather simple part would fit the bill, imo. Hope to hear this again. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paul Bush Posted November 6, 2021 Author Share Posted November 6, 2021 Hi and thanks Lynn , what started out as a simple riff got intresting as time went on I added a few bits and pieces and it grew on me , I will have to re-do a lot to get it just right but after listening to it so many times my brain just smooths everything out and I lose the thread somehow , its at times like these one really need a second pair of ears in the studio (which i dont have) for instance I`m writing a new song with the keys and with a backing toontrack beat so i´m now searching for the right groove .......its never ending Im actually thinking of trying out the cakewalk drums hit them with my finger and paste ..thanks for taking the time to comment.....cheers paul Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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