whoisp 32 Posted January 25 Just got this idea down tonight - Should i go straight into song like i have or maybe do a build up? or maybe start song on acoustic noting else then with a bit of vocal!! 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
treesha 91 Posted January 25 I like it the way it is. It makes me want to listen further. Curious where you will go next... 2 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
jack c. 159 Posted January 26 nice recording job and guitar.jack c. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
mark skinner 309 Posted January 26 The piano and acoustic sounds nice.. I thought the intro was too busy with the lead guitars. Sounded more like a break instead of easing you in to the smooth 1st verse. mark 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bajan Blue 525 Posted January 27 On 1/26/2021 at 12:34 AM, treesha said: I like it the way it is. It makes me want to listen further. Curious where you will go next... Exactly my thoughts - sounds like you could turn this into a good track Nigel 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
whoisp 32 Posted January 27 8 hours ago, Bajan Blue said: Exactly my thoughts - sounds like you could turn this into a good track Nigel I will try to turn into a good track, the idea is there, see what happens, i just wanted to try some comping for the first time. My acoustic needs a service, its not had one for 10yrs and fingers getting old, there's some buzz .. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
whoisp 32 Posted January 27 19 hours ago, mark skinner said: The piano and acoustic sounds nice.. I thought the intro was too busy with the lead guitars. Sounded more like a break instead of easing you in to the smooth 1st verse. mark My intention to have a busy intro, the mix will sort it out how i want it, this was an idea to get down to do a full song, had to get it down whilst was in head. i will do some more tonight and see what happens. The whole idea was to practice comping as i normally just do a couple of takes and choose one, as i just like writing but ive never done comping as i tend not to get ***** with detail, i like to keep it real and raw, but using a daw is changing me lol Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Starise 874 Posted January 27 Many directions you could take here. I would say you could get way more interesting with the drums and a bass. Maybe start the 1st verse intro with no vox and a more legato guitar with a build up from the guitar. Like a slow ramp up. If it's a three verse tune, maybe take it up a notch the second verse, then add a chorus that's a departure in chord progression from the verses, then back to a last verse and then either end it or add the chorus or a variation of it to the end, Could fade out with the same guitar that the song came in on to solidify the song as a whole. As for the words. Mysterious woman-How? What did she do? Maybe add that idea into the rest of the tune. Sometimes giving the subject a name helps. Something like "Oh Marie, how could you do that to me?" or " Marie she's out in the world turning silk for a rich man who wanders away from the sun" ......iow poetic writing as opposed to real situational writing. Just sayin' 2 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
whoisp 32 Posted January 28 22 hours ago, Starise said: Many directions you could take here. I would say you could get way more interesting with the drums and a bass. Maybe start the 1st verse intro with no vox and a more legato guitar with a build up from the guitar. Like a slow ramp up. If it's a three verse tune, maybe take it up a notch the second verse, then add a chorus that's a departure in chord progression from the verses, then back to a last verse and then either end it or add the chorus or a variation of it to the end, Could fade out with the same guitar that the song came in on to solidify the song as a whole. As for the words. Mysterious woman-How? What did she do? Maybe add that idea into the rest of the tune. Sometimes giving the subject a name helps. Something like "Oh Marie, how could you do that to me?" or " Marie she's out in the world turning silk for a rich man who wanders away from the sun" ......iow poetic writing as opposed to real situational writing. Just sayin' See where it takes me, its still a mystery haha 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
freddy j 400 Posted January 28 Great start! I look forward to hearing the finished product! 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
whoisp 32 Posted January 31 I'm polishing the mixing and mastering, near final stages. Should have a video knocked up with it by next weekend, it takes a different twist Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
whoisp 32 Posted February 6 On 1/28/2021 at 4:14 PM, freddy j said: Great start! I look forward to hearing the finished product! Finished, hope you like Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
whoisp 32 Posted February 6 Finished, that's the direction it went haha Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
whoisp 32 Posted February 6 On 1/27/2021 at 2:26 PM, Starise said: Many directions you could take here. I would say you could get way more interesting with the drums and a bass. Maybe start the 1st verse intro with no vox and a more legato guitar with a build up from the guitar. Like a slow ramp up. If it's a three verse tune, maybe take it up a notch the second verse, then add a chorus that's a departure in chord progression from the verses, then back to a last verse and then either end it or add the chorus or a variation of it to the end, Could fade out with the same guitar that the song came in on to solidify the song as a whole. As for the words. Mysterious woman-How? What did she do? Maybe add that idea into the rest of the tune. Sometimes giving the subject a name helps. Something like "Oh Marie, how could you do that to me?" or " Marie she's out in the world turning silk for a rich man who wanders away from the sun" ......iow poetic writing as opposed to real situational writing. Just sayin' On 1/27/2021 at 5:21 AM, Bajan Blue said: Exactly my thoughts - sounds like you could turn this into a good track Nigel Takes a twist 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
