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14 minutes ago, Wookiee said:
When I listen to this I get a scratching sound like you have used iZotope's Vinyl I ask just to check if it was an issue my end. as all other Audio plays back fine.
Alright. No idea what tools the guy who has mixed has used, but I can't relate to what you're describing.
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1 hour ago, Wookiee said:
@Critical Chameleon Before I say anything more do you have some form of Vinyl emulation on this?
I have no idea what that means
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Thanks for the feedback guys. Always good to hear that the hard work has been paying off and hopefully that my singing is improving too hehe
2 hours ago, mark skinner said:I thought that was a Very nice and clear mix. The chorus and treatment of it was Fantastic! You still captured a great hip hop vibe. I've often wondered where you are from , but could never put my finger on your accent after listening to your older songs . Great job .. mark
I'm Swedish, but I rarely speak it since I live in Malta.
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Hey guys!
Hope all is well Been forever since I released something new as I have a ton of work on my plate.Here's a new, relaxed track though. No hiphop this time. Experimenting some more with singing.
Hope you enjoy. Guy who mixed this did an amazing job in my opinion.
Verse 1
Isn't it true, that it's within you
Somewhere maybe locked inside
I often wish that I knew, but it's in me too
Definitely locked inside
I'm holding the key it's like, I can be free but IDo not believe it, oh why? It's complicated…
The mess that I've created, I'm addicted to this state and
I guess I love it, but I hate it…
ChorusI wanna fly away
Fly
Out of this prison cage
Fly away
Fly
To revisit my missing days
Verse 2Can I see, what you see?
Of course, there is a way for all)
Remind me, how I can feel
The things you make you make 'em small
It isn't that hard, just stop thinking that's all
There isn't a wall that can't fall, no… oh, I've been waiting
There's this picture I've been painting of the beauty when it's raining
It's time to show it, yo I'm escaping
Chorus
Tonight I fly away
Fly
Out of this prison cage
This is the night tonight
Fly away
Fly
To revisit my missing days
Oh yes tonight I fly
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Thanks a lot guys, appreciate everything you're saying, much valued.
@bjornpdx yeah, I've had a early mid-life crisis forever. Planning on bringing it in to my mid late-life crisis!This song I wrote 1½ years ago. Things are a little different now, though I've always been lost in one way or another.
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To be honest, I'd rather have people stop being offended by everything all the time these days as human beings are a joke.
But for the sake of receiving feedback for nothing, which I'm thankful of, sure thing. I could do that.- 1
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Hey guys!
Been working on a new track I wouldn't mind getting some feedback on. Don't have a lot of people listening to my tracks, but you guys always seem to be commenting which is highly appreciatedIntro.
“It’s time to move to the stage everyone”
“Time for Critical Comedian”Comedian? Is she saying comedian?
I can’t believe this shit, god damnit
What the… ma… let’s just get this over with
Mic test, one two, alrightYou know, I've heard stories (“here we go again”)
These ***** stories (“bloody cry baby”)
A million times
Everyone keeps telling them
D’you know what they say?Chorus.
They say there's a place for everyone
They say so, but I can't seem to find my way
I can't seem to find my way
I can't seem to find my way
I'm so damn lostVerse 1.
Ever since a child I've had the darkness concern me
I always knew that it was part of the journey
But aging back then it seemed so far to be thirty
It isn't anymore and now I'm starting to worryLooking at the stars, at the dark and uncertain
How should I play all the cards I've been earnin'?
Somebody tell me cuz my heart isn't workin'
Yeah, I've painted pictures, but the art is all blurry
Jeez..... I'm all over the place
Doesn’t this damn roller coaster have brakes?
One day I'm a mess the next I'm overly great
Every time I smell success it's like that odor is fake
.......Now I'm changed and I'm feeling weak
Cuz I don't even know what succeeding means
.......I always preach to believe in dreams, but
I'm no longer sure if mine's misleading meChorus.
They say there's a place for everyone
They say so, but I can't seem to find my way
I can't seem to find my way
I can't seem to find my way
I'm so damn lostThey say there's a place for everyone
They say so, but I can't seem to find my way
I can't seem to find my way
I can't seem to find my way
I'm so damn lostVerse 2.
