bjornpdx Posted April 27, 2019 Share Posted April 27, 2019 Are We Through? Revised version Ancient history. The lyrics are close to what was said at that time but I may have embellished a bit. There might be some Melodyne artifacts in the vocal, but this is the best I could do. Thanks for listening. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Douglas Kirby Posted April 28, 2019 Share Posted April 28, 2019 I thought it was a touching song - from the heart. I enjoyed your vocal - it sounded fine to me - I didn't hear the Melodyne artifacts. Just a thought - try a vocal double on certain parts of the vocal track, just to mix it up a bit - add some variation. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bjornpdx Posted April 29, 2019 Author Share Posted April 29, 2019 Douglas Thanks. Good suggestion about vocal doubling. I'm going to give that a try on my current project. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cookie Jarvis Posted April 29, 2019 Share Posted April 29, 2019 Vocal doubling was a great suggestion, just make sure you record the double as a separate track and not just a copy and paste, the slight differences in phrasing and timing will thicken those parts you choose to emphasize Bill 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lynn Wilson Posted April 29, 2019 Share Posted April 29, 2019 Bjorn, this is a sad song just from the lyrics point of view, yet, the music is almost uplifting. I think some of your phrasing is a bit awkward, but the message comes through clearly. Your voice has an unique quality that you're beginning to tap into, and it gives me the impression of sincerity. You have surprised me quite a bit over time, and I always look forward to your next song. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bjornpdx Posted May 1, 2019 Author Share Posted May 1, 2019 Bill, thanks for listening and commenting. Lynn, thanks again for your input. It's a sad song with a well worn ending, but when it happens to you it becomes way more than just a cliche. I agree about the phrasing which is something I deal with in my everyday speech. Bit of a problem for me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ramscapri Posted May 1, 2019 Share Posted May 1, 2019 (edited) Nice track bjornpdx. I liked the cool guitars and vocals were good too. Quote Ancient history. The lyrics are close to what was said at that time but I may have embellished a bit. There might be some Melodyne artifacts in the vocal, but this is the best I could do. Thanks for listening. Edited May 1, 2019 by ramscapri Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kakku Posted May 2, 2019 Share Posted May 2, 2019 Very good song and performances were also good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thegaltieribrothers Posted May 3, 2019 Share Posted May 3, 2019 Hi Bjorn, A sad song but an excellent vocal performance. Like the solo especially. Thanks for sharing. Good Job! regards paul Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SPAK Posted May 4, 2019 Share Posted May 4, 2019 (edited) Listened to this a few times and I'm in agreement with Lynn, in that the phrasing is awkward in places and distracts the listener from, what I believe, are very powerful lyrics so maybe try not to loose the meter by reducing the lyric if it's a problem in everyday life. All in this is one of your best songs. For me I think the vocal needs some help in places as you have a soft breathy kind of voice .. I think what gets me is the music box sound of guitar against your vocal, I really like this one mate as it's my kind of genre ? ... so,.. still needs a little work though, ( IMO ) but an excellent bit of songwriting ... warts and all ?? Best Regards Steve Edited May 4, 2019 by SPAK Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bjornpdx Posted May 4, 2019 Author Share Posted May 4, 2019 ramscapri, kakku and Paul Thanks for taking the time to comment Steve, I cringed when I listened to my voice on this song, but I sent it out anyway because it just wasn't getting any better. Probably should have tried a lower key to lose the whispers, but wouldn't have worked anyway. I can phrase words pretty well in text but in spoken words not so much and that becomes obvious in a recording. Anyway, I appreciate the comments about the quality of the song which means a lot to me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SPAK Posted May 5, 2019 Share Posted May 5, 2019 (edited) edit Edited May 8, 2019 by SPAK Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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