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Hi guys,
As I mentioned in another thread I started English is not my mother tounge and I want to be sure that my texts make sense and are grammatically correct before I record them as noticing errors once recorded is a pain in the ***** on the confidence Therefore I would really appreciate feedback on this. It may be perceived as too harsh for some, but take it with a grain of salt.
Intro (whispers)
"This isn't good enough"
"You *****ing useless man"
"Yeah tell that bitch off"
"Cut her *****ing head off"
"You're never gonna make it"
"You don't have what it takes
Chorus
I hear voices calling, in my head they're shouting
Telling me these stories, in my head I'm drowning
Bla, bla, bla there's no day without it
I've gone crazy and I doubt that there's a way around itVerse 1
Man I'm sick of it, this one's ridiculous
I have a flu where all I do is done meticulous
("that's not true"), alright let me rescript this bit
I have no clue how many times that I've rewritten itI guess precise, nitpicking that's just slightly fittin'
Those definitions won't suffice for the life I'm livin'
.............I have guides and they're unforgiving
I'm fighting off my Hydes but they run this buildingThis building I've built, the prison I'm in
A system full of bugs always itching my skin
Look............. I can't be satisfied
No matter what I cook I have an appetiteFor more that's why I brush 'till my teeth fall out
That's why I'm crushing all my buttons 'till I scream out loud
.............My recipes have a piece of doubt
Cuz that's the way that it must taste to keep my demons proud ("good boy")Chorus
I hear voices calling, in my head they're shouting
Telling me these stories, in my head I'm drowning
Bla, bla, bla there's no day without it
I've gone crazy and I doubt that there's a way around itI hear voices calling, in my head they're shouting
Telling me these stories, in my head I'm drowning
Bla, bla, bla there's no day without it
I'm a crazy mother *****er there's no way around itVerse 2
Sometimes I lie, but here's an actual fact
I've had a about a million irrational acts
So when I'm chilling I relax in a bath full of ash
From the bridges that I've burnt in my laughable pastI've grown, my path, is still exposed to smolder
Though, a lot of dough's been loaded in my broken toaster
I'm older, though, opposed to homer
My show is still alive, the joke's not over
Yeah I smell funny, honey, it's my only odor
I repel, I don't troll, I'm a lonely ogre
Sure you can come for some homemade yogurt
With this tool though you're screwing with a roller coasterIt may be fun but it's a scary ride (why?)
Ride it too much and you'll be terrified (why?)
There's no such thing as a merry wife
"Cuz we're in charge and we ain't ever gonna share this guy" (aaaaaaaaaaaah)Chorus
I hear voices calling, in my head they're shouting
Telling me these stories, in my head I'm drowning
Bla, bla, bla there's no day without it
I've gone crazy and I doubt that there's a way around itI hear voices calling, in my head they're shouting
Telling me these stories, in my head I'm drowning
Bla, bla, bla there's no day without it
I'm a crazy mother *****er there's no way around itBreak
There are things that I've said that I've said i wouldn't
With strings I am led to do things I shouldn't
Singing in my head like enchanted I lose it
I attach to the threads and I dance to their music (x2)Verse 3
So, this day at work while I was jotting words
It suddenly occurred that I got such an urge
I'm not a perv, but yo I need to touch some girls
With breasts or not, I don't give a ***** I'd jerkOff to furry sheep, just lemme squeeze some butt
It's so absurd I dream, of all this freaky stuff
Like serving free drinks after I pee in cups
Like... running up in churches to kick jesus nutsAnd beating pups, ***** this beef needs to stop
This isn't me it's just a piece of my demons' plot
Evil *****s, you hear? "We're right next to you"
Don't I already have enough regrets produced?"We bet you do, but you're a co-pilot"
"And this flight of ours is on a low mileage"
"If we want you to be vile there is no niceness"
You just shut the ***** up when you're told quietChorus
I hear voices calling, in my head they're shouting
Telling me these stories, in my head I'm drowning
Bla, bla, bla there's no day without it
I've gone crazy and I doubt that there's a way around itI hear voices calling, in my head they're shouting
Telling me these stories, in my head I'm drowning
Bla, bla, bla there's no day without it
I'm a crazy mother *****er there's no way around it -
Thanks for the feedback Douglas!
We've made some edits.- Bass more definied
- Added some more vocals to intro
- Added back vocals to chorus
- Back vocals are slightly higher in volume
- Changed up second chorus
- Added a toy piano -
Thank you guys, much appreciated!
I'll let my mixing man known about the bass and hear what he has to say about it.I heard from one person that he felt like the vocals didn't entirely belong to the music. Is this something you reacted on?
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Hi guys,
Posted the lyrics here about three weeks ago and now finally the song is coming together It's not mastered yet, but the mix is pretty much final unless you have any ideas.
