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another year is rushing in so fast already.

below is a link to another song by the Galtieri Brothers.

all comments and criticisms are welcome + as ever all mistakes are mine.

have a good year everyone.

my love

regards

paul

 

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Pretty song Paul, you need to smarten up the vocal a little to make it work, try doubling the track count to thicken it, always remember that breathing and singing is an art unto itself ..JMO 😉

 

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Pretty good there Paul. I think the vocal is a little shaky, who am I to talk? It might help to put some light chorusing on it. Nice melody!

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Thanks Will,

I will give the Chorusing trick a try next time I look at this song.

I like to think it's the emotion I'm putting into the song that makes it a little shaky ... honest! 😉

Thank you for listening and the good advice.

regards

paul

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Hi Paul - hope you are well mate.

This is really nice and I like the vocal - I agree with you that it conveys the emotion well.

The only thing I would add is some vocal harmonies here and there.

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Hey Paul

Pretty song, esp the guitar solo. The tempo might be too slow. Seemed to me like the melody and lyrics aren't matching up, like you're trying to stretch out a verse into too many measures.  Other than that, I liked the sentiment which came out nicely.

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Great tune. These ballad type deals are really where vocalists can show their chops. Such a slow pace, with  no where to hide. You do a decent job of it, actually. Do you know of any killer vocalists who might like to dig into this excellent tune? I'd agree on the comments advising you to thicken. 

 

You have so many sustains in the vocal, you might shorten them? I dunno. Your vocal has a charm to it as it is. 

Kind of depends on what you want to do with this tune.

 

The ending kind of bailed out on me. MAybe a fade out or something?

 

No matter what, nice tune.

 

cheers,

-Tom

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Hi Daryl,

Thanks for listening, I will try some harmonies on my next pass. Backing vocals and harmonies really do bring songs to life but I do struggle to come up with these.

Hi Bjorn,

Thanks for your comments, it was fast enough for me when playing the main guitar part all way through believe me 😉 I take your point about the verse seeming stretched but it worked out that way as I was going for a sort of dirge but in a more positive way.

Hi Tom,

Thank you for taking the time to listen, I like the idea of a fade and will try it next time I get back to this song. I have always thought of my singing as really demo-ing my songs for tune purposes + I am always waiting for a better vocalist to take my place but don't know any who will give it a go - I'll keep searching though.

Thank you all for taking the time to listen and comment it is really appreciated.

regards

paul

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Really like the melody and the arrangement. Nice, gentle, a bit hynpotic. The vocal work wavered a little in some parts, and that did distract me a bit - must be honest about that. However, your voice has a nice timbre to it, and I can see it really working well in this song with a bit more steadiness.

Overall, the vibe of the song was quite charming, and I did enjoy it. 

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Hi Starise,

Thank you for listening it is really appreciated, glad you like my guitar playing.

Hi Amicus,

Thank you for your kind comments, I will try to improve the vocal next time I have a look at this song.

Thank you both for listening and commenting, it is really appreciated.

regards

paul

 

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The way you sang the song sounds very sincere.  Nice one.  I just watched antiques roadshow from Birmingham yesterday on you boob.  You live there?  Nice town.

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Hi David,

Thanks for listening, yes we come from Birmingham - a nice place to live.

Hi Douglas,

Thank you for your kind comments, glad you liked the song.

Thank you both for your feedback and for listening, it is really appreciated.

regards,

paul

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What a very sincere and pretty song!  I love it when that keyboard (?) comes in.  Actually, I think that you have done a right nice job on the vocals.  It is delivered in a very honest style and brings out an image (at least to me) of a guy all by himself declaring his feelings for a special one in front of the whole darn world.  Nicely done mate!!!

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I like this, yes it could do with a few tweaks on the vocal, some harmonies would be nice, love the sound of that acoustic. 

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I like it too. I'm not an expert on how to tweak it so I'll just leave it at that I like it :)

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On 1/15/2019 at 3:05 PM, bjornpdx said:

Hey Paul

Pretty song, esp the guitar solo. The tempo might be too slow. Seemed to me like the melody and lyrics aren't matching up, like you're trying to stretch out a verse into too many measures.  Other than that, I liked the sentiment which came out nicely.

I like much about this song, especially the melody.  However, I agree with Bjorn about the tempo;  it could be sped up several bpm and still convey the message well.  I believe it would help the solo vocal by tightening the phrasing and eliminating the long, stretched out syllables of the words.  Otherwise, I've listened to several of your songs over the years, and you guys keep producing better and better mixes.  This one is as loud as any commercial product, so you have mastered that technique over time.  Good luck guys and have a prosperous new year!

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Hi Freddy,

You've hit the nail on the head and got exactly what I was trying to convey.

Hi Wookie,

Glad you like the sound of the guitar + thanks for your suggestion regarding the vocals.

Hi InstrEd,

Thank you for listening and commenting, I'm no expert tweaker either!

Hi Lynn,

Glad to hear from you + I will try a faster tempo on my next pass to see if it suits better.

Thank you all for listening and commenting, it means a lot.

regards,

paul

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