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  1. Alright. No idea what tools the guy who has mixed has used, but I can't relate to what you're describing.
  2. Thanks for the feedback guys. Always good to hear that the hard work has been paying off and hopefully that my singing is improving too hehe I'm Swedish, but I rarely speak it since I live in Malta.
  3. Hey guys! Hope all is well Been forever since I released something new as I have a ton of work on my plate. Here's a new, relaxed track though. No hiphop this time. Experimenting some more with singing. Hope you enjoy. Guy who mixed this did an amazing job in my opinion. Verse 1 Isn't it true, that it's within you Somewhere maybe locked inside I often wish that I knew, but it's in me too Definitely locked inside I'm holding the key it's like, I can be free but I Do not believe it, oh why? It's complicated… The mess that I've created, I'm addicted to this state and I guess I love it, but I hate it… Chorus I wanna fly away Fly Out of this prison cage Fly away Fly To revisit my missing days Verse 2 Can I see, what you see? Of course, there is a way for all) Remind me, how I can feel The things you make you make 'em small It isn't that hard, just stop thinking that's all There isn't a wall that can't fall, no… oh, I've been waiting There's this picture I've been painting of the beauty when it's raining It's time to show it, yo I'm escaping Chorus Tonight I fly away Fly Out of this prison cage This is the night tonight Fly away Fly To revisit my missing days Oh yes tonight I fly
  4. Thanks a lot guys, appreciate everything you're saying, much valued. @bjornpdx yeah, I've had a early mid-life crisis forever. Planning on bringing it in to my mid late-life crisis! This song I wrote 1½ years ago. Things are a little different now, though I've always been lost in one way or another.
  5. To be honest, I'd rather have people stop being offended by everything all the time these days as human beings are a joke. But for the sake of receiving feedback for nothing, which I'm thankful of, sure thing. I could do that.
  6. Hey guys! Been working on a new track I wouldn't mind getting some feedback on. Don't have a lot of people listening to my tracks, but you guys always seem to be commenting which is highly appreciated Intro. “It’s time to move to the stage everyone” “Time for Critical Comedian” Comedian? Is she saying comedian? I can’t believe this shit, god damnit What the… ma… let’s just get this over with Mic test, one two, alright You know, I've heard stories (“here we go again”) These ***** stories (“bloody cry baby”) A million times Everyone keeps telling them D’you know what they say? Chorus. They say there's a place for everyone They say so, but I can't seem to find my way I can't seem to find my way I can't seem to find my way I'm so damn lost Verse 1. Ever since a child I've had the darkness concern me I always knew that it was part of the journey But aging back then it seemed so far to be thirty It isn't anymore and now I'm starting to worry Looking at the stars, at the dark and uncertain How should I play all the cards I've been earnin'? Somebody tell me cuz my heart isn't workin' Yeah, I've painted pictures, but the art is all blurry Jeez..... I'm all over the place Doesn’t this damn roller coaster have brakes? One day I'm a mess the next I'm overly great Every time I smell success it's like that odor is fake .......Now I'm changed and I'm feeling weak Cuz I don't even know what succeeding means .......I always preach to believe in dreams, but I'm no longer sure if mine's misleading me Chorus. They say there's a place for everyone They say so, but I can't seem to find my way I can't seem to find my way I can't seem to find my way I'm so damn lost They say there's a place for everyone They say so, but I can't seem to find my way I can't seem to find my way I can't seem to find my way I'm so damn lost Verse 2. It seems like all my life I've been searching but blind I've been looking when I dunno what I'm searching to find I've, been on trips like surfing my mind Had a visit to the void and saw the perfect divine I've faced death, yep, left earth all behind Yet, I don't get, what's worthy my time, let's Ask the voices that are lurking inside Get a hundred different answers now which version am I? Money, fame and glory? Or is a simple way my story? How the hell can I tell how it happily ends? Should I just spend all my time with my family and friends? I'm overwhelmed................. stocked with emotion And still I feel like nothing but a drop in the ocean I really wish I could stop for a moment Though life may be cold, but the clock's never frozen Chorus. They say there's a place for everyone They say so, but I can't seem to find my way I can't seem to find my way I can't seem to find my way I'm so damn lost They say there's a place for everyone They say so, but I can't seem to find my way I can't seem to find my way I can't seem to find my way I'm so damn lost Outro. Wow… not a single reaction The hell is this crowd? I gotta get outta here Now where the *****’s the exit? Yo, anyone know how to get out of this mall? “Not me mate, I’m also lost” “Yeah, me too” “Dude, we’re all lost”
  7. Thanks guys, appreciate it! I uploaded the master now instead
  8. Hey guys! Hope all of you are doing well Got this track I previously posted all done now! Lyrics: Intro *Humming to melody* *Doorbell* Just a second, be right there *Bang, bang, bang* I'm coming, I'm coming, relax... jeez *Door opening* Oh… it's you The ***** do you want? Nah, I don't wanna hear you out Please, just leave Verse 1 Please, leave, I can't believe I have to sit this through You're making me suffer and you agreed that we should quit it too Seeing each other, you had to do it again didn't you? Come to my home even though you know I have forbidden you Remember last time I laughed at your acts and had you ridiculed? And yet you're back, how the hell do I get rid of you? You're not supposed to be here, I know that we've been tight But that relationship has sailed, you know the reasons why You never treat me right, you beef, we fight, oh don’t apologize You're such a mess I guess obsessed with blowing smoke behind my eyes I couldn’t care less if you meant it, all I know is I'm alright When I'm alone, please just go stop growing lies inside my mind But it's not easy is it? Listen, it's smart to say farewell We share the same visions these visits make it harder for ourselves But how can you leave me when you're a part of all my cells? I need help, here I'm sittin' and just talking to myself Chorus We share this bruise So why do you appear so cruel? How are you gonna carry through? If you aren't there for you And if it's scarin’ you You gotta use that fear as fuel You aren't gonna carry through If you aren’t, there for you Verse 2 Listen I've wandered this earth as blind, searching for signs I used to think there's nothing worse having no purpose in life But I was wrong cuz what is worse and yes I'm certain this time Is to hide from your own purpose cuz the hurdles are high To realize you run in circles, and work a disguise You find so perfect, but it isn't and the person inside Knows that it isn't and this person plays games versus your mind I've felt pain, but I swear nothing can hurt me like I I don't know why I'm such a burden and can't service my life How it is a nurturing guy can turn and just murder my rhymes You know my body's burning with pride as I finish a lyric I feel terrific, optimistic, the sky is the limit Then in a blink of an eye I begin to mimic this critic The next minute I'm picnicking with a sinister cynic It's sickening, I'm listening, say I handle it okay This belittling but ***** it man I stand in my own way Chorus We share this bruise So why do you appear so cruel? How are you gonna carry through? If you aren't there for you And if it's scarin’ you You gotta use that fear as fuel You aren't gonna carry through If you aren’t, there for you Outro *Door slamming* Get the ***** out of here I don't wanna hear from you ever again Just get the ***** out of my head Jesus *****ing Christ man
