Paul Bush Posted March 7 Share Posted March 7 Hi so this is a pre mix down of The party girl , so much has been in the media about mental health issues so I thought Id`jump on the bandwagon and join in all comments are welcome https://www.bandlab.com/track/98571a8d-b4dc-ee11-85f9-6045bd2e11f9?revId=96571a8d-b4dc-ee11-85f9-6045bd2e11f9 Intro The Party girl paulbush As the footsteps disappear into the night Cold dark rain, stung her eyes as they waved goodbye Silhouetted by the street lights, as the cold wind bites.... The sound of breaking glass and the smell of closing time, Drowns out the clowns singing a song from years gone by, turns her back into the shadows and the blackness of the night.... of the street light Chorus And when its raining, its really pouring , And when she`s crying she´s really sobbing And when she`s hurtin, She`s hides it deep down inside and sigh`s Depression comes and goes , pull down shades Sitting all alone Chain smoking her time away Turn off the lights and stay in bed crawl away The phone rings and it frightens her half to death Pick it up make your excuses, put on a happy face Tell a joke... and, play to the crowd.... thats her saving grace ChorusAnd when she`s laughing.... she`s really screaming, And when she`s drinking.... she`s really steaming And when she`s happy.... Whats she`s trying to hide( ….... deep inside …....solo....... Even in a crowd she always feels alone (D-) Counting up the hour`s, days , and minutes just to get back home To her private sanctuary , with its own dark space to roam She´s walked this road alone so many times Dogs barking, sierens howling, as the church bell chimes Reminds her the that city is still fast asleep chorus outro 3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
garybrun Posted March 7 Share Posted March 7 Well done Paul. Lyrics are great. Somehow reminds somehow of Glen Cambell ? 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cakeboy Posted March 7 Share Posted March 7 Very good. Very balanced 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lynn Wilson Posted March 7 Share Posted March 7 Good job, Paul! You got your message across very well. Keep up the good work! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SUPAREELS Posted March 8 Share Posted March 8 Hi Paul, I am a lyrics guy, For me I think that the overall song needs work ( as you already know ) but the lyric is spot on. I read through them twice before I listened to the work, and FWIW, I think it's a great message. It can relate to a lot of people with addiction too ... and more .. it's a shame so much talent is hidden away on this site .. Anyway, off the soap box and just to say ..bloody good work, looking forward to the FA ATB Steve 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jack c. Posted March 8 Share Posted March 8 paul i've commented many times about the lose feel in your songs.do you quantize each part of your songs?jack c.nice voice on this song. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paul Bush Posted March 8 Author Share Posted March 8 Well thanks guys for all the nice comments , to be honest this is almost finished , Ive re-recorded the solo and a few bits n pieces here and there and the fade out , as far as quantizing is concerned , i try and keep time with ezdrum (toontracks) patterns , This was a funny one to write I wasn't overly keen on it in the first place..... then I did some re writes and cut bits out etc etc and got in too deep to bin it ..and then adding piano strings , tambourine,shakers and an accordion of all things ..i think i´m running out of idea`s..... thanks once again..P 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paul Bush Posted March 9 Author Share Posted March 9 17 hours ago, Supa Reels said: Hi Paul, I am a lyrics guy, For me I think that the overall song needs work ( as you already know ) but the lyric is spot on. I read through them twice before I listened to the work, and FWIW, I think it's a great message. It can relate to a lot of people with addiction too ... and more .. it's a shame so much talent is hidden away on this site .. Anyway, off the soap box and just to say ..bloody good work, looking forward to the FA ATB Steve Hi Steve , reading the lyrics before hearing the song that must be like reading a book before seeing the movie? a really unusual way of doing things but I´m going to give it a try you must get a completely different perspective of how the song is going to be , this throws up more questions than answers , are you often disappointed with the song ? films are rarely better than the written word , thanks for commenting cheers P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SUPAREELS Posted March 9 Share Posted March 9 Hello Paul, What a great question! My approach to songwriting is to try and get my idea down, often before playing anything, in the hope I get the song completed and not left halfway through because I ran out of steam ... not always mind, but for me it works well when I have a half baked idea an need to think what I want my message to portray when it's completed. There have been times when I've been a chorus (words only) and was asked to write the song around it, then this approach works a treat ! Next is to find a way for the lyrics to play out with my ability to play the instrument, often, and certainly of late, using plugs ( NI,EZydrum, keys etc ) to get a bare bones song. At this stage I often read the lyric differently than I first thought and change words to match the rhythm. Then comes the mixing and mastering ... Yes it's a bit like reading a book before watching a movie, but you have to bare in mind, all the content of a song is in you head when listening ( unless a video runs along with the work ) ... so there is never disappointment and other peoples approach to writing their song is interesting .. you learn and hopefully get better from the experience . Just for the record I did like this one ? ATB Steve 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paul Bush Posted March 9 Author Share Posted March 9 30 minutes ago, Supa Reels said: Hello Paul, What a great question! My approach to songwriting is to try and get my idea down, often before playing anything, in the hope I get the song completed and not left halfway through because I ran out of steam ... not always mind, but for me it works well when I have a half baked idea an need to think what I want my message to portray when it's completed. There have been times when I've been a chorus (words only) and was asked to write the song around it, then this approach works a treat ! Next is to find a way for the lyrics to play out with my ability to play the instrument, often, and certainly of late, using plugs ( NI,EZydrum, keys etc ) to get a bare bones song. At this stage I often read the lyric differently than I first thought and change words to match the rhythm. Then comes the mixing and mastering ... Yes it's a bit like reading a book before watching a movie, but you have to bare in mind, all the content of a song is in you head when listening ( unless a video runs along with the work ) ... so there is never disappointment and other peoples approach to writing their song is interesting .. you learn and hopefully get better from the experience . Just for the record I did like this one ? ATB Steve Thanks Steve, so its just ``It´s horses for courses ´´ I must admit that i stumble with my English at times as i`m a Brit who lives in Austria (thirty years now) . one of my writing tricks (don't tell anyone) is slipping in a well known saying - proverb into a chorus so it stands out ,. I´m a riff artist and i write from a riff or chord sequence , mumble along until something happens then comes the text , cheers P 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SUPAREELS Posted March 9 Share Posted March 9 1 hour ago, Paul Bush said: Thanks Steve, so its just ``It´s horses for courses ´´ I must admit that i stumble with my English at times as i`m a Brit who lives in Austria (thirty years now) . one of my writing tricks (don't tell anyone) is slipping in a well known saying - proverb into a chorus so it stands out ,. I´m a riff artist and i write from a riff or chord sequence , mumble along until something happens then comes the text , cheers P What works ... Just works, as you infer ... ( Your secret is safe with me ... can't speak for the others though LOL ) 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bajan Blue Posted March 10 Share Posted March 10 Hi Paul - I really likethis - good track And lyrics are spot on - great stuff Nigel 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Old Joad Posted March 12 Share Posted March 12 A nice dark vibe. love the Spanish guitar riff? 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paul Bush Posted March 13 Author Share Posted March 13 16 hours ago, Old Joad said: A nice dark vibe. love the Spanish guitar riff? Its marvellous what a cheap bottle of sangria can do ....cheers for commenting... paul b Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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