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Glenn Stanton

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maybe it needs some cowbell and/or congas in the [disco] bridge ?

 

during one of my Amsterdam trips, i was playing some guitar in my hotel room with the TV on silent. and of course one of Europe's most beloved series "Baywatch" came on, and it was an episode where the main character was holding a drowning victim and feeling despair / anger but no back story. so i created one... sort of.

comments welcome.

106BPM

E Major

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barefoot on a rocky shore
along an ocean of scars
tears wash the soles of our feet
beneath the light of a million stars
it's these experiences that we share
that bind us in love

caught in the undertow
it won't let me go
finding it hard to breathe
but that's alright by me

'cause she's like a beacon high
shining down on me
and me like a lonely sailor
drydocked lost at sea
and this irresistible drive
keeping you and me alive 
feeling love love love

caught in the undertow
it won't let me go
finding it hard to breathe
but that's alright by me

'cause she's like an angel high
watching over me
and me like a broken sinner
bent down on my knees
and this irresistible drive
keeping you and me alive 
feeling love love love

[solo]

ahm--------
yeah we're floating
oh yeah we're floating

{kiss} your lips scorches me
like a thousand degrees
yeah we're burning 
oh yeah we're burning

{hearts} our hearts beat as one
in a slow dance embrace
yeah we're yearning
oh yeah we're yearning

{call} you call out my name
with one final breath
you say ahhhhh

caught in the undertow
it won't let me go
finding it hard to breathe
but that's alright by me

'cause she's like the shining crown
reigning over me
and me like the healing faithful
bowing on the streets
and this irresistible drive
keeping you and me alive 
feeling love love love

caught in the undertow
it won't let me go
finding it hard to breathe
but that's alright by me

barefoot on a rocky shore
along an ocean of scars
tears wash the soles of our feet
beneath the light of a million stars
it's these experiences that we share
that bind us in love

 

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Nice, interesting song!?

Few comments:

  • Vocals (mainly during the intro) seem not entirely in tempo and sometimes before the beat which was a bit distracting. After that the vocals mostly sound in tempo
  • The drums are a bit clean/static could be more lively
  • Love the change with the sax solo, except it sounds dissonant with the chords at moments making it messy. Maybe it is introduced on purpose  to emphasize what the subjects experience. I don't think the song needs that, the unexpected change (sounds a bit hallucinating) is great by itself. If it's a sample, I would change the underlying chords to match it, or use Melodyne to change a few sax notes

Love the changes to the different sections and you have a nice voice!
We need more original songs like this...

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Very interesting and Creative song. I don't think I've heard one like it. This could almost be in the experimental genre. I like the way you returned to the intro before ending it.  Don't think it needs a cowbell in the bridge , maybe a fairly strong 4/4 ride.                  Enjoyed it ..  mark

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