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A Man I Cannot Be


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This is a pop song about a man who can't show his true feelings for a woman he likes. 

A Man I Cannot Be

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I acted the fool, really wasn't me
I really love you, didn't want you to see
I pretended to be a man who wasn't me.

I pretended to be difficult
I needed to believe I didn't love you
I need you to see a man that isn't me.

I pretended I don't care, you are unaware
My lying eyes can't hide what I feel inside.
A man you cannot see

Can't hide those lying eyes x4

I pretended I don't care, you are unaware
My lying eyes can't hide what I feel inside.
A man I cannot be.

Can't hide those lying eyes x 4

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Thanks Wookie. I plan to go over it again. My voice isn't that good on this. The reverb is covering some of that up.  I'm sick of it right now. Hopefully I'll mix it some more when I can stand to listen to it again lol. I've heard it like 500 times. I tried just about every trick I know on the vox and I just couldn't get it to pop the way I wanted.

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Tim, whether or not you think this is finished, it's vastly different from what I've heard from you.  Don't give up on this because the lyrics are quite good.  I've had songs that just didn't make sense until one day when I had that epiphany that changed everything.  If it doesn't come right away, move on to the next song.   Have a prosperous and creative new year!

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@Lynn WilsonThanks for those words . I wrote this song for a competition. I'm not sure how it will place.  I have a lot of respect for anyone mixing pop/rock. Seems to take more effort for me than simple acoustic tunes. I made some further changes to the vox. It isn't a chart topper but yeah, I'll keep it around and thanks again.

@Kevin Walsh I hear you on this. I made some timing adjustments to the vox in relation to the music. Thanks!

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I thought it sounded good Tim! I've only heard Celtic folk type stuff from you before, so this is definitely a change! It's a good change though. I like the beat. It's got some nice deep lows without being muddy. I thought your voice sounded soulful, and I like the little Rhodes piano solos in there. Lots of stereo interplay going on. Very nice mix as well. Good job!

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