Bapu 4,891 Posted November 13, 2021 Needs some build up of additional instruments added along the way to increase interest IMO. Changeups were nice but took way to long to get there. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
jack c. 710 Posted November 13, 2021 6 hours ago, Bapu said: Needs some build up of additional instruments thanks for listen/comments.jack c. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
PhonoBrainer 1,819 Posted November 13, 2021 I could hear a little Robin Trower influence in the vocals? Or maybe Fred Frith? I could hear a full stop gospel choir in call-and-response. Very cool groove all the way through. I agree there's more meat to hang on these fine bones somehow. All set for it. Mix wise it sounds like you have added an eq bump for air, to the hi-hats/cymbals, and it might be worth pulling it back a bit. ? Very solid groove, sir. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Boomin36Beatz 55 Posted November 13, 2021 the melody reminds me on an old Bruce Lee Kung Fu movie. Like it. All the Best Drama Baba Beats Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
bjornpdx 1,005 Posted November 14, 2021 Took a little too long to get to the main verse and there's a lot of measures where nothing happens. Otherwise, promising song. You're really prolific. Are these songs you've put aside for a while and now finishing up? -Bjorn Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Makke 300 Posted November 14, 2021 Cool! Enjoyable groove through the song. sounds nice. In my opinion more chord changes here and there could fit well. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
jack c. 710 Posted November 14, 2021 15 hours ago, PhonoBrainer said: Robin Trower influence in the vocals? Or maybe Fred Frith? thanks for listen/comments.i don't know those guys.jack c. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
jack c. 710 Posted November 14, 2021 2 hours ago, Makke said: In my opinion more chord changes here and there could fit well. thanks for listen/comments.jack c. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
jack c. 710 Posted November 14, 2021 15 hours ago, Boomin36Beatz said: the melody reminds me on an old Bruce Lee Kung Fu movie. thanks for listen/comments.inspired by mr. brown.jack c. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
jack c. 710 Posted November 14, 2021 13 hours ago, bjornpdx said: You're really prolific. Are these songs you've put aside for a while and now finishing up? mr. brown inspired.thanks for compliment.for decades i longed to record music so now all of me songs are just written and recorded by what i see,hear,think of,and lots from me life experiences. jack c. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
mark skinner 647 Posted November 14, 2021 I loved that driving funk groove. Several places a key change would be nice. All midi ? Enjoyed it .. mark Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
jack c. 710 Posted November 14, 2021 4 hours ago, mark skinner said: All midi ? i played funky chords on me carvin guitar.thanks for listen/comments.jack c. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kevin Walsh 214 Posted November 14, 2021 (edited) I agree with what's been said with the exception of one thing: soul to soul bomp bomp chop! Edited November 14, 2021 by Kevin Walsh Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
daryl1968 442 Posted November 15, 2021 Definitely cut to the vocal earlier cos wants it gets going, it's a great groove and melody. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
jack c. 710 Posted November 15, 2021 17 hours ago, Kevin Walsh said: I agree with what's been said with the exception of one thing: soul to soul bomp bomp chop! Definitely cut to the vocal earlier cos wants it gets going, it's a great groove and melody. thanks mates.jack c. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Douglas Kirby 790 Posted November 15, 2021 This is a cool groove and melody - the length seems to indicate that it's an album cut - nothing wrong with that. I liked your vocal on this one. I agree with what was mentioned above - it could use some changes coming in earlier. I listened through headphones on my laptop - the volume is really low - not sure what your levels are on mix-down. Your stuff is always interesting to listen to. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
jack c. 710 Posted November 16, 2021 16 hours ago, Douglas Kirby said: your stuff is always interesting to listen to. thanks mate.jack c. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites