mark skinner Posted June 3, 2020 Share Posted June 3, 2020 Here's a real simple country ballad going to a writer in Nashville for collaboration. Song credits are going to be interesting. We have the Exact first middle and last names . any suggestions I will pass on. Thanks mark 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
noynekker Posted June 4, 2020 Share Posted June 4, 2020 Mark . . . it's such an easy groove, that flows along with elegance . . . your guitar work, as always, is subtle and superb. My only song suggestion would be to accentuate the "Forever Man" (hook) more, make it stand out a bit more somehow . . . maybe a louder harmony vocal part, maybe a musical change up of some sort, away from the groove. I really like it simple the way it is, but casual listeners might need the hook to stand out more. Either way, I'm sure this song will do very well wherever it ends up ! . . . because it just sounds so great 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PhonoBrainer Posted June 4, 2020 Share Posted June 4, 2020 Yep, the guitars are magic in that mix, and I can hear the drums breathe. Great great stuff! You have an 8 measure intro, it could be 4. at 1:02 you have a four measure interlude, it could be 2. Overall the bass guitar - what's the plan there? I think I heard one but it's pretty soft in the mix. I know it's not rock, so subdued bass is fine, but dude that's pretty subdued such a great mix - I hope the Nashville committees don't double the tempo and add the crossover hiphop du jour. cheers, and good luck with it! -Tom 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Douglas Kirby Posted June 4, 2020 Share Posted June 4, 2020 Great job - I enjoyed the listen - good luck with getting this out in Nashville. I agree with emeraldsoul about the bass - it could be turned up a bit, IMO. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeeringAmps Posted June 4, 2020 Share Posted June 4, 2020 Another hit Mark! 9 hours ago, emeraldsoul said: Overall the bass guitar, I think I heard one but it's pretty soft in the mix Bass is fine on the Bose cans here, but they do tend to hype the low end. ? t 9 hours ago, emeraldsoul said: hope the Nashville committees don't double the tempo and add the crossover hiphop du jour ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bjornpdx Posted June 4, 2020 Share Posted June 4, 2020 Mark, I can picture this in a C&W music video. Same as noynekker above, I wanted the Forever Man part to stand out more and really hit the emotions, maybe by double tracking or adding some strings. But IDK you have such a great country voice that conveys the emotion behind the words really well, so probably better keeping it the way it is. So never mind. Hope you do well with it in Nashville. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mark skinner Posted June 4, 2020 Author Share Posted June 4, 2020 Fantastic suggestions so far. I agree with cutting the intro and getting it started sooner. I also thought the bass was low after listening more. It's There but not straying from the kick much and a little buried . It really gets lost when the vocals come in. This guy is really good about pulling a hook out of a simple song. Uses his own band to rerecord and uses pro demo singers before trying to shop the songs around. This may be another dead end , but he approached me about working with him. If it doesn't play out I'll redo it using everyone's suggestions and keep it for myself and give it away. All suggestions are welcomed and listened to. I only have 2 ears of my own. You guys are great. Thanks ... mark Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lynn Wilson Posted June 8, 2020 Share Posted June 8, 2020 Mark, this is a fabulous song that seems to transcend Nashville. It could stand as is, or be a starting point. Best of luck to you and thanks for sharing! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David Sprouse Posted June 9, 2020 Share Posted June 9, 2020 Enjoyed your song. Good luck with it. Resurrect Alan Jackson please. :D:D 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wookiee Posted June 10, 2020 Share Posted June 10, 2020 This is a beautiful song but the mix and arrangement need a few tweaks, Tom's suggestions are good, it would be nice to hear a little more of the Bass line. Could I suggest a change in the drum groove when you hit the chorus, just to bring it more to the listeners attention. That title is a great hook line but you need to deliver it with more intent, possibly even give it a 1 or 2 bar pause before delivery. Finally I am not a country music fan but if you made a few tweaks to this I would consider buying it, thanks for sharing. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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