Alan Posted February 3, 2020 Share Posted February 3, 2020 https://m.soundcloud.com/bodhi65/ill-carry-the-cross-ac 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Starise Posted February 3, 2020 Share Posted February 3, 2020 The guitar is such a great instrument for self expression. These one on ones (vocal + guitar) can seem to come directly from the soul. The message of the song will likely resonate with some. I had a little trouble finding the structure of the song though I think the intended message came through and overall the vocals fit the guitar well.. The vocals could use some tuning or retakes here and there, they were off just a tad here and there. Not by much. Thanks for sharing! 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alan Posted February 3, 2020 Author Share Posted February 3, 2020 Thanks I scratched it out yesterday just having fun. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PhonoBrainer Posted February 4, 2020 Share Posted February 4, 2020 Dig those lyrics, and your vocals "carry" a ton of raw energy and emotion. After he is done carrying the cross, he might consider adding some bass elements into the mix and bringing the drums up. But as you said, you are at the scratchpad stage. It's a great start. 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David Sprouse Posted February 4, 2020 Share Posted February 4, 2020 I dig your lyrics as well. Well thought out. You sing with alot of conviction 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted February 4, 2020 Share Posted February 4, 2020 (edited) HI Alan. reminds me a little of Larry Norman and Barry McGuire. Sipping whiskey from a paper cup You drown your sorrows till you can't stand up Take a look at what you've done to yourself Why don't you put the bottle back on the shelf Yellow fingers from your cigarettes Your hands are shaking while your body sweats Why don't you look into Jesus, He's got the answer Gonorrhea on Valentines Day And you're still looking for the perfect lay You think rock and roll will set you free You'll be deaf before your thirty three Shooting junk till your half insane Broken needle in your purple vein Your song and voice has a lot of potential. Edited February 4, 2020 by garybrun 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alan Posted February 5, 2020 Author Share Posted February 5, 2020 Thank you for the feedback. The family went to a super bowl party so I took a couple hours to play with this idea and sing, which I can’t down people are in the house. I so appreciate your comments. Many thanks. Alan 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeeringAmps Posted February 6, 2020 Share Posted February 6, 2020 Some serious introspection here I think. Great start, hope you find the time to bring it forward. t Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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