It seems like all my life I've been searching but blind
I've been looking when I dunno what I'm searching to find
I've, been on trips like surfing my mind
Had a visit to the void and saw the perfect divineI've faced death, yep, left earth all behind
Yet, I don't get, what's worthy my time, let's
Ask the voices that are lurking inside
Get a hundred different answers now which version am I?Money, fame and glory?
Or is a simple way my story?
How the hell can I tell how it happily ends?
Should I just spend all my time with my family and friends?I'm overwhelmed................. stocked with emotion
And still I feel like nothing but a drop in the ocean
I really wish I could stop for a moment
Though life may be cold, but the clock's never frozenChorus.
They say there's a place for everyone
They say so, but I can't seem to find my way
I can't seem to find my way
I can't seem to find my way
I'm so damn lostThey say there's a place for everyone
They say so, but I can't seem to find my way
I can't seem to find my way
I can't seem to find my way
I'm so damn lostOutro.
Wow… not a single reaction
The hell is this crowd?
I gotta get outta here
Now where the *****’s the exit?Yo, anyone know how to get out of this mall?
“Not me mate, I’m also lost”
“Yeah, me too”
“Dude, we’re all lost” -
Thanks guys, appreciate it!
I uploaded the master now instead -
Hey guys!
Hope all of you are doing well
Got this track I previously posted all done now!Lyrics:Intro
*Humming to melody*
*Doorbell*
Just a second, be right there
*Bang, bang, bang*
I'm coming, I'm coming, relax... jeez
*Door opening*
Oh… it's you
The ***** do you want?
Nah, I don't wanna hear you out
Please, just leave
Verse 1
Please, leave, I can't believe I have to sit this through
You're making me suffer and you agreed that we should quit it too
Seeing each other, you had to do it again didn't you?
Come to my home even though you know I have forbidden you
Remember last time I laughed at your acts and had you ridiculed?
And yet you're back, how the hell do I get rid of you?
You're not supposed to be here, I know that we've been tight
But that relationship has sailed, you know the reasons why
You never treat me right, you beef, we fight, oh don’t apologize
You're such a mess I guess obsessed with blowing smoke behind my eyes
I couldn’t care less if you meant it, all I know is I'm alright
When I'm alone, please just go stop growing lies inside my mind
But it's not easy is it? Listen, it's smart to say farewell
We share the same visions these visits make it harder for ourselves
But how can you leave me when you're a part of all my cells?
I need help, here I'm sittin' and just talking to myself
Chorus
We share this bruise
So why do you appear so cruel?
How are you gonna carry through?
If you aren't there for you
And if it's scarin’ you
You gotta use that fear as fuel
You aren't gonna carry through
If you aren’t, there for you
Verse 2
Listen
I've wandered this earth as blind, searching for signs
I used to think there's nothing worse having no purpose in life
But I was wrong cuz what is worse and yes I'm certain this time
Is to hide from your own purpose cuz the hurdles are high
To realize you run in circles, and work a disguise
You find so perfect, but it isn't and the person inside
Knows that it isn't and this person plays games versus your mind
I've felt pain, but I swear nothing can hurt me like I
I don't know why I'm such a burden and can't service my life
How it is a nurturing guy can turn and just murder my rhymes
You know my body's burning with pride as I finish a lyric
I feel terrific, optimistic, the sky is the limit
Then in a blink of an eye I begin to mimic this critic
The next minute I'm picnicking with a sinister cynic
It's sickening, I'm listening, say I handle it okay
This belittling but ***** it man I stand in my own way
Chorus
We share this bruise
So why do you appear so cruel?
How are you gonna carry through?
If you aren't there for you
And if it's scarin’ you
You gotta use that fear as fuel
You aren't gonna carry through
If you aren’t, there for you
Outro
*Door slamming*
Get the ***** out of here
I don't wanna hear from you ever again
Just get the ***** out of my head
Jesus *****ing Christ man
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1 hour ago, bjornpdx said:
..and we fought day and night
I lose part of the rhyme then. I need to rhyme with smoke/know.
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Is it possible though to write
"You weren't treating me right and we couldn't go without a fight"?
Even if it's not perfect english is the meaning behind the words understandable?Hm, came up with an alternative. Probably even better actually. Gotta let it sink in, though recording tomorrow!
"You weren’t treating me right, is this a joke to you? Don't smile!"