  9. I lose part of the rhyme then. I need to rhyme with smoke/know.
  10. Is it possible though to write "You weren't treating me right and we couldn't go without a fight"? Even if it's not perfect english is the meaning behind the words understandable? Hm, came up with an alternative. Probably even better actually. Gotta let it sink in, though recording tomorrow! "You weren’t treating me right, is this a joke to you? Don't smile!"
  11. Yeah, I'll re-record it for sure. Also put a note to myself to think about this in the future. My notes are getting long
  12. Thanks, Mark! Just the feedback I was looking for, really appreciate it. Question is though, how do I make a difference between "you" and "jew". Jew is more like a d-sound at the beginning right? So I'll try to eliminate that as much as I can? Anyway, I'll see what I can do about it!
  13. Hey guys, hope all is well! I'm working on a new track and it's coming together nicely, I think. I'm doing one last recording session on Sunday before shipping this to mixing. Before doing so I was hoping to get some feedback on text and pronunciation mainly. Since English isn't my mother tounge I just want to make sure I'm not doing any fatal mistakes. I'm yet to add the outro, but other than that everything is included. However, I think I'm changing the lyrics in the first verse. This part (in bold): You're not supposed to be here, I know that we've been tight But that relationship has sailed, you know the reasons why You weren't treating me right and we couldn't go without a fight You're such a mess I guess obsessed with blowing smoke behind my eyes I don't think you can say it like this, can you? What I want to say is that we always fought. But for that to make sense I would have to write like "we couldn't go a day without fight", right? That doesn't work flow-wise so what I'm thinking is changing it to: You're not supposed to be here, I know that we've been tight But that relationship has sailed, you know the reasons why You weren't treating me right and that's why we broke up in a fight You're such a mess I guess obsessed with blowing smoke behind my eyes Here are the full lyrics: Intro. *Humming to melody* *Doorbell* Just a second, be right there *Bang, bang, bang* I'm coming, I'm coming, relax, jeez *Door opening* Oh, it's you The ***** do you want? Nah, I don't want to hear you out Please, just leave Verse 1. Please, leave, I can't believe I have to sit this through You're making me suffer and you agreed that we should quit it too Seeing each other, you had to do it again didn't you? Come to my home even though you know I have forbidden you Remember last time I laughed at your acts and had you ridiculed? And yet you're back, how the hell do I get rid of you? You're not supposed to be here, I know that we've been tight But that relationship has sailed, you know the reasons why You weren't treating me right and that's why we broke up in a fight You're such a mess I guess obsessed with blowing smoke behind my eyes I couldn't care less if you meant it, all I know is I'm alright When I'm alone, please just go stop growing lies inside my mind But it's not easy is it? Listen, it's smart to say farewell We share the same visions these visits make it harder for ourselves But how can you leave me when you're a part of all my cells? I need help, here I'm sittin' and just talking to myself Chorus. We share this bruise So why do you appear so cruel? How are you gonna carry through? If you aren't there for you And if it's scarin’ you You gotta use that fear as fuel You aren't gonna carry through If you aren’t, there for you Verse 2. Listen I've wandered this earth as blind, searching for signs I used to think there's nothing worse having no purpose in life But I was wrong cuz what is worse and yes I'm certain this time Is to hide from your own purpose cuz the hurdles are high To realize you run in circles, and work a disguise You find so perfect, but it isn't and the person inside Knows that it isn't and this person plays games versus your mind I've felt pain, but I swear nothing can hurt me like I I don't know why I'm such a burden and can't service my life How it is a nurturing guy can turn and just murder my rhymes You know my body's burning with pride as I finish a lyric I feel terrific, optimistic, the sky is the limit Then in a blink of an eye I begin to mimic this critic The next minute I'm picnicking with a sinister cynic It's sickening, I'm listening, say I handle it okay This belittling but ***** it man I stand in my own way Chorus. We share this bruise So why do you appear so cruel? How are you gonna carry through? If you aren't there for you And if it's scarin’ you You gotta use that fear as fuel You aren't gonna carry through If you aren’t, there for you
  14. Really happy to hear all of this guys! Big thanks It's great to hear when your hard work pays off. I have the song fully mastered now. There are some improvements from before (mainly break and outro).
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