Top of the pops (new short song for critique)

[Smashing Galaxy]

Hi all,

A simple song here for critique please.  Have spent some time on the mastering and mixing.  It's short - a simple love song about missing home.

Any feedback - technical / creative v welcome.

Cheers.

[Morenoize]

Hi Smashing Galaxy, nice tune, well sung, wish the guitar was a bit louder.

 

Rik

[Smashing Galaxy]

thanks!  useful feedback, i will do some more tweaking in the mix.  really appreciate the time you took to listen. cheers.

[treesha]

I like it, I like your voice.  I was going to suggest strings, but then some came in i think. I would add some high strings, add another verse to make it longer if you have more to say. Enjoyed it.  

[mark skinner]

Fantastic vocals .  I think I'd bring the chorus in again at the ending and resolve it with "I'll be coming home soon". Maybe a couple of time with the last phrase.      Great song , enjoyed it ..  mark

[Smashing Galaxy]

22 hours ago, treesha said:

I like it, I like your voice.  I was going to suggest strings, but then some came in i think. I would add some high strings, add another verse to make it longer if you have more to say. Enjoyed it.  

Thanks so much. Yes the more I listen back, the more I think I could add another verse / chorus.... I wrote it years ago but only recently recorded it, so it's been dormant for years.

Will tinker and come back here with new version.

 

I can't take credit for the voice, that's my friend and collaborator. 

[Smashing Galaxy]

10 hours ago, mark skinner said:

Fantastic vocals .  I think I'd bring the chorus in again at the ending and resolve it with "I'll be coming home soon". Maybe a couple of time with the last phrase.      Great song , enjoyed it ..  mark

Thanks so much. Yes the commonest feedback I get is, "it's a bit short"... Definitely worth thinking about stretching it out a bit.