fallen star

[thegaltieribrothers 173]

happy valentine's day ! - for some.

have a listen to fallen star my latest song + if you have time to pass a comment or critique that would be most welcome.

happy travels fellow Cakewalkers.

regards

paul

[Johnbee58 229]

Good tune.  Sad lyrics.  Your "stops" in the second verse add a unique touch.  Reminds me a lot of some of the 60s pop bands like Chad & Jeremy and The Association.

😀John B

 

[emeraldsoul 1,087]

Louder? Overall? I dunno, how do the levels sound relative to other tracks?

Very smooth bass, and the synthy pads that come and go are very subtle yet effective. The vocals carry me into a hybrid 60's - 80's quality. 60's for simplicity in the chorus, but definitely 80's in how the vocals are mixed. That might be a ludicrous observation, but there you go.

It's very catchy, that chorus, Stylistically Councilled and Depeche-Modular.

cheers,

-Tom

[SPAK 143]

Well put together song & chorus, sounds great to my old ears, but, .. Overall I think it needs work on the mix it's a little disjointed, maybe if you  bring the snare down a tad and give the guitars more space with a little love at the top end  ...  might give a better feel  but leave the pads and bass because as Tom has observed the bass with synth pads are spot on.

Good work guys ( Hope you'll forgive the critic .. waddo I know !)

ALB

Steve

 

[thegaltieribrothers 173]

Hi John,

Thanks for listening and your kind comments I think i was trying to evoke a 'peggy sue got married'/'guardians of the galaxy' soundtrack feel when doing this one.

Hi Tom,

Thanks for listening, I know what you mean about a hybrid 60's - 80's quality + nice I put you in mind of such musical luminaries as the Style Council + Depeche Mode.

Hi Steve,

Thank you for listening and for the critique which I am grateful for. I will have a look at your suggestions next time I look at the track as there's always room to get better.

Thank you all for listening and best wishes for your own musical travels.

regards

paul

 

[Wookiee 885]

I like it.

[DeeringAmps 805]

What he said. 

t

[Paul Bush 135]

Nice one guys , just cant beat a couple of stops to give a song that extra kick works perfectly . cheers paul DB

[Douglas Kirby 513]

First off I really liked your vocal - well done there. This song has a good hook on the chorus "Fallen Star" - very nice.  It's a well composed song.  I like those stops you put in there on the drum track. It does have a bit of an 80's vibe to it. Very catchy song - the type to sing along to.

Nicely done.

[ABull 84]

Terrific demo of your song -- the mix is clear and the vocals are sweet~~Allan.

[bjornpdx 594]

Paul

You have a talent for lyrics and in this song I know exactly of which you speak . Been there. Those "stops" didn't work for me but that's just me.  Enjoyed the song as always. 

[thegaltieribrothers 173]

Hi Wookie, Tom, Paul, Douglas, Allan + Bjorn,

Thanks for listening and commenting it is really appreciated.

regards

paul

[daryl1968 362]

cool song Paul - clever how the end of each verse resolves - loving the guitar licks

[Beagle 56]

oh boy!  this is a really nice song, Paul.  the lyrics are very sad, though.  

this may be an odd comment to you, but the lead guitar playing seems opposing to the lyrics.  it seems "happier" than the words it is complementing.  

just my 2 cents.

[thegaltieribrothers 173]

Hi Daryl,

Thanks for listening and commenting - glad you like my guitar playing.

Hi Beagle,

Thanks for listening, I was trying to get the musical equivalent of bittersweet or apple-sour by making the riff happy at first and then changing the backing when it reappears to give a space-like dimension.

Thank you both for listening and commenting it is really appreciated.

regards

paul 

 

[David Sprouse 377]

Sounds like the guy loved her but *deceived her*.  All they needed was dr. drew.  On my woof dales the voice sounded a little too loud in the mix,  enjoyed this very much.

Edited March 1, 2020 by David Sprouse

[freddy j 353]

This is really an excellent song Paul.  You have a knack for writing great introspective lyrics and matching very effective melodies for them.  You have done a really good job on the arrangement and I love the haunting sound of the accompanying instrumentation and that nice ending guitar solo.  I really enjoyed listening.  Thanks for posting.

[thegaltieribrothers 173]

Hi David,

Thanks for the feedback regarding the vocals and for listening.

Hi Freddy,

Thanks for your kind comments, introspective must be my middle name .😉

Thank you both for listening and commenting  it is really appreciated.

regards

paul

 

[geeare1 31]

I like the song and your arrangement, recording, mix, etc... Love the vocal and I really like the outro section.

[Jesse Screed 309]

nothing sucks more than falling in love

kiss it all good bye

sure, you get the bottle of wine and chocolate kisses

but you lose the only the one

this nice, brian