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Yeah, I'll re-record it for sure. Also put a note to myself to think about this in the future. My notes are getting long
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55 minutes ago, mark skinner said:
You do better with English than a lot of people I know that were born here ! There are a couple of words that Really need fixing , and they're both in the chorus. The chorus is a real high spot in this song , and since it repeats , it really needs to be right. 1. You cannot hear the word "how" in the line "How are you gonna carry through" 2. It sounds almost like you're saying scarin' "Jew" in the line "and if its scarin' You". The "N" from scariN is getting included in the word Jew also. It's coming out something like "nJew". I'm only listening on a laptop with earbuds , but this is what I'm hearing. I hope this helps. Good song , Good luck .. mark
Thanks, Mark! Just the feedback I was looking for, really appreciate it.
Question is though, how do I make a difference between "you" and "jew".
Jew is more like a d-sound at the beginning right? So I'll try to eliminate that as much as I can?
Anyway, I'll see what I can do about it!
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Hey guys, hope all is well!
I'm working on a new track and it's coming together nicely, I think. I'm doing one last recording session on Sunday before shipping this to mixing.Before doing so I was hoping to get some feedback on text and pronunciation mainly. Since English isn't my mother tounge I just want to make sure I'm not doing any fatal mistakes.
I'm yet to add the outro, but other than that everything is included. However, I think I'm changing the lyrics in the first verse. This part (in bold):
You're not supposed to be here, I know that we've been tight
But that relationship has sailed, you know the reasons whyYou weren't treating me right and we couldn't go without a fight
You're such a mess I guess obsessed with blowing smoke behind my eyes
I don't think you can say it like this, can you? What I want to say is that we always fought. But for that to make sense I would have to write like "we couldn't go a day without fight", right? That doesn't work flow-wise so what I'm thinking is changing it to:You're not supposed to be here, I know that we've been tight
But that relationship has sailed, you know the reasons whyYou weren't treating me right and that's why we broke up in a fight
You're such a mess I guess obsessed with blowing smoke behind my eyesHere are the full lyrics:
Intro.
*Humming to melody*
*Doorbell*
Just a second, be right there
*Bang, bang, bang*
I'm coming, I'm coming, relax, jeez
*Door opening*
Oh, it's you
The ***** do you want?
Nah, I don't want to hear you out
Please, just leave
Verse 1.
Please, leave, I can't believe I have to sit this through
You're making me suffer and you agreed that we should quit it too
Seeing each other, you had to do it again didn't you?
Come to my home even though you know I have forbidden you
Remember last time I laughed at your acts and had you ridiculed?
And yet you're back, how the hell do I get rid of you?
You're not supposed to be here, I know that we've been tight
But that relationship has sailed, you know the reasons why
You weren't treating me right and that's why we broke up in a fight
You're such a mess I guess obsessed with blowing smoke behind my eyes
I couldn't care less if you meant it, all I know is I'm alright
When I'm alone, please just go stop growing lies inside my mind
But it's not easy is it? Listen, it's smart to say farewell
We share the same visions these visits make it harder for ourselves
But how can you leave me when you're a part of all my cells?
I need help, here I'm sittin' and just talking to myself
Chorus.
We share this bruise
So why do you appear so cruel?
How are you gonna carry through?
If you aren't there for you
And if it's scarin’ you
You gotta use that fear as fuel
You aren't gonna carry through
If you aren’t, there for you
Verse 2.
Listen
I've wandered this earth as blind, searching for signs
I used to think there's nothing worse having no purpose in life
But I was wrong cuz what is worse and yes I'm certain this time
Is to hide from your own purpose cuz the hurdles are high
To realize you run in circles, and work a disguise
You find so perfect, but it isn't and the person inside
Knows that it isn't and this person plays games versus your mind
I've felt pain, but I swear nothing can hurt me like I
I don't know why I'm such a burden and can't service my life
How it is a nurturing guy can turn and just murder my rhymes
You know my body's burning with pride as I finish a lyric
I feel terrific, optimistic, the sky is the limit
Then in a blink of an eye I begin to mimic this critic
The next minute I'm picnicking with a sinister cynic
It's sickening, I'm listening, say I handle it okay
This belittling but ***** it man I stand in my own way
Chorus.
We share this bruise
So why do you appear so cruel?
How are you gonna carry through?
If you aren't there for you
And if it's scarin’ you
You gotta use that fear as fuel
You aren't gonna carry through
If you aren’t, there for you
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Hey guys,
Hope you're all doing well
Got a new track I've been working on that I'd really appreciate feedback on if you got a few minutes to spare.