All feedback is much appreciated. I'm behind vocals and text so for me that's the most important part, but as I want the mix to be as good as possible I'd appreciate feedback on that as well. Not sure if any back vocals should be increased slightly in volume or if it's good as it is. Lyrics follow below. Btw, first track I ever sing on completely. I used to be a rapper.
Verse 1.
It was a good time, it was a good life
I had it all planned, never would I
Fall and flee, had it all in reach(see)
I was the king I, saw no obstacles
In my ring I, was unstoppable
All was great, now all has changed
Intro to chorus.Cuz I don't know, where I should go
All I know is this feeling
I seem okay, but I'm not great
Every day, oh I'm dreaming
Chorus.I just wanna be clear
I don't wanna be here
I don't wanna feel fear
I just wanna see hear
Touch the waves
Pain, pain wash away (x2)
Verse 2.Been a long search, on a brief trip
Taken wrong turns, often beefing
With myself, tell me is this my hell?(so)
Many dumb words, some are unheard
I've been told I'm, not a songbird
I've believed, this evil guy in meIntro to chorus.
Now I don't know, where I should go
All I know is this feeling
I seem okay, but I'm not great
Every day, oh I'm dreamingChorus.
I just wanna be clear
I don't wanna be here
I don't wanna feel fear
I just wanna see hear
Touch the waves
Pain, pain wash away (x2)Verse 3.
Is it worthless? Or is this my shot?
Such a circus, I know that I've got
Much to give, the strongest lust to live
(But)Is it too late? Or is it today?
I start walking, on my true way
Step by step so I can get som restIntro to chorus.
Cuz I do know where I should go
Yet all I hold is this feeling
I seem okay but I'm not great
Every day, oh I'm dreamingChorus.
I just wanna be clear
I don't wanna be here
I don't wanna feel fear
I just wanna see hear
Touch the waves
Pain, pain wash away (x2)- 1
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Thanks guys! Will keep you posted
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Hey guys,
Picking up music again after almost 5 years offs. It has always been an emotional rollercoaster. Anyway, before recording I wanted to make sure everything is as it should textwise. English is not my mother tounge and I have experience with noticing grammatical errors etc after song is recorded, mixed and master which I would like to avoid this time around.
So here's a piece I was planning to record this weekend; Wash away
Verse 1.
It was a good time, it was a good life
I had it all planned, never would I
Fall and flee, had it all in reach(see)
I was the king I, not an obstacle
Not a thing I, was unstoppable
All was great, now all has changed
Intro to chorus.Cuz I don't know, where I should go
All I know is this feeling
I seem okay, but I'm not great
Every day oh, I'm dreaming
Chorus.I just wanna be clear
I don't wanna be here
I don't wanna feel fear
I just wanna see hear
Touch the waves
Pain, pain wash away (x2)
Verse 2.Been a long search, on a brief trip
Taken wrong turns, often beefing
With myself, tell me is this my hell?(so)
Many dumb words, some are unheard
I've been told I'm, not a songbird
I've believed, this evil guy in meIntro to chorus.
Now I don't know, where I should go
All I know is this feeling
I seem okay, but I'm not great
Every day oh, I'm dreamingChorus.
I just wanna be clear
I don't wanna be here
I don't wanna feel fear
I just wanna see hear
Touch the waves
Pain, pain wash away (x2)Verse 3.
Is it worthless? Or is this my shot?
Such a circus, I know that I've got
Much to give, the strongest lust to live
(But)Is it too late? Or is it today?
I start walking, on my true way
Step by step so I can get som restIntro to chorus.
Cuz I do know where I should go
Yet all I hold is this feeling
I seem okay but I'm not great
Every day oh, I'm dreamingChorus.
I just wanna be clear
I don't wanna be here
I don't wanna feel fear
I just wanna see hear
Touch the waves
Pain, pain wash away (x2)
Your thoughts on changing artist name?
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Hey guys,
I've been into music back and forth for about 15 years and always gone under the name "illerill". This has a bit of a backstory to it. It comes from"illerrre" which I got when I was 11 and went crazy on the keyboards because I wanted to nick "killer" when gaming. Then a friend called me "illerill" when he heard me rap.
Anyway. I haven't released anything new in 5 years but I have some new-found motivation again. I'm thinking of changing artist name for the following reasons:
- I don't want to be associated with my old tracks because I don't like them. I'm very critical and judge them hard.
- I've heard that I have some similarties with Eminem and he is definitely an inspiration. Our artist names are fairly alike.
- illerill says nothing about my music.
Generally changing artist name isn't a good idea - or so I've heard and therefore I'm making this post. I want your thoughts on it. Maybe I'm missing something crucial, but I don't know what I have to lose doing it. I don't really have any listeners or followers on facebook, youtube nor spotify.
The new name I'm thinking of is "Conflicted Chameleon". It describes me and it's unique with one exception. There's a person on flickr that has this as a username. Does that matter?
I really appreciate your thoughts on this.