jack c. Posted September 1, 2021 Share Posted September 1, 2021 (edited) Edited September 7, 2021 by jack c. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larry T. Posted September 1, 2021 Share Posted September 1, 2021 Nice work. Certain sections harken my ears over to King Crimson's classic track Indiscipline. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jack c. Posted September 1, 2021 Author Share Posted September 1, 2021 27 minutes ago, Larry Terrano said: Nice work. Certain sections harken my ears over to King Crimson's classic track Indiscipline. thanks one of me favorite bands.jack c. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeeringAmps Posted September 2, 2021 Share Posted September 2, 2021 Hey Jack, I going to be a little hard here, I'm coming from the perspective that I've been asked to produce on this one. a) at 4:49 its a bit too long, given the repetition in the "riff", and the vocal coming in at 0:52; right? You have some build going on, which is good, but its taking too long to get to the "meat"."Don't bore us, get to the chorus"; right? b) the vocal has to come up, I can barely understand the words, although I did the catch "I'm a glutton for punishment, or so my father said". (bear in mind my "ears" lately have been a bit "challenged"; old age is finally catching up with me.) c) do I hear some kind of "pad" way down in the mix, a B3 maybe? Or the synth (mellotron?) that comes in later? These are my immediate concerns. For me, the "bones" are here, just needs some work... big plus on the 5/4 time sig t 18 hours ago, Larry Terrano said: King Crimson yeah I can hear the influence Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jack c. Posted September 2, 2021 Author Share Posted September 2, 2021 36 minutes ago, DeeringAmps said: Hey Jack, I going to be a little hard here, I'm coming from the perspective that I've been asked to produce on this one. a) at 4:49 its a bit too long, given the repetition in the "riff", and the vocal coming in at 0:52; right? You have some build going on, which is good, but its taking too long to get to the "meat"."Don't bore us, get to the chorus"; right? b) the vocal has to come up, I can barely understand the words, although I did the catch "I'm a glutton for punishment, or so my father said". (bear in mind my "ears" lately have been a bit "challenged"; old age is finally catching up with me.) c) do I hear some kind of "pad" way down in the mix, a B3 maybe? Or the synth (mellotron?) that comes in later? These are my immediate concerns. For me, the "bones" are here, just needs some work... big plus on the 5/4 time sig t yeah I can hear the influence no,no,no i don't want anymore of your valuable time. i played in a black band for decades so we're used the long boring feel. hey mate:i lost lots of hearing playing in said band! the pad at what point in the song? time signatures come as natural as breathing.remember i don't read or write music.as me old trombone called me music loesch a glyphics because i handed him parts such as c,d,f,e etc.no time signatures length of each note.anything ya need to say to me i take as a helping hand which i sure do need!!!!1jack c. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeeringAmps Posted September 2, 2021 Share Posted September 2, 2021 11 minutes ago, jack c. said: pad at what point in the song? my "ears"; in the verse/chorus, I "think" I'm hearing something buried in the mix. t Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jack c. Posted September 2, 2021 Author Share Posted September 2, 2021 5 hours ago, DeeringAmps said: my "ears"; in the verse/chorus, I "think" I'm hearing something buried in the mix. first and second parts contain 2 different guitars plus a bass.nothing else.by the way one of me most favorite bands is called gentle giant to me they were the best players/singers ever.you like time signatures well they don't play in 4/4 much.i call them mistral,classical ,punk hard rock.this song long and drawn out is sort of similar to their stuff.by the way did ya hear the violin,cello part almost in the middle? jack c. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeeringAmps Posted September 2, 2021 Share Posted September 2, 2021 2 minutes ago, jack c. said: did ya hear the violin,cello part almost in the middle? Is that what I thought was the Mellotron? t Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bajan Blue Posted September 3, 2021 Share Posted September 3, 2021 Jack definitely echo the King Crimson reference I enjoyed this, although I would still like to hear your vocals with a little less distortion on them - you have an interesting voice so lets here it!! Nigel Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jack c. Posted September 3, 2021 Author Share Posted September 3, 2021 4 hours ago, Bajan Blue said: Jack definitely echo the King Crimson reference i don't hear this king crimson comparison,but i sure do appreciate it.thanks for listen/comments.jack c Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jack c. Posted September 3, 2021 Author Share Posted September 3, 2021 16 hours ago, DeeringAmps said: Is that what I thought was the Mellotron? t most likely.jack c. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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