garybrun Posted December 4, 2020 Share Posted December 4, 2020 (edited) Hi folks haven't posted any material for a while as I have been busy with live streaming work! Anyway here is a song by a group called Casting Crowns and it is a work in progress for me. As always I appreciate your comments and will update the project as they come in. Cheers, Gary Oh little town of Bethlehem Looks like another silent night Above your deep and dreamless sleep A giant star lights up the sky And while you're lying in the dark There shines an everlasting light For the King has left his throne And is sleeping in a manger tonight, tonight Oh Bethlehem, what you have missed while you were sleeping For God became a man And stepped into your world today Oh Bethlehem, you will go down in history As a city with no room for its King While you were sleeping While you were sleeping Mary shivers in the cold Trying ti keep the savior warm Born among the animals Wrapped in dirty rags because there was no room for him In the world he came to save Oh Bethlehem, what you have missed while you were sleeping For God became a man And stepped into your world today Oh Bethlehem, you will go down in history As a city with no room for its King While you were sleeping While you were sleeping Oh countries of Scandinvia Looks like another silent night As we're sung to sleep by philosophies That save the trees and kill the children And while we're lying in the dark There's a shout heard 'cross the eastern sky For the bridegroom has returned And has carried his bride away in the night, in the night Norway, what will we miss while we are sleeping Will Jesus come again And leave us slumbering where we lay Norway will we go down in history As a country with no room for its King Will we be sleeping Will we be sleeping Scandinavia Looks like another silent night Edited December 5, 2020 by garybrun Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beagle Posted December 5, 2020 Share Posted December 5, 2020 (edited) Hey Gary - I love this song by Casting Crowns! the piano sounds really great on this! the vocals, don't do it for me, tho. they're not all "together" sync'd and they're louder than the piano and other instruments. too much reverb on them, too. don't hide your vocals behind verb and multiple tracks. they will sound great on their one! I'd suggest going back down to one track, you could comp different parts if no one track is good all the way through. I'd love to hear some harmonies, too. you could do harmonies with yourself if you don't have someone else to help. great job! thanks for sharing! Edited December 5, 2020 by Beagle 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted December 5, 2020 Author Share Posted December 5, 2020 (edited) will come back with another version... this was experimenting. thanks for the comments. Will try adding some harmonies later... Edited December 5, 2020 by garybrun Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted December 5, 2020 Author Share Posted December 5, 2020 (edited) When I changed to single voice Sound cloud kicked it out for copywrite issues ? Edited December 5, 2020 by garybrun Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Douglas Kirby Posted December 5, 2020 Share Posted December 5, 2020 Great lead vocal - that's what really stood out to me. You can really sing. You mixed it nicely as well - upfront and warm. I enjoyed the lyrics as well - good job there. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted December 5, 2020 Author Share Posted December 5, 2020 (edited) Thanks.... update coming shortly. I've added a few vocal changes. Edited December 5, 2020 by garybrun Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted December 5, 2020 Author Share Posted December 5, 2020 1 hour ago, Douglas Kirby said: I enjoyed the lyrics as well - good job there. I didnt write... but a few little changes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mark skinner Posted December 7, 2020 Share Posted December 7, 2020 Gary , Great song and especially your "silky" vocals. I don't know what's happening with the synth and piano but they don't have the clarity I think they need to compliment your vocals. They may be just a little too far up front. I think the vocals should be the star in this one with the backing just quietly reinforcing it . Anyway .. I know it won't be done till you're happy with it . Enjoyed it .. mark 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted December 8, 2020 Author Share Posted December 8, 2020 8 hours ago, mark skinner said: Gary , Great song and especially your "silky" vocals. I don't know what's happening with the synth and piano but they don't have the clarity I think they need to compliment your vocals. They may be just a little too far up front. I think the vocals should be the star in this one with the backing just quietly reinforcing it . Anyway .. I know it won't be done till you're happy with it . Enjoyed it .. mark As always thanks Mark for the encouragement. 100% agree on the points and I am working on it. I will post an update when Im done. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Supa Reels Posted December 8, 2020 Share Posted December 8, 2020 You know that sometimes all a song needs is the message, warts an' all, I have always felt your vocal is burnt chocolate .. soothing with an edge ... who played piano, a little bright in the mix but effective, although sometimes a contrast in the melody can be a great help to reach the listener, in the work you achieved this before your chorus .. have to say overall this song reached my heart ... really .... and you don't need my comment mate to know you have talent ! Great songwriting thanks Stay well Steve Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted December 8, 2020 Author Share Posted December 8, 2020 8 hours ago, SupaReels said: Great songwriting thanks Stay well Steve Thanks so much for the feedback.... but I have not written this song. I just sang to it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David Sprouse Posted December 9, 2020 Share Posted December 9, 2020 I like your voice Gary Brun. The lyrics are kind of wild, almost irreverent? maybe not. I've never understood modern Christian music (if that's what casting crowns is), just not my cup of tea. Great production though and very entertaining. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted December 9, 2020 Author Share Posted December 9, 2020 34 minutes ago, David Sprouse said: I like your voice Gary Brun. The lyrics are kind of wild, almost irreverent? maybe not. I've never understood modern Christian music (if that's what casting crowns is), just not my cup of tea. Great production though and very entertaining. Thanks for listening David and taking time to comment. Appreciated. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Supa Reels Posted December 9, 2020 Share Posted December 9, 2020 17 hours ago, garybrun said: Thanks so much for the feedback.... but I have not written this song. I just sang to it. Ok ... but what about the piano and arrangement and stuff ... Gotta tell ya it brought a tear and so I am interested ... / ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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