The Unwanted Visit (Final Mix?)

[Critical Chameleon]

Hey guys!

Hope all of you are doing well

Got this track I previously posted all done now!

Lyrics:

Intro

*Humming to melody*

*Doorbell*

Just a second, be right there

*Bang, bang, bang*

I'm coming, I'm coming, relax... jeez

*Door opening*

Oh… it's you

The ***** do you want?

Nah, I don't wanna hear you out

Please, just leave

 

Verse 1

Please, leave, I can't believe I have to sit this through

You're making me suffer and you agreed that we should quit it too

Seeing each other, you had to do it again didn't you?

Come to my home even though you know I have forbidden you

 

Remember last time I laughed at your acts and had you ridiculed?                

And yet you're back, how the hell do I get rid of you?

You're not supposed to be here, I know that we've been tight

But that relationship has sailed, you know the reasons why

 

You never treat me right, you beef, we fight, oh don’t apologize

You're such a mess I guess obsessed with blowing smoke behind my eyes  

I couldn’t care less if you meant it, all I know is I'm alright 

When I'm alone, please just go stop growing lies inside my mind

 

But it's not easy is it? Listen, it's smart to say farewell

We share the same visions these visits make it harder for ourselves

But how can you leave me when you're a part of all my cells?  

I need help, here I'm sittin' and just talking to myself
 

Chorus

We share this bruise

So why do you appear so cruel?                                                                        

How are you gonna carry through?

If you aren't there for you

And if it's scarin’ you

You gotta use that fear as fuel

You aren't gonna carry through

If you aren’t, there for you
 

Verse 2

Listen

I've wandered this earth as blind, searching for signs

I used to think there's nothing worse having no purpose in life

But I was wrong cuz what is worse and yes I'm certain this time

Is to hide from your own purpose cuz the hurdles are high

 

To realize you run in circles, and work a disguise  

You find so perfect, but it isn't and the person inside 

Knows that it isn't and this person plays games versus your mind  

I've felt pain, but I swear nothing can hurt me like I 

 

I don't know why I'm such a burden and can't service my life 

How it is a nurturing guy can turn and just murder my rhymes   

You know my body's burning with pride as I finish a lyric       

I feel terrific, optimistic, the sky is the limit           

 

Then in a blink of an eye I begin to mimic this critic  

The next minute I'm picnicking with a sinister cynic     

It's sickening, I'm listening, say I handle it okay

This belittling but ***** it man I stand in my own way
 

Chorus

We share this bruise

So why do you appear so cruel?                                                                        

How are you gonna carry through?

If you aren't there for you

And if it's scarin’ you

You gotta use that fear as fuel

You aren't gonna carry through

If you aren’t, there for you

 

Outro

*Door slamming*

Get the ***** out of here

I don't wanna hear from you ever again

Just get the ***** out of my head

Jesus *****ing Christ man

 

Edited October 3, 2020 by Critical Chameleon

[daryl1968]

I didn't hear the previous version but this sounds well balanced. Nice beat and hook. 

[treesha]

Good expressive song, I like the contrast between the density of the choruses and the less dense more spacious verses. I didn't hear other versions.  If you are singing all the parts, you have a good variety of how you sing.

[Critical Chameleon]

Thanks guys, appreciate it! 

I uploaded the master now instead

[kloon]

Wow, great track. Loved the chorus!

You could go even more "all in" on vocal harmonies and vocal layers on the chorus, but it's absolutely fine as it is as well.

Hope you get some rotation on this track, it deserves it.