EDIT:
Song all done now and fully mastered!
Intro
Hey bae
This is all for you
I got something to say
And it goes something like thisVerse 1
I've been trying, to paint a perfect world
But as I try I only get a purple blur
I say the dumbest things, when feeling blue
I'm using too much red when I'm coloringI don't know why cuz there's no need to draw no picture
I got you here and that is all that I could wish for
I don't show it enough, you ain't feeling my art
Well here's a key to my heart, now I'm opening upIntro to chorus
For all the times that you've doubted me (baby)
If it's really that hard to see
Well if it is turn the sound up hear me out now
If it is turn the sound up hear me out now (baby)
As I'm I singing this loud and freeChorus
I love you
I love you
I love you baby, yay, yay, oohI love you (Yeah, believe it boo)
I love you (And everything you do)
I love you baby, yay, yay, oohVerse 2
Tryna get this on your mind with such a catchy tune
But if a song isn't enough then I'm rap it too
I love you, everything that I'm attracted to
You kinda gotta it you're the whole entire package booThe sweetest rack of boobs, your body's fit, that head of yours
Well, it's fantastic too, much more than it gets credit for
Your brain's amazing, you're so clever if I never swore
I wouldn't rate then I would say you couldn't get a better scoreI wish I said it more
Intro to chorus
For all the times that you've doubted me (baby)
If it's really that hard to see
Well if it is turn the sound up hear me out now
If it is turn the sound up hear me out now (baby)
As I'm I singing this loud and freeChorus
I love you
I love you
I love you baby, yay, yay, oohI love you (Yeah, believe it boo)
I love you (And everything you do)
I love you baby, yay, yay, oohBreak
Hey yeeeeeeah, ahaaaa
I love you baby, you're amazing
I had a taste and now I'm craving
Aahaaa, ah yeah
You make me crazy, I want you daily
There is no maybe, you're my ladyVerse 3
At times you're asking me why, we're on a path you and I
You have me scratching my mind, I'm attached to your life
Cuz you're supportive and kind, and that's a draft to describe
Your caring nature, babe your major compassionate sidePlus you're adventurous of course, and your fashion is fine
I love that courage of yours, it's really matching your drive
You never lie, we’re playing games, but just on laptops online
I feel alive you're making me smile when we are passing the timeI love your laughter, kicking back, relaxing, chatter even if I'm acting
I don't but I do in fact and every dish you do is smashing
Yeah, your food's fantastic, you got a juicy ***** well
It's not just the booty you're a beauty, yeah you're truly dazzling
No make-up needed to be catching my eye
I'll eat you up bae, but hey, I gotta ration my rhymes
I hate to say it but the beat is fast it's flashing me by
Sixteen bars spit and this was just a fraction of why
I'm the happiest guyIntro to chorus
For all the times that you've doubted me (baby)
If it's really that hard to see
Well if it is turn the sound up hear me out now
If it is turn the sound up hear me out now (baby)
As I'm I singing this loud
As I'm I singing this loud
As I'm I singing this loud and freeChorus
I love you
I love you
I love you baby, yay, yay, oohI love you (Yeah, believe it boo)
I love you (And everything you do)
I love you baby, yay, yay, oohOutro
And it feels good
Yeah
I love you baby
Now and forever
Never doubt itCuz it feels good
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38 minutes ago, DeeringAmps said:
Bjorn pretty well sums it up. Not my genre, but props my man.
Pretty loud now, don't over squish it; just my nickel98 as far as advice goes...
props indeed!
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Thanks!
I forgot to mention it, but this version has a booster plugin on it which is why it is loud. It's not professionally mastered though.- 1
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Yo guys,
Posted the text a while back ago under another nick - got no response Trying again with the song this time. I appreciate any feedback!
This is yet to be masterd, but unless you have anything to add we feel like the mix is done.
