Kevin Walsh Posted November 1, 2020 Share Posted November 1, 2020 (edited) I just finished this one this evening. This one was tough for me. It turned into an exercise in how to put some urgency and energy into an 80 bpm song. Your comments and critique on the mix is most welcome. Update: New mix, taking care of the scritchy thing and some levels with lows and leads. Also, I borrowed a page from George Martin and sped up the mix to about 84 bpm. World of difference. Should have started there! Oh yeah, here's the lyrics. Gone, Baby, Gone Kevin Walsh 10/28/2020 verse 1 two men by a broken shack two go in but one comes back yeah we know what's going on that man was here but now he's gone chorus ooh yeah he's gone baby gone ooh yeah he's gone baby gone baby gone verse 2 she stood framed in black and white the kind of luck that fades at night the room beyond the door was bright two steps she knew would change her life chorus ooh yeah he's gone baby gone ooh yeah he's gone baby gone baby gone verse 3 she claimed she had second site she said the spirits came at night heard their cries beyond the grave didn't know which one to save ooh yeah he's gone baby gone ooh yeah he's gone baby gone baby gone ooh yeah he's gone baby gone ooh yeah he's gone baby gone baby gone Edited November 1, 2020 by Kevin Walsh 3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KSband Posted November 1, 2020 Share Posted November 1, 2020 I like this song, good detailed arrangement too. My only niggle is the scratchy sounding guitar (I think it's the guitar) on the left, not sure if that's how you wanted it to sound but it seems a little distracting. The groove reminds me of a Bonamassa song. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin Walsh Posted November 1, 2020 Author Share Posted November 1, 2020 Yes, that's an acoustic guitar, its supposed to be a feature, not a bug. 😀 Thats exactly the kind of feedback I'm looking for, thank you Kurt! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Douglas Kirby Posted November 2, 2020 Share Posted November 2, 2020 Cool song and I really liked your vocal on this - the vocal reminded me a bit of Stephen Stills. Regarding the mix - I thought it could use a bit more punch, if that makes sense - just my two cents. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin Walsh Posted November 3, 2020 Author Share Posted November 3, 2020 Thanks for listening and I appreciate your critique! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bjornpdx Posted November 5, 2020 Share Posted November 5, 2020 I tend to start a song at too slow of a tempo which I don't even notice until someone points it out. And then like you said it makes a big difference to bump it up a few BPM. The lyrics seem like they relate to a real life event. I'm not sure what's going on but that just adds to the mystery and your voice fits the theme very well. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeeringAmps Posted November 6, 2020 Share Posted November 6, 2020 (edited) On 11/2/2020 at 1:16 PM, Douglas Kirby said: vocal reminded me a bit of Stephen Stills I can see that. Now he needs some extra voices in the chorus (think Nash and Crosby; that's what makes Stills' vocals work so well) No one has mentioned (WT hey?) the "breakdown" there at 2:04ish; very cool! All in on this one Kevin; 👍's and toes! t Edited November 6, 2020 by DeeringAmps Spelling 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thegaltieribrothers Posted November 6, 2020 Share Posted November 6, 2020 Hi Kevin, Really cool song + love the 'scratchy' guitar and excellent guitar licks throughout. Thanks for sharing. Good Job! regards Paul Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin Walsh Posted November 9, 2020 Author Share Posted November 9, 2020 On 11/6/2020 at 3:08 PM, thegaltieribrothers said: Hi Kevin, Really cool song + love the 'scratchy' guitar and excellent guitar licks throughout. Thanks for sharing. Good Job! regards Paul Thank you, Paul! I appreciate you chiming in! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin Walsh Posted November 9, 2020 Author Share Posted November 9, 2020 On 11/5/2020 at 5:24 PM, bjornpdx said: I tend to start a song at too slow of a tempo which I don't even notice until someone points it out. And then like you said it makes a big difference to bump it up a few BPM. The lyrics seem like they relate to a real life event. I'm not sure what's going on but that just adds to the mystery and your voice fits the theme very well. Thank you bjorn, I'm always doing that too. I guess the lyrics do relate to a life event, but not mine. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mark skinner Posted November 9, 2020 Share Posted November 9, 2020 Kevin , I loved "Everything" about this song. Great mix and blend of electric and acoustic. mark Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin Walsh Posted November 9, 2020 Author Share Posted November 9, 2020 On 11/6/2020 at 10:06 AM, DeeringAmps said: I can see that. Now he needs some extra voices in the chorus (think Nash and Crosby; that's what makes Stills' vocals work so well) No one has mentioned (WT hey?) the "breakdown" there at 2:04ish; very cool! All in on this one Kevin; 👍's and toes! t Thanks for giving it chance! I'm really glad you dug it, thank you! