Douglas Kirby 513 Posted February 10, 2020 Hi Forum Folks, Here is another track off my album "A Gray Colored Sky". Any comments and critiques are welcome and thanks for listening. Here it is: https://www.soundclick.com/music/songInfo.cfm?songID=13964249 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
DeeringAmps 807 Posted February 12, 2020 More “Kirby” goodness. 3 top 10, 29 top 50; looks like things are going well. Thumbs up Doug! t 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
David Sprouse 379 Posted February 13, 2020 I envy your ability to write lyrics. Really excellent. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Johnbee58 229 Posted February 14, 2020 Good rock tune. The octave vocal work is very effective and a nice touch. 😀John B 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
emeraldsoul 1,087 Posted February 15, 2020 Love that guitar riff. And the other one with the phaser (flanger?) Vocals egg-sell-int!!! Another great one from you. Mix-wise I'd suck away a lot of the boom from those drums, and rein in the bass guitar as well. cheers, -Tom 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
thegaltieribrothers 173 Posted February 16, 2020 Hi Douglas, Love the booming drums at the start which announce a great rock tune which does not disappoint. Great lyrics and fantastic guitar solo - well played. Thanks for sharing. Good Job! regards paul 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Douglas Kirby 513 Posted February 19, 2020 DeeringAmps - Thank you very much for listening and for your comments. David Sprouse - Thank you for the compliment - I enjoy writing lyrics - you never know what's going to come of it. JohnBee58 - Thanks for lending your ears to my tune. emeraldsoul - I'll give the mix another listen based on your comments - thanks. thegaltieribrothers - Thank you very much for your comments. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
garybrun 553 Posted February 20, 2020 This a good song with good lyrics. Sounds a little boomy to me. Once again ... well done. I always state this... but we all paint very different pictures... these are just my personal views and what I would have done and in no way is it meant to diminish the work you have done here. I am listening on Focal TRIO6 BE 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Douglas Kirby 513 Posted February 20, 2020 2 hours ago, garybrun said: This a good song with good lyrics. Sounds a little boomy to me. Once again ... well done. I always state this... but we all paint very different pictures... these are just my personal views and what I would have done and in no way is it meant to diminish the work you have done here. I am listening on Focal TRIO6 BE Thanks Gary - I'll revisit the mix since both you and emeraldsoul think it's a bit boomy. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
daryl1968 362 Posted February 21, 2020 On 2/20/2020 at 9:34 AM, garybrun said: This a good song with good lyrics. Sounds a little boomy to me. Once again ... well done. I always state this... but we all paint very different pictures... these are just my personal views and what I would have done and in no way is it meant to diminish the work you have done here. I am listening on Focal TRIO6 BE I agree with Gary - great melodies and lyrics but there is some digital distortion with the final mix/master 2 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
michaelhanson 54 Posted February 23, 2020 I would back off the reverb on the drums in this production. They get lost in this mix and need to be a more prominent part of the song to drive it along. I’m not sure what’s going on with the Bass because I’m not hearing it well either? Those two elements becoming more prominent in the mix would help this production a lot. Great lyrics, vocals and guitar play! 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
bjornpdx 594 Posted February 23, 2020 Douglas Another great rock song though I have to say it sounds a bit like your others. Not that that takes anything away - I like the song and I admire the musicianship - but I think you could vary the formula a little. Love the guitar and vocal as always. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Douglas Kirby 513 Posted February 24, 2020 daryl1968 - Thanks for giving the song a listen - I did another remix so I hope I got rid of the boom. michaelhanson - Thanks for the compliments - I took your advice and backed off some reverb on the drums and I brought up the bass - thanks for your suggestions. bjornpdx - Thanks for your comments and for giving my song a listen. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
michaelhanson 54 Posted February 24, 2020 Much better Douglas. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Douglas Kirby 513 Posted February 24, 2020 4 minutes ago, michaelhanson said: Much better Douglas. Thanks Michael - appreciate you giving it another listen - your comments on the mix were spot-on. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