Intro
"This isn't good enough"
"You're *****ing useless"
"Tell that bitch off"
"Cut her *****ing head off"
"You're never gonna make it"
"You don't have what it takes"
Chorus
I hear voices calling, in my head they're shouting
Telling me these stories, in my head I'm drowning
Bla, bla, bla there's no day without it
I've gone crazy and I doubt that there's a way around it
Verse 1
Man I'm sick of it, this feels ridiculous
I have a flu where all I do must be meticulous
("Not true"), alright let me rescript this bit
I have no clue how many times that I've rewritten it
I guess precise, nitpicking that's just slightly fitting
Those definitions won't suffice for the life I'm living
.............I have guides and they're unforgiving
I'm fighting off my Hydes but they run this building ("we own it")
This building I've built, the prison I'm in
A system full of bugs always itching my skin
Look............. I can't be satisfied
No matter what I cook I have an appetite
For more that's why I brush 'till my teeth fall out
That's why I'm crushing all my buttons 'till I scream out loud
.............My recipes have a piece of doubt
Cuz that's the way that it must taste to keep my demons proud ("good boy")
Chorus
I hear voices calling, in my head they're shouting
Telling me these stories, in my head I'm drowning
Bla, bla, bla there's no day without it
I've gone crazy and I doubt that there's a way around it
I hear voices calling, in my head they're shouting
Telling me these stories, in my head I'm drowning
Bla, bla, bla there's no day without it
I'm a crazy mother *****er there's no way around it
Verse 2
Sometimes I lie, but here's an actual fact
I've had a about a million irrational acts
So when I'm chilling I relax in a bath full of ash
From the bridges that I've burnt in my laughable past
I've grown, my path, is still exposed to smolder
Though, a lot of dough's been loaded in my broken toaster
I'm older, though opposed to homer
My show is still alive ("doh"), the joke's not over
Yeah I smell funny, honey, it's my only odor
I repel, I don't troll, I'm a lonely ogre
Sure you can come for some homemade yogurt
With this tool though you're screwing with a roller coaster ("huh?")
It may be fun but it's a scary ride ("why?")
Ride it too much and you'll be terrified ("why?")
There's no such thing as a merry wife
"Cuz we're in charge and we ain't ever gonna share this guy" ("aaaaaaaaaaaah")
Chorus
I hear voices calling, in my head they're shouting
Telling me these stories, in my head I'm drowning
Bla, bla, bla there's no day without it
I've gone crazy and I doubt that there's a way around it
I hear voices calling, in my head they're shouting
Telling me these stories, in my head I'm drowning
Bla, bla, bla there's no day without it
I'm a crazy mother *****er there's no way around it
Break
There are things that I've said that I've said i wouldn't
With strings I am led to do things I shouldn't
Singing in my head like enchanted I lose it
I attach to the threads and I dance to their music (x2)
Verse 3
So, this day at work while I was jotting words
It suddenly occurred that I got such an urge
I'm not a perv, but yo I need to touch some girls
With breasts or not, I don't give a ***** I'd jerk
Off to furry sheep, just let me squeeze some butt
It's so absurd I dream, of all this freaky stuff
Like serving free drinks after I pee in cups
Like... running up in churches to kick jesus nuts
And beating pups, ***** this beef needs to stop
This isn't me it's just a piece of my demons' plot
Evil *****s, you hear? "We're right next to you"
Don't I already have enough regrets produced?
"We bet you do, but you're a co-pilot"
"And this flight of ours is on a low mileage"
"If we want you to be vile there is no niceness"
"You just shut the ***** up when you're told quiet"
Chorus
I hear voices calling, in my head they're shouting
Telling me these stories, in my head I'm drowning
Bla, bla, bla there's no day without it
I've gone crazy and I doubt that there's a way around it
I hear voices calling, in my head they're shouting
Telling me these stories, in my head I'm drowning
Bla, bla, bla there's no day without it
I'm a crazy mother *****er there's no way around it
Outro
Damn, this shit sounds good as fu...
"No... it doesn't"
Tips on keyboard for beginner?
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Hey guys!
Hope all is well :)
I have no experience at all playing the keyboard, but would love to learn it and maybe 15 years from now own a piano.
The requirements I can think of right now are:
- Portable in the sense that I'm not able to have it up all the time so it has to be stored under the sofa. Then whenever I'm using it I'll put it on my computer desk. A lot of moving back and forth.
- Sturdy as I have cats and they will without a doubt walk on it even if I'd do my best to not make that happen.
- Good sound (an obvious one I guess) and sound close to a piano
Then I was wondering if there are any keyboards which you can sync up to a computer or app to teach you how to play a song? Ultimately, what I'm looking for is that the keys on the keyboards would light up to show you which to press. I'm not sure this is even a thing though, but if it is, I'd definitely want support for such a feature.
Hope anyone can help me out, appreciate it!