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin Walsh Posted November 9, 2020 Author Share Posted November 9, 2020 42 minutes ago, mark skinner said: Kevin , I loved "Everything" about this song. Great mix and blend of electric and acoustic. mark Thank you, Mark, I appreciate you taking the time to listen! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kennywtelejazz Posted November 10, 2020 Share Posted November 10, 2020 Hey I liked your tune Kevin ! Has a nice Swamp Rock type of vibe going for it ... Sounds clean almost a little too clean in places ( some of the guitars ) I like when you added a little crunch to a few of the guitars as the song played through .. Yeah the vocals fit for sure ...overall your song was genuine sounding ... this was a good listen Kenny Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
X-53mph Posted November 10, 2020 Share Posted November 10, 2020 Kevin, I really like the vibe of the verses, and the electric guitar fills are great. As Kurt said above, the acoustic seems to be messing with the mix. It might even be slightly off time/unaligned with the other tracks. I'd either tone it down or redo it. My biggest (and possibly most painful for you) word of advice would be to rework the chorus. It isn't strong enough as is. It could be so much better with a stronger chorus. Either more complexity in the vocal/musical arrangement - (think of Rolling Stones Citadel) or a rewrite. I hope this doesn't upset you as I imagine it is a very personal song, and I do love the vibe and tone of your voice. All the best Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin Walsh Posted November 10, 2020 Author Share Posted November 10, 2020 32 minutes ago, Philip G Hunt said: Kevin, I really like the vibe of the verses, and the electric guitar fills are great. As Kurt said above, the acoustic seems to be messing with the mix. It might even be slightly off time/unaligned with the other tracks. I'd either tone it down or redo it. My biggest (and possibly most painful for you) word of advice would be to rework the chorus. It isn't strong enough as is. It could be so much better with a stronger chorus. Either more complexity in the vocal/musical arrangement - (think of Rolling Stones Citadel) or a rewrite. I hope this doesn't upset you as I imagine it is a very personal song, and I do love the vibe and tone of your voice. All the best Philip, fear not, I'm very grateful for your feedback. I've been thinking along the same lines with respect to the arrangement. I struggle to push a song out of the path that it's laid for itself, and this one seemed to want a simple repetitive vibe. I think I have to let this one sit for some time until the grooves in my brain fade a bit and allows me to see other possibilities for it. Thanks again for your criticism, it's very welcome indeed. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin Walsh Posted November 10, 2020 Author Share Posted November 10, 2020 4 hours ago, kennywtelejazz said: Hey I liked your tune Kevin ! Has a nice Swamp Rock type of vibe going for it ... Sounds clean almost a little too clean in places ( some of the guitars ) I like when you added a little crunch to a few of the guitars as the song played through .. Yeah the vocals fit for sure ...overall your song was genuine sounding ... this was a good listen Kenny Thank you, Kenny, I'm glad to hear you liked it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daryl1968 Posted November 10, 2020 Share Posted November 10, 2020 very cool tune Kevin - love the atmosphere that you've created and all of the rhythmic elements. I'm not sure if I'm hearing things but there may be some slight timing issues (bass/vocals) when it goes into the Gone Baby Gone (chorus) part that makes that part go a little flat energy-wise? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin Walsh Posted November 13, 2020 Author Share Posted November 13, 2020 On 11/10/2020 at 7:14 AM, daryl1968 said: very cool tune Kevin - love the atmosphere that you've created and all of the rhythmic elements. I'm not sure if I'm hearing things but there may be some slight timing issues (bass/vocals) when it goes into the Gone Baby Gone (chorus) part that makes that part go a little flat energy-wise? Thank you Daryl, I appreciate you listening closely enough to find that! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Supa Reels Posted November 14, 2020 Share Posted November 14, 2020 The style of this song is that your vocal falls a little behind the beat, something I love about a lot of your stuff, and I think Daryl has it right as the cumulative result appears as though there is a slight time issue, yep I would say the bass is off a tad but I wouldn't loose sleep over it. Scratchy guitar ? just mix it with a little less high end on the acoustic see how that sounds ...but again, all good really. I believe you know the chorus needs beefing up as that's the message the whole lyric brings you to, so that needs work ... a female vocalist D/T at say 1/3rd left and right in the mix and you harmonizing ...well, who knows, could work .. But for me this sounded great in the studio ..love it and great to hear another KW song 👍 S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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